issue38 Spring-第二次作业

林周孟UID: 2341714

    issue38  “In the age of television,reading books is not as important as it once was.People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.”

     Words :624     Time: 100 minutes
    Is reading books not as important as it once was?Can people learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books?The speaker claims so about the both above questions.However,I strongly disagree.I concede that in some respects,television is more effective and valuable than books as a medium for learning.But in most respects,however,books always play a leading role in learning.
    To begin with,television holds certain advantages over books in learning skills which require careful operation.For instance,when medical students who is learing the skills of operating on patients,perhaps the best way is that they watch the operating process face-to-face with the professor,in which situation they can discuss the details and outline of operation after the professor have finished the operation.However ,in real situation,medical students are not allowed to be in the operating room when an operation is in the process due to the safety of the operation and the limited space of the operating room.In this situation,maybe learning from television that record the overall operating process of  a operation is the best way for medical students.In which situation,not only all the class can learn together but also the professor can explain every detail and outline of the overall operation.In my view,this is the most effective means in learning such accurate skills.Thus,this advantages of learning from television can’t be replaced by books or any other written materials.
    However, the speaker overlooks most respects in which books is predominant to television as a means of learning.Through human history,we learn knowledge from books ;while television ,which is mainly as a manner of  entertainment,was invented in the last two centuries.Actually,when we were children,we developed our positivity and diligence by learning from books,which may have great influence on our lifetime of learning.If we believe that we can learn as much by watching television as we can by reading books,and therefore we choose to watch TV all day.Then perhaps we will become lazy ,which is opposed to the goal of education,even though we may learn something useful.
    Morover ,the speaker ignores that certain type of knowledge can be learned only by books.Considering the long period of human civilization of five thousand years,a great deal of knowledge have been recorded in the books.In order to learn accurate and objective knowledge we can not but to learn from books.Some people may contend that why not learn by television for the sake that many historical events have been transferred to television.However,in the contemporary society for the porpose of pursuing the most profit in every business,the producers of television may modify some historical events in order to cater to widest possible viewers,which may result the knowledge we learned is doubtful.
    The final argument has to do with that it is more convenient and cheaper to learn by books than by television.As we know,television are available only when there is electricity ,batteries or cable connections.However,we can’t always satisfy such conditions in a given place due to some unexpected situations.Morover,television are not only more expensive and bigger in size,but also less portable and widespread than books.However,we can learn any knowledge if we have a correlative book in any place if we are allowed given that books are portable.In addition,books are widespread and can be available for poor people ,who may be unable to afford for buying a television,in the poorest district such places as south Africa.
    In sum ,television is effective in learning certain type of knowledge that requires accurate operation.However,in most respects,books have instinct advantages over books as a medium for learning.In the final analysis,we had better to employ both approaches to learn knowledge in that each of them has their respective advantages and the renovation of knowledge changes so quickly that we have to use every comparatively more effective means when it comes to learning.


欢迎大家提出宝贵的意见！！！！！

xihaiweiwei3UID: 2390076

占座先 ！！:)
我来改楼上的作文吧！:handshake

xihaiweiwei3UID: 2390076

issue38  “In the age of television,reading books is not as important as it once was.People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.”     Words :624     Time: 100 minutes
Is（Does） reading books not as important as it once was? Can people learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books? The speaker claims so about the both above questions. However, I strongly disagree. I concede that in some respects, television is more effective and valuable than books as a medium for learning. But in most respects (aspects), however, books always play a leading role in learning.
To begin with, television holds certain advantages over books in learning skills which require carefully operation. For instance, when medical students who is learning the skills of operating on patients, perhaps the best way is that they watch the operating process face-to-face with the professor, in which situation they can discuss the details and outline of operation after the professor have finished the operation. However , in real situation(actually?), medical students are not allowed to be in the operating room when an operation is in the process due to the safety of the operation and the limited space of the operating room. In this situation, maybe learning from television that record the overall operating process of  a operation is the best way for medical students. In which situation, not only all the class can learn together but also the professor can explain every detail and outline of the overall operation. In my view, this is the most effective means in learning such accurate skills. Thus, this advantages of learning from television can’t be replaced by books or any other written materials.
However, the speaker overlooks most respects in which books is predominant to television as a means of learning. Through human history, we learn knowledge from books ;while television ,which is mainly as a manner of  entertainment, was invented in the last two centuries. Actually, when we were children, we developed our positivity and diligence by learning from books, which may have great influence on our lifetime of learning. If we believe that we can learn as much by watching television as we can by reading books, and therefore we choose to watch TV all day. Then perhaps we will become lazy ,which is opposed to the goal of education, even though we may learn something useful.
Moreover, the speaker ignores that certain type of knowledge can be learned only by books. Considering the long period of human civilization of five thousand years, a great deal of knowledge have been recorded in the books. In order to learn accurate and objective knowledge we can not but to learn from books. Some people may contend that why not learn by television for the sake that many historical events have been transferred to television. However, in the contemporary(?) society for the purpose of pursuing the most profit in every business, the producers of television may modify some historical events in order to cater to widest possible viewers, which may result the knowledge we learned is doubtful.
The final argument has to do with that it is more convenient and cheaper to learn by books than by television. As we know, television is available only when there is electricity, batteries or cable connections. However, we can’t always satisfy such conditions in a given place due to some unexpected situations. Moreover, television is not only more expensive and bigger in size, but also less portable and widespread than books. However(为何用两次？), we can learn any knowledge if we have a（the） correlative book in any place if we are allowed given that books are portable. In addition, books are widespread and can be available for poor people, who may be unable to afford for buying a television, in the poorest district such places as South Africa.
In sum, television is effective in learning certain type of knowledge that requires accurate operation. However, in most respects, books have instinct advantages over books as a medium for learning. In the final analysis, we had better to employ both approaches to learn knowledge in that each of them has their respective advantages and the renovation of knowledge changes so quickly that we have to use every comparatively more effective means when it comes to learning.欢迎大家提出宝贵的意见！！！！！
不客气了！改了很多地方，真不好意思！
你在打字的时候，以后要打完一句，紧跟着打标点，再打空格。
每段之间要空出一行，开头不用缩进。
还有你的文中的However真太多了，转折的方法很多的！
总体写的挺有新意，学医很辛苦，还要GRE，不易啊！
加油！一起努力吧！！:loveliness: :handshake

[ 本帖最后由 xihaiweiwei3 于 2007-11-2 20:13 编辑 ]

lifeng_913UID: 2397925

    Is reading books not as important as it once was?Can people learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books?(用疑问开头是很好的ISSUE开头,但感觉这两句话过于简单,不能起到很好的震撼效果,建议修改,可以在后面加上as the statement contends)The speaker claims so about the both above questions.(这么说是中式英语吧,可以说成the speaker holds an assentient points on both of  the above questions.)books or any other written materials cannot replace these advantages of learning from television.However,I strongly disagree.I concede that in some respects,television is more effective and valuable than books as a medium for learning. Nevertheless, in most respects,however,books always play a leading role in learning.(我觉得开头可以简化,提出问题以后,直接是I concedeXXXX,in my view+your viewpoint.可以不必说speaker的观点)
    To begin with,television holds certain advantages over books in learning skills,(+逗号,后面是非限定性定语从句) which require careful operation.(论点很新颖)For instance,when medical students who is learning the skills of operating on patients,perhaps the best way is that they watch the operating process face-to-face with the professor,in which situation they can discuss the details and outline of operation after the professor have finished the operation.Nevertheless,(用这个词,不好总使however) in real situation,medical students are not allowed to be in the operating room when an operation is in the process due to the safety of the operation and the limited space of the operating room.So learning from television that record the overall operating process of  an operation is the best way for medical students.(very good instance!可以考虑再简洁一些就更好了!)In which situation,not only all the class can learn together but also the professor can explain every detail and outline of the overall operation.In my view,this is the most effective means in learning such accurate skills.Thus,these advantages of learning from television cannot be replaced by books or any other written materials.(可以用主动语态来表示books or any other written materials cannot replace these advantages of learning from television.)
    However, the speaker overlooks most respects in which books is predominant to television as a measure(means是一个略带贬义的词) of learning.Through human history,we learn knowledge from books, while television ,which is mainly as a manner of  entertainment,was invented in the last two centuries.Actually,when we were children,we developed our positivity and diligence by reading books,which may have great influence on our lifetime of learning.If we believe that we can learn as much by watching television as we can by reading books, therefore, we choose to watch TV all day.Then perhaps we will become lazy ,which is opposed to the goal of education,even though we may learn something useful.
    Moreover ,the speaker ignores that certain type of knowledge can be learned only by books.(很好的论点,但建议此论点用主动语态提出only books can learn certain type of knowledge.)Considering the period of human civilization of recent two thousand years,(说5千年,外国人可能会觉得比较夸张,不合他们的思考方法吧)a great deal of knowledge has been recorded in books.In order to learn accurate and objective knowledge we can not but to learn from books.Some people may contend that why not learn by television for the sake that many historical events have been transferred to television.However,in the contemporary society for the purpose of pursuing the most profit in every business,the producers of television may modify some historical events in order to cater to widest possible viewers,which may result the knowledge we learned is doubtful.(good argument here)
    The final argument has to do with that it is more convenient and cheaper to learn by books than by television.As we know,televisions are available only when there is electricity ,batteries or cable connections.However,we can’t always satisfy such conditions in a given place due to some unexpected situations.Moreover,television are not only more expensive and bigger in size,but also less portable and widespread than books.However,we can learn any knowledge if we have a correlative book in any place if we are allowed given that books are portable.In addition,books are widespread and can be available for poor people ,who may be unable to afford for buying a television,in the poorest district such places as South Africa.
    In sum ,television is effective in learning certain type of knowledge that requires accurate operation.However,in most respects,books have instinct advantages over books as a medium for learning.In the final analysis,we had better to employ both approaches to learn knowledge in that each of them has their respective advantages and the renovation of knowledge changes so quickly that we have to use every comparatively more effective means when it comes to learning.


我在语言上修改的相对多一些,因为ISSUE的逻辑修改还不太会,而且怕影响你文章的整体性.提出点建议吧:
感觉ISSUE在论证时展开的比较局限,还可以在The speaker  ignores the decided tendency on the part of owners and managers of television media to filter information in order to appeal to the widest viewing audience, and thereby maximize profit; the speaker’s claim has to do with how well books and television serve their respective archival functions.等方向展开.

言不尽意,为之了了.

[ 本帖最后由 lifeng_913 于 2007-11-3 00:15 编辑 ]

林周孟UID: 2341714

谢谢 xihaiweiwei3  lifeng_913 这个星期一直在忙重修课程，周四我会研究一下你的文章，一起进步吧