argument140 [kb 9.11] 第七次作业

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题目：ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."
字数：414          用时：00:45:00          日期：2007-8-21 下午 02:50:11

The arguer tries to convince that Elm City University (ECU) should give their Professor Thomas a raise of $10,000 in salary and promote her as Department Chairperson, with some seemingly reasonable cause. Yet, a further examination will reveal that these reasons insufficiently lends support to the arguer's proposal

First of all, the amount of students in Ms. Thomas's class is not a necessary indication of her teaching skills. Perhaps the curriculum requires these students to take her lesson, or perhaps the students just feel such a lesson could be useful in their future career. In one word, it is probably because what she teaches rather than how well she teaches that makes her popular among the students. In this case, any teacher teaching the same course will receive an equal welcome. If the arguer really wants identify her teaching ability, s/he should conduct a survey to investigate if the students enjoy her class and really learn something for it.

Furthermore, it is unreasonable to judge a professor's research ability just depends on the amount of his or her research grants. We all knows that some subjects always receive a usually big amount of research grants, while some subjects like math and literature often acquire a relatively low amount. But this situation does not mean that professors in math and literature have inferior research abilities compared with professor in other fields. There are certain methods to evaluate a professor's research ability like inspect how many essays s/he published and on what periodicals. The arguer should use these ways to attest Professor Thomas's research ability.

Finally, even if this professor is important to ECU, the fear for her leave is unnecessary, since no evidence shows that the professor is not content with her salary or her position. Moreover, if there is indeed any dissatisfaction, the arguer should have a talk with her and discover what makes her feel so. If she is not content with the research condition in the ECU, just raise her salary and promote her cannot make her stay.

In sum, albeit an outstanding professor with superior teaching and research abilities is important to the university, it is nevertheless too hasty to assert that Ms Thomas is such a professor. Before the committee reaches the final decision, they should inspect Ms Thomas's skills in teaching and research comprehensively, and find out whether she is going to leave and whether the raise in salary and promotion can make her stay.

这次时间稍微好了点 最后检查了五分钟 下次再给自己一点压力 争取写到时间内
现在发现制约我的居然是打字速度……

[ 本帖最后由 goldzinc 于 2007-8-21 20:38 编辑 ]

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The arguer tries to convince（及物动词） that Elm City University (ECU) should give their Professor Thomas（这个蛮搞笑呵呵，怎么成他们的啦？） a raise of $10,000 in salary and promote her as Department Chairperson, with some seemingly reasonable cause. Yet, a further examination will reveal that these reasons insufficiently lends support to the arguer's proposal

First of all, the amount of students in Ms. Thomas's class is not a necessary indication of her teaching skills. Perhaps the curriculum requires these students to take her lesson, or perhaps the students just feel such a lesson could be useful in their future career. In one word, it is probably because what she teaches rather than how well she teaches that makes her popular among the students.（果然是逻辑高手啊！小女子甘拜下风~） In this case, any teacher teaching the same course will receive an equal welcome. If the arguer really wants（to） identify her teaching ability, s/he(看到这个就想起了李笑来呵呵~) should conduct a survey to investigate if the students enjoy her class and really learn something for it（这个好像也跟ability没啥关系吧小哥~）.

Furthermore, it is unreasonable to judge a professor's research ability just depends on（两个动词） the amount of his or her research grants. We all knows that some subjects always receive a usually big amount of research grants, while some subjects like math and literature often acquire a relatively low amount. But this situation does not mean that professors in math and literature have inferior research abilities compared with professor in other fields.（闻到了偏题的味道~） There are certain methods to evaluate a professor's research ability like inspect how many essays s/he published and on what periodicals. The arguer should use these ways to attest Professor Thomas's research ability.

Finally, even if this professor is important to ECU, the fear for her leave is unnecessary, since no evidence shows that the professor is not content with her salary or her position. Moreover, if there is indeed any dissatisfaction, the arguer should have a talk with her and discover what makes her feel so. If she is not content with the research condition in the ECU, just raise her salary and promote her cannot make her stay.（觉得这段不是很深入）

In sum, albeit（古文嘛？呵呵~都没见过，真好玩~） an outstanding professor with superior teaching and research abilities is important to the university, it is nevertheless too hasty to assert that Ms Thomas is such a professor. Before the committee reaches the final decision, they should inspect Ms Thomas's skills in teaching and research comprehensively（这个说得很好呢，我怎么都没想起来？）, and find out whether she is going to leave and whether the raise in salary and promotion can make her stay.

[ 本帖最后由 xiaotunbb 于 2007-8-21 23:10 编辑 ]

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还是很好的呀！搞不懂你们仨怎么跑去夸我文字好，我觉得大家都差不多啊~
好像给不出你什么意见呢，偏要说点的话再多点字数吧~
嗯还有，有时确实觉得没论证全面，加油加油！

goldzincUID: 2378390

咳 其实那个我也觉得偏题了……
第一段的结尾的确应该再说一句因为学生的评价最能反映一个老师的教学水平；
那个跑题么，把那个math和 literature去掉，再把句子反过来说就差不多了，这个人教的是植物学我也不了解，想不出什么植物学经费多的原因；
第三段从字数上看就能看出不深入，在列举几个他因比较好吧～

我是从张雷东那里学的s/he的
以后不用albeit了 被你说的怪不好意思的……
字数再加就打不完了，我的手好笨啊

之所以觉得大家语言都进化的很充分了有很大一部分是大家文章里都有我不认识的单词但我的文章里就没有。不过细细琢磨一下这么想逻辑是有问题的……

[ 本帖最后由 goldzinc 于 2007-8-21 23:56 编辑 ]

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哈哈，好像除了我前面那位p打头的小哥比较能用高级词大家都差不多吧，我倒是觉得高级词能有当然好，没有也实在是急不来的，那是人家的功力，不是一天两天就能学来，不过我在偷偷记那位小哥的生词哦~小豚真狡猾嘻嘻~
可能因为我是学新闻的，我们平时写英文都是要用最简单的词，但是别以为简单的词就很好驾驭，关键是你要用准，并且形成你自己的风格，就那么几个词来回用，怎么用都不错就可以了。不是有个原则叫KISS吗，呵呵，想必你也知道，我就不罗嗦了~
但是字数问题我还是觉得你要练练哦，不然怎么拿高分呢？
至于那个albeit嘛，我不认识不等于不是好词啊，其实我是夸奖的意思啦~从来不认真背单词，看到人家用就很激动，小兴奋了一下，见谅见谅~