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大作文：Some people think the food has been changed by technological and scientific advances is improved ,but others worry that is harmful. Describe both sides and give your opinion.

正文：
     Currently, a considerable number of individuals claim that knowledge-based and innovation-driven technology plays an essential role in the development of foodstuff, furthermore, make it better. While others hold the view that ever-changing technology exerts an adverse effect on eatable. In this essay, I intend to discuss both perspectives and offer my own judgment.
     Some people point out that the trends of modern society seem to all point to one ultimate goal-saving time, and food which produced by advancing technology well serves this purpose. For instance, dumplings and noodles are significant kinds of traditional food which serve us for thousands of years, however, as the introduction of freezing technology becomes a reality, these foods are able to be stored in the fridge effectively as the kind of freezing dumplings and freezing noodles. In other words, advanced technology can positively contribute to the keeping fresh of traditional foods and saving the time for cooking it.
     On the contrary, the critics of the high technology food consider that freezing food is far from satisfactory in terms of nutrition. It usually does not compose a balanced diet and is low in nutritional value. Moreover, due to long history of enjoying, some of us, the elders especially, would prefer hand-making food to some food made by scientific advance, the familiar fragrance of dishes and warm environment with family members might make them comfortable, which is irreplaceable by the advancing technology.
     By way of conclusion, from my perspective, the positive and indispensable role that advancing technology play in changing our eatable is widely and easily seen in our daily lives. However, we always need access to increasingly effectively approaches which can ensure enough alimentation in our daily intaking food.(283)

[ 本帖最后由 lovebearmuse 于 2007-11-4 17:48 编辑 ]

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Currently, a considerable number of individuals claim that knowledge-based and innovation-driven technology plays an essential role in the development of foodstuff, furthermore, make it better. While others hold the view that ever-changing technology exerts an adverse effect on eatable. In this essay, I intend to discuss both perspectives and offer my own judgment.（第一段写出自己的观点比较好。明了）
     Some people point out that the trends of modern society seem to all point to one ultimate goal-saving time, and food which produced by advancing technology well serves this purpose. For instance, dumplings and noodles are significant kinds of traditional food which serve us for thousands of years, however, as the introduction of freezing technology becomes a reality, these foods are able to be stored in the fridge effectively as the kind of freezing dumplings and freezing noodles. In other words, advanced technology can positively contribute to the keeping fresh of traditional foods and saving the time for cooking it.
     On the contrary, the critics of the high technology food consider that freezing food is far from satisfactory in terms of nutrition. It usually does not compose a balanced diet and is low in nutritional value. Moreover, due to long history of enjoying, some of us, the elders especially, would prefer hand-making food to some food made by scientific advance, the familiar fragrance of dishes and warm environment with family members might make them comfortable, which is irreplaceable by the advancing technology.
     By way of conclusion, from my perspective, the positive and indispensable role that advancing technology play in changing our eatable is widely and easily seen in our daily lives. However, we always need access to increasingly effectively approaches which can ensure enough alimentation in our daily intaking food.(

总的来说:
1.我不知道怎么改这个作文。..你只在最后一段提出了你自己的观点。但是又HOWEVER掉了..你没有坚持自己的观点。
2.从第2段开始你就在讲SOME..怎么怎样的..第3段写反面..
自己的观点在哪里..?

forbeckUID: 2297645

你是人见人爱:loveliness:

人賤人愛UID: 2226380

;d: 自己懒得写作文就拿来改改..

forbeckUID: 2297645

和我很像哈;d:

人賤人愛UID: 2226380

我想问斑竹, I 作文到底是怎么个格式..? 是自己的观点--支持1--支持2--END.这样吗。?
我写了G作文忘记I 作文怎样的了。

forbeckUID: 2297645

恩~~~可以是这样的格式

其实我心中的格式没有你的这样清晰，第一次见到:handshake

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;d: ;d: ;d: 再接再厉。我要换头..;d: ;d: