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prophetluoUID: 2240098

The conclusion that anyone who snores should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more

seems at first glance to be a convinced notion. To support the conclusion the author presents a new study which

showed that people who snored were more likely to gain weight than were people who did not snore. In addition,

a phenomenal called sleep apnea which influent the sleeping condition and leave the person too tired during the

day to exercise was introduced by the author. After a careful examination of this argument would reveal how

groundless this argument is.


In the first place, this argument is base on a doubtful study. The new study is logically specious and flawed in

several critical respects. Firstly, not until the author provide the name, rapture and influence of the institution

which made this study, the authority of the study should be questioned because it might be fabricated by the

author him/herself in order to justify the notion. Secondly, without taking the diet, daily exercise and body

condition in count this study is not reliable enough to be a study because commonsense teach us that one person

weight  connected to many kind of factors the most important of which  is people's diet. If one prefers junk food

with high level calorie all the time, one may definitely gain weight. Thirdly, any further prediction should be made

until the author provide sufficient evidence that those sample were random samples from all over the nation, all

kinds of jobs and all the age what is very important to this study.


In the second place, the relationship between snoring and sleep apnea should be questioned. It is unwarranted to

assert that there was a kind of relationship between snoring and sleep apnea just from the evidence that many

people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night. Firstly, it is unreasonable to establish a causal

relationship between snoring and sleep apnea because there is no evidence to demonstrate that people who did

not snore would not stop breathing which may the common condition everybody own. Secondly, more evidence

that whether the heavier one snore the more frequently one stop breathing during the night should be present in

order to justify the causal relationship between them.


In the third place, the author using some exceptional case as the basic for a claim about what is true in general.

Even if it is acceptable that a causal relationship between those two phenomenal truly exist, we still have good

reason to question the hasty conclusion. Firstly, the people who was tired during the day may not against to do

exercises. Secondly, even if we admit that those groups of people lacked of exercises, but why should they eat

less, because there is no evidence explicates that those people eat too much.


In sum, this argument suffers from several fatal fallacies. To lend strong support to the conclusion the author

should provide detail information of the study. To better support the notion, more evidence concerning the live

habit of the people who snore should be given and a comparison between the ordinary one and the people who

snore should be provided.



[ 本帖最后由 prophetluo 于 2007-9-2 13:57 编辑 ]

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The conclusion that anyone who snores should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more

seems at first glance to be a convinced notion. To support the conclusion the author presents a new study which

showed that people who snored were more likely to gain weight than were people who did not snore. In addition,

a phenomenal(phenomena) called sleep apnea which influent(influences) the sleeping condition and leave the person too tired during the day to exercise was introduced by the author. After a careful examination of this argument would reveal how

groundless this argument is.


In the first place, this argument is based on a doubtful study. The new study is logically specious and flawed in

several critical respects. Firstly, not until the author provide the name, rapture(怎么理解) and influence of the institution

which made this study, the authority of the study should be questioned because it might be fabricated by the

author him/herself in order to justify the notion. Secondly, without taking the diet, daily exercise and body

condition in count this study is not reliable enough to be a study because commonsense teach us that one person

weight  connected to many kind of factors the most important of which  is people's diet. If one prefers junk food

with high level calorie all the time, one may definitely gain weight. Thirdly, any further prediction should be made

until the author provide sufficient evidence that those sample were random samples from all over the nation, all

kinds of jobs and all the age what is very important to this study.


In the second place, the relationship between snoring and sleep apnea should be questioned. It is unwarranted to

assert that there was a kind of relationship between snoring and sleep apnea just from the evidence that many

people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night. Firstly, (it is unreasonable to establish a causal

relationship between snoring and sleep apnea because)重复 there is no evidence to demonstrate that people who did

not snore would not stop breathing which may the common condition everybody own. Secondly, more evidence

that whether the heavier one snore the more frequently one stop breathing during the night should be present in

order to justify the causal relationship between them.


In the third place, the author using some exceptional cases as the basic for a claim about what is true in general.

Even if it is acceptable that a causal relationship between those two phenomenal truly exist, we still have good

reason to question the hasty conclusion. Firstly, the people who was tired during the day may not against to do

exercises. Secondly, even if we admit that those groups of people lacked of exercises, but why should they eat

less, because there is no evidence explicates that those people eat too much.这段比较简练


In sum, this argument suffers from several fatal fallacies. To lend strong support to the conclusion the author

should provide detail information of the study. To better support the notion, more evidence concerning the live

habit of the people who snore should be given and a comparison between the ordinary one and the people who

snore should be provided.


感觉你的argument应该还是比较成熟了,注意一下单复数~~~虽然不是大问题,但累计过多会影响分数~