Argument65 [OB小组]_第7次作业_进口/国产奶酪

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT65 - The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
WORDS: 406          TIME: 00:30:00  + ？        DATE: 2007-7-19 11:39:11

In this argument, the author concludes that to improve profits, they should discontinue stocking imported cheese and concentrate mainly on domestic cheeses in all of their stores. To support this conclusion, the author points out that the five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses last year. The author also cites a survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicating increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. However, this argument suffers from several critical flaws and is therefore unconvincing as it stands.

First, the fact that the five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses last year do not necessarily indicate that all customers would prefer domestic cheeses. Perhaps this is just the situation of the last year but this year people prefer imported cheeses. Or perhaps only the customers near the newest store prefer domestic cheeses while most customers of all other stores still like imported cheeses. Without ruling out these and other possibilities, the author cannot assume that customers now prefer domestic cheeses.

Secondly, the author assumes that the result of the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates customers of the author's stores would like to buy domestic cheeses rather than imported cheesed. Perhaps the result cannot reflect the thoughts of customers who are customers of the author's stores. Or perhaps though the customer show preference for domestic cheeses, they would buy imported cheese because of cheaper prices. Without accounting for these and other possible explanations, the author cannot make a convincing conclusion based on such an assumption.

Finally, the author overlooks other factors that have effect on the improving of profits. It is entirely possible that the economy environment is about to go down and the sales of cheeses decrease resulting reduction of profits. Another possibilities is that the cost of the cheeses increase and this make the profits decrease. Or perhaps other stores sell cheeses with much lower prices and most customers go there leading to decreasing profits. Without considering these and other factors, the author has made a hasty conclusion.

In sum, the conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands. To better support this conclusion, the author must provides clear evidence that their customers would prefer domestic cheese now and that limiting inventory can bring about the increase of profits. To better evaluate this conclusion, more information about the newest store and more detail about the market of cheeses are needed.

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In this argument, the author concludes that to improve profits, they should discontinue stocking imported cheese and concentrate mainly on domestic cheeses in all of their stores. To support this conclusion, the author points out that the five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses last year. The author also cites a survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicating increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. However, this argument suffers from several critical flaws and is therefore unconvincing as it stands.开头转述题目，中轨中局。

First, the fact that the five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses last year do not necessarily indicate that all customers would prefer domestic cheeses. Perhaps this is just the situation of the last year but this year people prefer imported cheeses. Or perhaps only the customers near the newest store prefer domestic cheeses while most customers of all other stores still like imported cheeses. Without ruling out these and other possibilities, the author cannot assume that customers now prefer domestic cheeses.用可能性列举法来论证

Secondly, the author assumes that the result of the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates customers of the author's stores would like to buy domestic cheeses rather than imported cheesed. Perhaps the result cannot reflect the thoughts of customers who are customers of the author's stores. Or perhaps though the customer show preference for domestic cheeses, they would buy imported cheese because of cheaper prices. Without accounting for these and other possible explanations, the author cannot make a convincing conclusion based on such an assumption.不过这段的论述方式和上面一段完全一样了，连总结的话就一样，是否考虑要改改

Finally, the author overlooks other factors that have effect on the improving of profits. It is entirely possible that the economy environment is about to go down and the sales of cheeses decrease resulting reduction of profits. Another possibilities is that the cost of the cheeses increase and this make the profits decrease. Or perhaps other stores sell cheeses with much lower prices and most customers go there leading to decreasing profits. Without considering these and other factors, the author has made a hasty conclusion.

In sum, the conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands. To better support this conclusion, the author must provides clear evidence that their customers would prefer domestic cheese now and that limiting inventory can bring about the increase of profits. To better evaluate this conclusion, more information about the newest store and more detail about the market of cheeses are needed.
  
总体来说，写的不错，但是论证方式过于单一化，这是一个问题

还有想问一下，你写这篇argument，算上思考用了多少时间啊？

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Argument65 [OB小组]_第7次作业_进口/国产奶酪

TOPIC:ARGUMENT65 - The following appeared in a memo from the president of achain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all thestores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic andimported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses atour newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin.Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicatesan increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers.Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the bestway to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stockingmany of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily ondomestic cheeses."
WORDS: 406          TIME: 00:30:00  + ？        DATE: 2007-7-19 11:39:11

In this argument, theauthor concludes that to improve profits, they should discontinuestocking imported cheese and concentrate mainly on domestic cheeses inall of their stores. To support this conclusion, the author points outthat the five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were alldomestic cheddar cheeses last year. The author also cites a survey byCheeses of the World magazine indicating increasing preference fordomestic cheeses among its subscribers. However, this argument suffersfrom several critical flaws and is therefore unconvincing as it stands.

First, the fact that thefive best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domesticcheddar cheeses last year do not necessarily indicate that allcustomers would prefer domestic cheeses. Perhaps this is just thesituation of the last year but this year people prefer importedcheeses. Or perhaps only the customers near the newest store preferdomestic cheeses while most customers of all other stores still likeimported cheeses. Without ruling out these and other possibilities, theauthor cannot assume that customers now prefer domestic cheeses.
感觉可以在举例子之前总的来说一下，那个best selling ....不能证明...。单靠两个例子来说明有一点weak

Secondly, the authorassumes that the result of the survey by Cheeses of the World magazineindicates customers of the author's stores would like to buy domesticcheeses rather than imported cheesed. Perhaps the result cannot reflectthe thoughts of customers who are customers of the author's stores. Orperhaps though the customer show preference for domestic cheeses, theywould buy imported cheese because of cheaper prices. （这个理由稍微有一些牵强，一般来说进口的还是要贵一点的）Without accountingfor these and other possible explanations, the author cannot make aconvincing conclusion based on such an assumption.
和上一段同样的问题，应该要先概括的说一下。

Finally, the authoroverlooks other factors that have effect on the improving of profits.It is entirely possible that the economy environment is about to godown and the sales of cheeses decrease resulting reduction of profits.（这个理由不能说明 减少imported cheeses的库存是不好的。这里就是要驳倒论者的观点，他认为要减少进口cheese）Another possibilities is that the cost of thecheeses increase and this make the profits decrease. Or perhaps otherstores sell cheeses with much lower prices and most customers go thereleading to decreasing profits. Without considering these and otherfactors, the author has made a hasty conclusion.（和第一个possibility一样的问题。）

In sum, the conclusion isunpersuasive as it stands. To better support this conclusion, theauthor must provides clear evidence that their customers would preferdomestic cheese now and that limiting inventory can bring about theincrease of profits. To better evaluate this conclusion, moreinformation about the newest store and more detail about the market ofcheeses are needed.