issue59 【OB小组】role models

xiao8686UID: 2266881

TOPIC: ISSUE59 - "Too much emphasis is placed on role models. Instead of copying others, people should learn to think and act independently and thus make the choices that are best for them."
WORDS: 689          TIME: 00:44:19+5:00         DATE: 2007-8-14 23:21:22

In this issue, the author states that people ought to think and act independently and thereby make the best choices for them rather than emphasizing too much on role modeling. In my observation, the issue can be discussed in two aspects: study and making decisions in which role models functions differently hence are stressed differently.

First of all, in the realm of study, role models are essential especially when it comes to neophytes. The exemplary effects of models can be momentous and the advantages it brings along far outweigh the downsides. For the study of any subject of knowledge or skills, since s/he know little about what is about to be taught, a tyro has to copy the way a sophomore does in order to get on the track. For instance, a layman of English needs to memorize the alphabet to begin with, which is the methods practiced by countless predecessors, if s/he want to learn the language; a rookie of carpentry has to exercise the usage of seesaw first, which is repeated for generations in the apprenticeship. After all, the cliché of starting a new study may seem to be the copy of others, yet it is necessary at the same time since without the guidance a neophyte can hardly embark on a study. Moreover, the phase after beginning a study is always filled of role modeling and it is indispensable to the entire process as well. The mimic of the existence are tedious on the surface while it is the procedure toward mastery in nature. Consider these greatest painters in history such as Da vin ci, Van Gogh and etc. None of them became the brilliant artists inscribed in history without the repetition of basic sketching time after time. Consider these greatest mathematicians who amazingly solved the extremely difficult problems. None of them can succeed without the practicing of the fundamental operations to ensure the formulas rooted in mind. Therefore, the process of reiterating what have been done is necessary in the beginning phase of study in order to build the solid foundation for further study. Furthermore, even in the mid-period of a study of certain knowledge or skills, role models can still be quite helpful. Some detractors may claim that in such phase, people need to create by themselves instead of copying others. Though role modeling could fetter minds sometimes, it can provide inspiration as well. The crux of managing role models to assist creation is to borrow the essence and the suitable while skimming the dross rather than deserting works of other people utterly. Thereby, role modeling is actually emulation of others instead of pure copying. In sum, the status of role modeling is important in nearly every phase of the study of certain knowledge or skills for its superiority in instructions.

Second of all, when it comes to make decisions, role modeling plays a less crucial role comparing to that in study. As far as I am concerned, choice making is mixed with personal experiences and differences, hence role modeling is generally infeasible. Role modeling is particularly reckless in some life-altering decisions. For example, when one chooses a major when entering a college, s/he can not make the selection depending on what the majority of others do. Or a potential and gifted dancer could turn to be a lousy lawyer. Nevertheless, the effects of role modeling can not be obviated entirely. We are subconsciously influenced by it. Take the major-choosing example again, although we need to weigh the preferences we have, the talents we own and the benefits the choice can bring, the final decision are always affected by role models outside even without awareness——people lean to select the majors others succeed more often and it is especially obvious when they are stuck in a quandary of some choices with equal preference. Therefore, ration tells us to be outright isolated from outside influences while the reality informs us it can barely happen.

In conclusion, role model is quite essential in the process of study. And it the aspects of decision-making, it still take effects somehow even people tend to exclude its intervention subjectively.

yvonnesmartUID: 2380005

TOPIC: ISSUE59 - "Too much emphasis is placed on role models. Instead of copying others, people should learn to think and act independently and thus make the choices that are best for them."
WORDS: 689          TIME: 00:44:19+5:00         DATE: 2007-8-14 23:21:22

In this issue, the author states that people ought to think and act independently and thereby make the best choices for them rather than emphasizing too much on role modeling. In my observation, the issue can be discussed in two aspects: study and making decisions in which role models functions differently hence are stressed differently.分两个方面来论证，个人认为这个主题句可以写得更明确些，比如in study 是怎样的，making decisions 是怎样的。

First of all, in the realm of study, role models are essential especially when it comes to neophytes. The exemplary effects of models can be momentous and the advantages it brings along far outweigh the downsides. For the study of any subject of knowledge or skills, since s/he know little about what is about to be taught, a tyro has to copy the way a sophomore does in order to get on the track. For instance, a layman of English needs to memorize the alphabet to begin with, which is the methods practiced by countless predecessors, if s/he want to learn the language; a rookie of carpentry has to exercise the usage of seesaw first, which is repeated for generations in the apprenticeship. After all, the cliché of starting a new study may seem to be the copy of others, yet it is necessary at the same time since without the guidance a neophyte can hardly embark on a study. Moreover, the phase after beginning a study is always filled of role modeling and it is indispensable to the entire process as well. The mimic of the existence are tedious on the surface while it is the procedure toward mastery in nature. Consider these greatest painters in history such as Da vin ci, Van Gogh and etc. None of them became the brilliant artists inscribed in history without the repetition of basic sketching time after time. Consider these greatest mathematicians who amazingly solved the extremely difficult problems. None of them can succeed without the practicing of the fundamental operations to ensure the formulas rooted in mind. Therefore, the process of reiterating what have been done is necessary in the beginning phase of study in order to build the solid foundation for further study. Furthermore, even in the mid-period of a study of certain knowledge or skills, role models can still be quite helpful. Some detractors may claim that in such phase, people need to create by themselves instead of copying others. Though role modeling could fetter minds sometimes, it can provide inspiration as well. The crux of managing role models to assist creation is to borrow the essence and the suitable while skimming the dross rather than deserting works of other people utterly. Thereby, role modeling is actually emulation of others instead of pure copying. In sum, the status of role modeling is important in nearly every phase of the study of certain knowledge or skills for its superiority in instructions.这段论证很充分，也有具体例子，不错。

Second of all, when it comes to make decisions, role modeling plays a less crucial role comparing to that in study. As far as I am concerned, choice making is mixed with personal experiences and differences, hence role modeling is generally infeasible. Role modeling is particularly reckless in some life-altering decisions. For example, when one chooses a major when entering a college, s/he can not make the selection depending on what the majority of others do. 我觉得这个例子不是太好，因为modeling还是有些榜样的成分在里面。除非举例子之前说：某人因为看到别人选了什么非常成功之类，自己也想选，那么再继续论证就能回复主题一些Or a potential and gifted dancer could turn to be a lousy lawyer. Nevertheless, the effects of role modeling can not be obviated entirely. We are subconsciously influenced by it. Take the major-choosing example again, although we need to weigh the preferences we have, the talents we own and the benefits the choice can bring, the final decision are always affected by role models outside even without awareness——people lean to select the majors others succeed more often and it is especially obvious when they are stuck in a quandary of some choices with equal preference. Therefore, ration tells us to be outright isolated from outside influences while the reality informs us it can barely happen.

In conclusion, role model is quite essential in the process of study. And itin the aspects of decision-making, it still take effects somehow even people tend to exclude its intervention subjectively.最后总结的第二部分和前面的论证好像不是太相符，前面说的是要排除外界干扰，后面说的是model有些影响


lz的文章词汇很华丽，非常佩服啊。只是觉得在前后逻辑呼应上面需要小小注意下，那就更加完美了。加油！