issue154 【OB小组】

phillipsareaUID: 2318537

题目：ISSUE154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
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Is education such an important issue that both parents and communities should be involved in? Imagine that one day, every adult, including those mothers, fathers as well as the whole community is working on things related to education, what would the society be like? A mess. Therefore, in my opinion, it's necessary for the parents and communities to keep an eye on education, however, it's dispensable for them to be involved in school affairs since they have their own job to do.

Admittedly, education is one of the most important issues in the world since it's tightly related to the progress of the world. Thus, parents are responsible to have their children well educated. For instance, they should care about their children's problems on study, meet their needs on study and buy some necessary books they might need. All these contribute to a better progress of their children's education.

However, parents and communities are not professional educators so that it's unnecessary for them to get involved in those school affairs. Children may meet numerous kinds of problems in their growing to adulthood. Parents are able to handle some of the problems which are related to daily life, conversely, some problems are associated to their subjects, which are difficult for parents to deal with. For this kind of problems, practical educators might have better methods to deal with. It not only solves the problems of children, but also avoid of wrong instruction by the parents.

Moreover, parents have their own jobs to do besides looking after their children. Nowadays people are living in a high-pace society, which makes time much more valuable than before. Parents are working under the pressure of being exceeded or even fired. The world would be a mess if every parents are looking after their children all day and get involved in schools at every moment. Even sometimes parents are able to teach their children themselves, however, they cannot put all their time and mind on their children's education and that's why we have professional educators. Educators are there to study all kinds of children's problems on education and always ready to help those children who have trouble in study. In this way, it's dispensable for the parents to teach their children themselves or get involved in schools.

In a way parents should pay attention to their children's education since it's tightly related to their future life. Nevertheless, with the help of professional educators, it's essential for the parents to just keep an eye on their children while they move on in their own business. Only when both parents and children are living a better life, can education becomes effective.

xiao8686UID: 2266881

Is education such an important issue that both parents and communitiesshould be involved in? Imagine that one day, every adult, includingthose mothers, fathers as well as the whole community is working onthings related to education, what would the society be like? A mess.Therefore, in my opinion, it's necessary for the parents andcommunities to keep an eye on education,（这个因果逻辑好像有问题啊） however, it's dispensable（dispensable 没有unnecessary的意思吧） forthem to be involved in school affairs since they have their own job todo.

Admittedly, education is one of the most important issues in the worldsince it's tightly related to the progress of the world. Thus, parentsare responsible to have their children well educated. For instance,they should care about their children's problems on study, meet theirneeds on study and buy some necessary books they might need. All thesecontribute to a better progress of their children's education.（这个论证不够strong）

However, parents and communities are not professional educators so thatit's unnecessary for them to get involved in those school affairs.Children may meet numerous kinds of problems in their growing toadulthood. Parents are able to handle some of the problems which arerelated to daily life, conversely, some problems are associated totheir subjects（这句话chinglish了）, which are difficult for parents to deal with. For thiskind of problems, practical educators might have better methods to dealwith. It not only solves the problems of children, but also avoid ofwrong instruction by the parents.
这一段可以举个例子说明一下的。

Moreover, parents have their own jobs to do besides looking after theirchildren. Nowadays people are living in a high-pace society, whichmakes time much more valuable than before. Parents are working underthe pressure of being exceeded or even fired. The world would be a messif every parents are looking after their children all day and getinvolved in schools at every moment. Even sometimes parents are able toteach their children themselves, however, they cannot put all theirtime and mind on their children's education and that's why we haveprofessional educators. Educators are there to study all kinds ofchildren's problems on education and always ready to help thosechildren who have trouble in study. In this way, it's dispensable forthe parents to teach their children themselves or get involved inschools.
这一段的观点不错。

In a way parents should pay attention to their children's educationsince it's tightly related to their future life. Nevertheless, with thehelp of professional educators, it's essential for the parents to justkeep an eye on their children while they move on in their own business.Only when both parents and children are living a better life, caneducation becomes effective
没有说community。