argument2 [kb9.11] 第5次作业

对酒当歌UID: 2210051

The author asserts that , the homeowners should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting in order to have the property values in Deerhaven Acres raised.  To support the recommendation, the author shows us the success of the Brookville community nearby. Analyzing this letter rentioly , we will find it is not so convincing. This argument is flawed in several critical respects.

To begin with, the reason given by the author to explain why the Brookville tripled is ambiguous. The author simply attributed the raise of the property value to the restriction. But, is there any other reason? Maybe the reason is the convenience of the traffic, or the scenery around, the service of the community or anything else which we can not rule out. So it is too hasty for the author to draw the conclusion

Secondly, even if it is the restriction that makes the Brookville community popular, it may be dubious that the restriction is suitable for the Deerhaven Acres as well. The author provides no information about the same and differences between the two communities. Maybe there are obvious differences between the establishments, the methods of the distribution and market. So, we can not deny the possibility that the restriction used in Brookville will be not suitable for Deerhaven Acres

Thirdly, as the author mentions, seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions. But has the value of the consumer changed during the seven years? It is possible that, the consumers are increasingly seeking out offbeat and unique manners. And they will be disgusted with the restriction. So, without conducting an investigation among consumers, it will be reasonless to adopt the restriction.

To sum up, the author’s conclusion is based on the premise that the raise of the property values in Brookville is resulted from the restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. To support it, the author should provide enough information about Brookville. He /she should also find the differences between Brookville and Deerhaven Acres. Moreover, an investigation among consumers is necessary for the committee to make a proper decision.

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phoenixlwUID: 2382912

The author asserts that ,(这没必要断开吧) the homeowners should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting in order to have the property values in Deerhaven Acres raised.  To support the recommendation, the author shows us the success of the Brookville community nearby. Analyzing this letter rentioly(rationally) , we will find it is not so convincing. This argument is flawed in several critical respects.

To begin with, the reason given by the author to explain why the Brookville tripled is ambiguous. The author simply attributed(注意时态一致) the raise of the property value to the restriction. But, is there any other reasons? Maybe the reason is the convenience of the traffic, or the scenery around, the service of the community or anything else which we can not rule out. So it is too hasty for the author to draw the conclusion

Secondly, even if it is the restriction that makes the Brookville community popular(表达得有点问题), it may be dubious that the restriction is suitable for the Deerhaven Acres as well. The author provides no information about the same(similarities) and differences between the two communities. Maybe there are obvious differences between the establishments, the methods of the distribution and market. So, we can not deny the possibility that the restriction used in Brookville will be not suitable for Deerhaven Acres

Thirdly, as the author mentions, seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions. But has the value of the consumer changed during the seven years? It is possible that, the consumers are increasingly seeking out offbeat and unique manners. And they will be disgusted with the restriction. So, without conducting an investigation among consumers, it will be reasonless to adopt the restriction.

To sum up, the author’s conclusion is based on the premise that the raise of the property values in Brookville is resulted from the restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. To support it, the author should provide enough information about Brookville. He /she should also find the differences between Brookville and Deerhaven Acres. Moreover, an investigation among consumers is necessary for the committee to make a proper decision.


我认真地将全文看了一遍,确实无论从结构还是语言都相当漂亮.剩下只是时间问题了,加油吧!