【8月16号作文】主题：计算机能否取代教师？----已停拍！谢谢大家！

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首先感谢论坛上的朋友们对我第一篇作文的修改意见:handshake ，真的是自己看自己的孩子，怎么看怎么好，毛病还是得让别人挑，要不然哪来的进步呢？:))

因为9月22号就要考试了，差不多就剩一个月时间，按照计划，之前一直是在看范文，没有很完整的写过，现在开始，基本上2-3天练习一篇Task 2，一篇Task 1， 这样到考试前，差不多能写十几篇左右，虽然比起大牛们每天一篇来说，量不是很大，现在写起来感觉还是有些费劲，不过将文章放到网上来互改真的是一种非常好的办法，这样逼迫自己要将文章写的不要太烂，哪怕是花的时间稍微多一些，无形中提高了自己的写作能力。

闲话少讲，直入正题，这篇Task 2练习作文是昨天晚上在图书馆自习室写的，花了2小时左右，回寝室后又修改了1个小时，字数大约在450单词，有点多，不过既然是不限时间的练习，多写点废话也无妨，免得到时候挤不出来，无话可说。:))
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题目：Computer are widely used in education, and some people think teacher will not play an important role in the classroom. To what extent do you agree?
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Nowadays, with the wide used of computer, there are more and more schools and college incline to share some teaching responsibility with computer, like computer aid management, teaching by couseware and something like that. In such circumstance, some people think that the teacher could be replaced by computer. To some extent, the claim sounds reasonable at first thought. After all, they does offer a lot of evidence to convince that computer can do a better job than human beings in several aspect.

While I agree that computer, undoubted, become more and more indispensable in our daily life, for example, in scientific research, we need computers to handle large amounts of data, in banking, the role of the computer can not be ignored. But I insist that because of the special nature of the work teachers, teaching students by teacher still better than by computer. I have used a set of software called Advance Multimedia Course ware, at the beginning, it makes me felt very novel but, after a period of time, I began to feel the dull and boring. No matter how advanced and intelligent the developer have claimed, fundamentally, it but is a program that written by programmer, it has rules, as well as grammar., very reliable, never make a mistake, but, it seems to me, these so-called merits that computer overmatching man as somebody claim, make me feel tedious and monotonous when I was “taught” by computer.

Some people would argue that with the development of IT technology and AI science, sooner or later, the simulation capability of computer can very strong and be able to like a true human. But even so, even computer could teach as good as teacher, still need some very essential things—like teaching experiences and teaching skill--to develop such software, and where do these experiences and skills come from? Can be produced by computer themselves? I don't think so, regardless how powerful the software could perform, by the root, it can not exist without the real teachers. Perhaps one day, computer can evolve super advanced and sufficient to study by themselves, maybe they can assume the teaching responsibility, however, till now, there are not any such software could achieve this.

In summary, while some people may remain unconvinced by my argument, the reason I have analysed why teacher can not be replaced by computer may at least make them aware of the necessity of teacher. However, despite the deficiencies of computer, they are still regarded as a powerful tools that if we used properly, can bring great convenience to our work, so, it is critical that teacher improve their old teaching methods by using computer at some level of educational process.
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Nowadays, with the wide use of computers, there are more and more schools and colleges incline to share some teaching responsibility with computer, like computer aid management, teaching by couseware and something like that. In such circumstance, some people think that the teacher could be replaced by computer. To some extent, the claim sounds reasonable at first thought. After all, they does offer a lot of evidence to convince that computer can do a better job than human beings in several aspects.

While I agree that computer, undoubtedly, become more and more indispensable(essential/vital) in our daily life. For example, in scientific reaserch there are a large amount of dates need to be processed by computer, in bank, the role of the computer can not be ignored(neglected/disregarded). But I still insist that students should better be taught by teachers instead of by computer due to some special nature of them. I have used a set of software called Advance Multimedia Course ware, at the beginning, it makes me felt very novel but, after a period of time, I began to feel the dull and boring. No matter how advanced and intelligent the developer have claimed, fundamentally, it but is a program that written by programmer, it has rules, as well as grammar., very reliable, never make a mistake, but, it seems to me, these so-called merits that computer overmatching man as somebody claim, make me feel tedious and monotonous when I was “taught” by computer.

Some people would argue that with the development of IT technology and AI science, sooner or later, the simulation capability of computer can very strong and be able to like a true human. But even so, even computer could teach as good as teacher, still need some very essential things—like teaching experiences and teaching skills--to develop such software, and where do these experiences and skills come from? Can be produced by computer themselves? I don't think so, regardless how powerful the software could perform, by the root, it can not exist without the real teachers. Perhaps one day, computer can evolve super advanced and sufficient to study by themselves, maybe they can assume the teaching responsibility, however, till now, there are not any such software could achieve this.

In summary, while some people may remain unconvinced by my argument, the reason I have analysed why teacher can not be replaced by computer may at least make them aware of the necessity of teacher. However, despite the deficiencies of computer, they are still regarded as a powerful tools that if we used properly, can bring great convenience to our work, so, it is critical that teacher improve their old teaching methods by using computer at some level of educational process.

[ 本帖最后由 夜空的彼方 于 2007-8-27 01:56 编辑 ]

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Nowadays, with the wide used(use?) of computer(S?), there are more and more schools and college incline to share some teaching responsibility(ies?) with computer, like computer aid management, teaching by couseware and something like that. In such circumstance, some people think that the teacher could be replaced by computer. To some extent, the claim sounds reasonable at first thought. After all, they does(do?) offer a lot of evidence to convince that computer can do a better job than human beings in several aspect(s?). While I agree that computer, undoubted(undoubtedly?), become more and more indispensable in our daily life, for example, in scientific research, we need computers to handle large amounts of data, in banking, the role of the computer can not be ignored. But I insist that because of the special nature of the work teachers, teaching students by teacher(s?) still better than by computer(s?). I have used a set of software called Advance Multimedia Course ware, at the beginning, it makes me felt(?) very novel but, after a period of time, I began to feel the(?) dull and boring. No matter how advanced and intelligent the developer have claimed, fundamentally, it but is a program that written by programmer, it has rules, as well as grammar., very reliable, never make a mistake, but, it seems to me, these so-called merits that computer(?) overmatching man as somebody claim, make(主句和从句得时态？) me feel tedious and monotonous when I was “taught” by computer.Some people would argue that with the development of IT technology and AI science, sooner or later, the simulation capability of computer can （be）very strong and be able to like a true human. But even so, even （？）computer could teach as good as teacher, (which?前面没有逗号，不像是插入语啊)still need some very essential things—like teaching experiences and teaching skill--to develop such software, and where do these experiences and skills come from? Can be produced by computer themselves? I don't think so, regardless how powerful the software could perform, by the root, it can not exist without the real teachers. Perhaps one day, computer can evolve super advanced and sufficient to study by themselves（这句看不懂）, maybe they can assume the teaching responsibility, however, till now, there are not any such software could achieve this.In summary, while some people may remain unconvinced by my argument, the reason I have analysed why teacher can not be replaced by computer may at least make them aware of the necessity of teacher. However, despite the deficiencies of computer, they are still regarded as a powerful tools that if we used properly, can bring great convenience to our work, so, it is critical that teacher improve their old teaching methods by using computer at some level of educational process.



一个感觉：很多句子不通顺

夜空的彼方UID: 159120

谢谢~其实这篇作文写完，自己也觉得很不理想，太啰嗦不说，有些理由其实挺掰的，可是没办法，这就是自己的水平了，看出提高的空间还是很大啊，呵呵
我发现自己一个问题就是，好多细节做的不好，譬如名次单复数，时态。。以后会注意的~~！:)

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你去改下别人的作文，就知到要注意细节了 ;d:

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呵呵，也在改啊~
不过感觉咱们IETLS版没有G版和T版那么热闹，我有时去那边转，看到那边作文互改的气氛很好啊！
可能也是考雅思的人没有考GT的多吧。。。:confused:

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我们正在向兄弟版学习 :)

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;d:

capricUID: 2331822

祝你成功！！~~

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谢谢

kimomoUID: 2377530

Nowadays, with the wide used(usage是不是好点,在英语中要多用名词；若不用名词,需要改成widely used) of computer, there are more and more schools and college(colleges) incline to share some teaching responsibility with computer, like computer aid management, teaching by couseware and something like that.(这个表达少用) In such circumstance, some people think that the teacher could be replaced by computer. To some extent, the claim sounds reasonable at first thought. After all, they does offer a lot of evidence to convince that computer can do a better job than human beings in several aspect(aspects).


While I agree that computer, undoubted,(undoubtedly?) become more and more indispensable in our daily life,(.) for example, in scientific research, we need computers to handle large amounts of data, (;标点符号也要注意,别嫌我罗嗦)in banking, the role of the computer can not be ignored,either. But I insist that because of the special nature of the work teachers, teaching students by teacher still better than by computer.(But I insist that students should better be taught by teachers instead of by computers due to some special nature of them是不是好点,用一个句子表达足矣) I have used a set of softwares called Advance Multimedia Course ware, at the beginning, it makes (made)me felt very novel but, after a period of time, I began to feel the(可删除) dull and boring. No matter how advanced and intelligent the developer have claimed, fundamentally, it but is a program that written by programmer, it has rules, as well as grammar., very reliable, never make a mistake,（这句似乎比较散,凌乱的感觉,英文不像中文是形合而非意合） but, it seems to me, these so-called merits that computer overmatching man as somebody claim, make me feel tedious and monotonous when I was “taught” by computer.(这句不错,赞一个)

Some people would argue that with the development (这表达少用)of IT technology and AI science, sooner or later, the simulation capability of computer can very strong and be able to like a true human. But even so, even computer could teach as good as teacher, still need some very essential things—like teaching experiences and teaching skill(skills)--to develop such software, and where do these experiences and skills come from? Can be produced by computer themselves? I don't think so, regardless how powerful the software could perform, by the root, it can not exist without the real teachers. Perhaps one day, computer can evolve super advanced and sufficient to study by themselves, maybe they can assume the teaching responsibility, however, till now, there are not any such software could achieve this.

In summary, while some people may remain unconvinced by my argument, the reason I have analysed why teacher can not be replaced by computer may at least make them aware of the necessity of teacher. However, despite the deficiencies of computer, they are still regarded as a powerful tools that if we used properly, can bring great convenience to our work, so, it is critical that teacher improve their old teaching methods by using computer at some level of educational process.
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总体来说,表达方式上不错,但是经常会有一些粗心的小错误出现,比如说单复数,时态上的忽略...要注意哦！
思路上个人认为比我强多了,我的思路似乎总不够好.很欠缺.
水平就这么点拉,望多多担待呀
P.S.我把你的点评帖到我空间去了，欢迎光顾:)
http://freelazya.spaces.live.com/

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跟不上你们的脚步了，不过我找到一篇不错的文章，以飨各位
from: http://www.associatedcontent.com ... puter_learning.html




The importance of computer learning and the role of teachers


With more advanced computer learning programs, teachers are no longer needed. This statement confronts the issue concerning the role of teachers. Although there are advantages to computer and television learning, this kind of learning is considered supplementary to teachers in the classroom.

Computer learning is an engaging tool allowing children to experiment with creative programs at their own pace without additional pressure. Children can work exclusively from their own worlds without a teacher telling them what to do. Therefore, computer learning is excellent for children's motivation and allows them to question deeply their subject matter. Also, the computer offers a creative variety of programs on different levels and so, computer learning is not entirely boring. From the moment children flick on the computer screen, they can learning Math by working out the answers through a competition match with the computer. This method of learning can be a lot more motivating and challenging than children doing Math exercises in the classroom and for homework.

Also, with computer learning, there are no outside pressures or influences. The teacher does not make personal judgments or evaluation. Computer learning allows for the evaluation to be on the process and not on the person or on the product. By not being evaluated or criticized, children engage their minds and advance at their own pace without the teacher saying, "That's not good enough" or "You could have done better on that Math test. You know the material."

Computer learning is suitable for all levels and ages. It is an organized and well structured learning tool. With the rapid pace of technological development, a computer is also a sophisticated learning tool. There are computers with touch-tone screens, computer that talk and sing, computers with three dimensional graphics, and so on. More and more emphasis is being placed on computer knowledge as a prerequisite for many jobs. Some jobs simply require a simple understanding of how a computer works but children can and should have some computer exposure at an early age to prepare for their future.

However, teachers possess fundamental and important qualities, which computers do not possess, and are essential for a child's learning process. one primary and necessary quality is personal interaction. When children cannot computer a certain math problem or they don't feel well, the teacher feels it. The teacher has the ability to attempt to help them. Although the computer has been built and programmed by human beings, a computer is still not human. A computer cannot ask why a child cannot do a Math problem and offer advice on how to tackle the problem. This basic fact still explains why teachers are still needed in the classroom.

After all, human beings are smarter than a computer they are the ones who designed it. All the computer knows has been programmed and cannot think and sort problems out emotionally and intellectually. Children still need the classroom environment because of the student-teacher interaction and the relationships with other children. Therefore, it can be concluded that computer learning is user friendly yet supplementary, and impersonal.

Teachers may not be as technologically sophisticated as computers, but they certainly can be creative within a group framework. They don't necessarily have to ask close-ended questions and bore the class to fulfill their roles as teachers. Teachers can and should allow learning to be enjoyable and stimulating like the excitement children feel when they flick on a computer. For example, a teacher has the option unlike the computer, to organize a project using several groups to ask true and false questions about the environment using the Internet to search for information. The winning team with the most points receives a prize. Not only do the children enjoy these types of mini-type research projects, but they are also benefited with knowledge about the environment as well. unlike the computer, the teacher, by working with the groups, allows for elements such as humor and teamwork together with the feeling of accomplishment and self-satisfaction to seep into the children's learning.

Although computer learning can be stimulating, fun and accessible to children of all ages, levels and interests, it is not a substitute for teachers. Teachers permit and allow for personal interaction which is essential for a child. Also, teachers can be just as creative by organizing fun learning projects for the class. Learning should be an enjoyable and enriching process and cannot be completed alone without the presence of a teacher. Computer then, are only secondary to the learning process.



[ 本帖最后由 capric 于 2007-8-18 09:26 编辑 ]

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回复kimomo:
But I insist that because of the special nature of the work teachers, teaching students by teacher still better than by computer.====>But I insist that students should better be taught by teachers instead of by computers due to some special nature of them.
这句我的确写的有点啰唆了，你的意见很不错！:handshake

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感谢Capric的分享，这篇文章已经看了，的确写的很好，学习了~~~！