issue160(5f 第一次作业)请求赐教

zyb_iceUID: 2417356

Partly agree
1.作者这么认为这些原则有利于国家与民众利益,大众意见易受媒体吵作的而少具有价值性.
2.领导坚持原则有利于他的领导与机构的发展,减少资源浪费.
3.原则也要于时俱进,听取大众的有用意见可以获得民心,知道他们所关心的,领导也需要其它方面的能力.
I strongly agree with the speaker's opinion that the steadily insisting on certain particular principles and objectives is a character of an excellent leader. Nevertheless, it is sometimes necessary, even desirable, for leaders to consider and adopt advices from the populace who are the main body of the whole society.
It might be tempering to think that the author's claim stand on the ground that the principles and objectives are relative to the country security and social safety, or involve the interests of the nation or the public. If it is so, for example, any politic director should commit himself to those roles for the leader's enlightened and broader vista as well as, generally, them driven by the obligation to the constituency. Convinced the importance of the leadership, the leader might lay more stress on the pressing social problems and long--term development of country rather than on private agenda or self--motives. On the other hand ,any leader should not quickly influenced by shifts in the popular opinion because of the public can easily misled by the mass media which purpose is try its best to stole the spotlight of the public. Individual opinion is lack of worthy for the sake of somebody pay more attention to self-interest, vocational wage or community welfare and so forth
Admittedly, a leader who commit to principles and objectives can come away with great conveniences about mundane business and make leadership more effectively. Primarily, the subordinates might be more likely to respect and defer to a leader whose own explicit principles and plans which are tightly cling to the maximal the benefit of the organization. Moreover, as a result of long--term principles, the group can avoid confusing by the short--term survival and advance, while they can work with unambiguous purpose. Addition, maintaining objectives can make a decision be carried through advent to the end, which avoid waste recourse and reconstruction. For instance, the government official might change his mind about landscape the city street by applying different plans as time goes on. It is not only waste law material and labor force but also undermining the reputation and prestige of the leader.
Notwithstanding the foregoing reasons why a leader should consistently commit to popular principle, this fact poses certain problem of its own that must be addressed in order that the leader utilize power effectively. Firstly, any leader must recognize there are no lasting useful principles, they ought to change they principles and ideology so as to keeping pace with times. Otherwise the outdated principles have no worth more than tamper advance of the institution. Secondly, sometimes the public opinions might sever a vital role in the solving pressing social problems. All the leaders have to keep open--minded to all the useful insights and approaches from any people. By taking opinion from the mass, the leader can make clear what area the public are care about and which problem demand the government attentions and resource. Thirdly, as long as a leader own more capacity ---that is such as cast vision, implement strategy and empower people, a leader can become a more effective leader sooner or later.
To sum up, it is beyond that leaders are the most crucial in any organization, it is important for them insisting principles in favor of the interest of the nation and society, and amending the principles timely. What's more, properly adapting public opinion can serve the leadership better.

shuwenyingUID: 2233183

Partly agree
1.作者这么认为这些原则有利于国家与民众利益,大众意见易受媒体吵作的而少具有价值性.
2.领导坚持原则有利于他的领导与机构的发展,减少资源浪费.
3.原则也要于时俱进,听取大众的有用意见可以获得民心,知道他们所关心的,领导也需要其它方面的能力.
I strongly既然是partly agree就不要用strongly，直接用partly肯能比较好 agree with the speaker's opinion that the steadily insisting on certain particular principles and objectives is a character of an excellent leader. Nevertheless, it is sometimes necessary, even desirable, for leaders to consider and adopt advices from the populace who are the main body of the whole society. 简洁有力地回应题目，开门见山～
It might be tempering to think that the author's claim stand on the ground that the principles and objectives are relative to the country security and social safety, or involve the interests of the nation or the public. If it is so, for example, any politic director should commit himself to those roles for the leader's enlightened and broader vista as well as, generally, them driven by the obligation to the constituency.这里有点让人费解 Convinced the importance of the leadership, the leader might lay more stress on the pressing social problems and long--term development of country rather than on private agenda or self--motives.个人觉得这里有点不太切题，题目主要是说坚持particular principles and objectives，似乎不是指private agenda or self--motives On the other hand ,any leader should not quickly influenced by shifts in the popular opinion because of the public can easily misled by the mass media which purpose is try its best to stole the spotlight of the public. Individual opinion is lack of worthy for the sake of somebody pay more attention to似乎for the sake of & somebody do不可以这样用在一起，建议改一个句型 self-interest, vocational wage or community welfare and so forth.个人认为，这段话的第一个理由有点牵强，反而第二个理由相当好，如果能将其进一步完善和深入应该会是一个闪光点^_^
Admittedly, a leader who commit to principles and objectives can come away with great conveniences about mundane business and make leadership more effectively. Primarily, the subordinates might be more likely to respect and defer to a leader whose own explicit principles and plans which去掉这个词，直接用principles and plans做从句的主语 are tightly cling to把are也去掉，cling to 本身就是一个动词，用了are就成了一个句子有两个谓语 the maximal the benefit of the organization.意思没有讲清楚，换成cling to maximizing the benefit of the ~会不会好点？ Moreover, as a result of long--term principles, the group can avoid confusing avoid being confused by the short--term survival and advance, while they can work with unambiguous purpose. Addition Additionally, maintaining objectives can make a decision be carried through advent to the end, which avoid waste recourse and reconstruction. For instance, the government official might change his mind about landscape the city street by applying different plans as time goes on. It is not only waste law material and labor force but also undermining the reputation and prestige of the leader.逻辑清晰，论证流畅，很有说服力～只有一点用词上的小问题
Notwithstanding the foregoing reasons why a leader should consistently commit to popular principle, this fact poses certain problem of its own that must be addressed in order that the leader utilize power effectively. Firstly, any leader must recognize there are no lasting useful principles有点太绝对了吧，正如我们常常要攻击题目的绝对观点，在自己写的时候也最好避免太绝对的用词, they ought to change they principles and ideology so as to keeping pace with times个人觉得the time似乎更准确，不太确定……. Otherwise the outdated principles have no worth more than tamper advance of the institution. Secondly, sometimes the public opinions might sever a vital role in the solving pressing social problems. All the leaders have to keep open--minded to all the useful insights and approaches from any people. By taking opinion from the mass, the leader can make clear what area the public are care about and which problem demand改成problems demand或者problem demands the government‘s attentions去掉 and resource. Thirdly, as long as a leader own more capacity ---that is such as cast vision, implement strategy and empower people, a leader can become a more effective leader sooner or later.最好第三点再展开一下。总体上来说，逻辑和论证上没有什么问题，只有一一些小的语法错误～
To sum up, it is beyond that不太明白这样的用法 leaders are the most crucial in any organization, it is important for them insisting改成to instist principles in favor of the interest of the nation and society, and amending the principles timely. What's more, properly adapting public opinion can serve the leadership better.
作者的语言功底很好啊～
总体上，语言流畅，没有什么重大的写作逻辑错误，论证也很有力
只是有点小的语法错误，希望以后注意^_^
还有，关于格式，每段之间要空一行，正式考试的时候也要这样，尽量习惯吧
只是一些个人意见，欢迎讨论！以后还请多指教

lestouUID: 2260126

很传统的思路,不过基本工还不错.
提一点吧,第2段造的那几个复杂句结构好象有点绕,建议自己再读下

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