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夜空的彼方UID: 159120

呵呵，很好的修改意见！
可惜作者现在看不到了。。。

futuremanUID: 2327059

啦啦啦回我ＰＭ了～～
过些天会改的～

futuremanUID: 2327059

再顶顶～

453830510UID: 2324343

辛苦了

futuremanUID: 2327059

再留一个
视作者修改情况 收录
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-732071-1-1.html

lcj_ieltsUID: 2359178

菠萝这么器重回头一定好好改:loveliness:

futuremanUID: 2327059

啦啦啦的改好了...先留这..攒的足够了, 再统一审一审

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-730965-2-1.html

Topic: Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.

The gap between developing countries and industrialized countries is becoming wider and wider, along with the rapid development of the world economy today. Provided that things get worse like this, the developing countries will be weaker in a large number of aspects than ever before, such like health, education, even international trade. From my point of view, unfortunate countries should spare no effort to improve those aspects. At the same time the developed countries’ government should pay more attentions to help the poorer countries.

A considerable number of people think that the poorer countries are lack of money, which limit their development in many aspects. As for developed countries, the basic thing they can do is to lend money to the poor nations. Thus, with the money, they can improve the medical technology, and spend more money on education in order to make increasingly children obtain useful knowledge. In addition, they can buy equipment and employ experts from abroad to develop industry. Many people are convinced that conditions will get better after solve the financial problem.

Moreover, only providing economic support is not enough. Many experts point out that short of experience is another factor which put the poor countries in  negative position in the global economy. Some industrialized countries may have more experience on how to improve health, education and how to develop economy. They can share their successful experience with the unfortunate countries who has similar conditions with them ever before. Otherwise, it would take the poorer countries considerable years to find the proper way to develop.

To summarize, nowadays it is necessary to develop the global economy, which need the great help of the richer countries. From what have been discussed above, I strongly commit the notion that if the poor countries work hard, and with the help of the developed nations, they will develop more and more quickly in the future.

futuremanUID: 2327059

视修改情况收录
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... e%3D1#pid1770861712

another:
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-742419-1-1.html

[ 本帖最后由 futureman 于 2007-9-28 13:30 编辑 ]

H-KevinUID: 2182070

最近G把我给蹂躏了。。。。。。

forbeckUID: 2297645

在书店里看到G的书，我都不敢靠近，太恐怖了:funk:

futuremanUID: 2327059

没事没事~~大家都是被蹂躏出来的~管它怎么揉，最后揉死ETS好了;d:

H-KevinUID: 2182070

我真希望有这么一天啊~~~~~~

futuremanUID: 2327059

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-742698-1-1.html
需要精改

forbeckUID: 2297645

恩~~~我也觉得这篇有的挖~~

明天晚上再看看他精改的吧~~我现在想死的心都有了:o

futuremanUID: 2327059

;d: 好好掌握住现实的生活