12.8考,求拍大作文

firhadayUID: 2287086

45. Some people prefer to get up early in the morning and start the day's work. Others prefer to get up later in the day and work until late at night. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.  

     Some may be fond of getting up early in the morning and sleeping early in the night because they would feel better, while others prefer the opposite living style. As for me, I am much more interested in the later one. Admittedly, getting up early in the morning brings us a lot of benefits. We can breathe the fresh air in the morning, which may be vital to our healthy life. We can do some exercises in the morning such as jogging. That would make our figure more perfect. Moreover, in the morning, our memory is at its best level. So we can do a lot of reciting or memorizing works.
     However, on the other hand, the disadvantages of this life style are obviously. To be frank, when the winter is coming, I prefer to bury myself in the bed because it is so warm. I even hated to get up at 7 or 8 in the winter morning, when the day are almost just after dawn and the temperature is so low. Besides, in my point of view, in order to get a healthy body, we must go for resting early in the night in order to let our body a fully good rest. We must sleep early, to make up for the missing hours caused by the early getting up.
     In that case, I are so convinced that i am a person so in favor of getting late and work until late in the night. Admittedly, the late night are so quite. In that environment, I are ready to do more things, especially those trouble things and pains-taking things. I can have a good consideration of the problems and difficulties in the daily life. Apart from these, I am a person of romance. In my definition, the late night, with a lightening moon and some shiny stars are most romantic in the nature.
     Furthermore, I need to be used to this working late life style because this life style may be the most suitable for my future work. We are now live in a ever-competing society. In order to get better work done, we need to spare more time for working. As a result, I will be not able to get to bed early in the night. In that case, I need to adapt myself to this kind of life style. In order to make the preparation, I think I can live that life style from now on.
     In conclusion, early getting up and early getting to bed have a lot of benefits to us. However, in our nowadays society, the later life style are more needed because that we often work extra hours. Especially, as for me, the late night means some atmosphere of romance, which is just my favorite atmosphere.

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[ 本帖最后由 firhaday 于 2007-12-1 08:45 编辑 ]

firhadayUID: 2287086

没有帮我拍?自己再修改一下!
Some may be fond of getting up early in the morning and sleeping early in the night because they would feel better, while others prefer the opposite living style. As for me, I am much more interested in the later one.
Admittedly, getting up early in the morning brings us a lot of benefits. We can breathe the fresh air in the morning, which may be vital to our healthy life. We can do some exercises in the morning such as jogging, aerobics, tennis, etc. That would make our figure perfect. Moreover, in the morning, our memory is at its best level. So we can do a lot of reciting or memorizing works.
However, on the other hand, the disadvantages of this life style are obviously. To be frank, when the winter is coming, I prefer to bury myself in the bed because there is so warm. I even hated to get up at 7 or 8 in the winter morning, when the day are almost just after dawn and the temperature is so low. Besides, in my point of view, in order to get a healthy body, we must sleep early, to make up for the missing hours caused by the early getting up. Or we may live in the condition of sub-healthy.
In that case, I am so convinced that i am a person so in favor of getting late and work until late in the night because I am so in love with the environment and view of the late night. Admittedly, the late night is so quite. In that environment, I am ready to do more things, especially those trouble things and pains-taking things. I can have a good consideration of the problems and difficulties in the daily life. Apart from these, I am a person of romance. In my definition, the late night, with a lightening moon and some shiny stars are most romantic in the nature.
Furthermore, I need to be used to this working late life style because this life style may be the most suitable for my future work. We are now live in an ever-competing society. In order to get better work done, we need to spare more time for working. As a result, I will be not able to get to bed early in the night. Accordingly, I need to adapt myself to this kind of life style. In order to make the preparation, I think I should live that life style from now on.
In conclusion, early getting up and early getting to bed brings a lot of benefits to us. However, in our nowadays society, the contrary life style are more needed because that we often work extra hours. Besides, as for me, the late night means some atmosphere of romance, which is just my favorite one.

[ 本帖最后由 firhaday 于 2007-12-1 19:00 编辑 ]

dolphinstefUID: 2364022

我作文也不好～～
恩～～提个小意见好了～～
把WE改成I会不会好点? 因为问的是你CHOOSE的是什么~~而且你后面几段讲的是I,ME~~
上新东方的时候老师说最好全文要统一~~
而且美国人本来就比较注重个人主义~~你的意见不能代表WE的意见~
呵呵~~我也是8号考~~一起加油啦!!

firhadayUID: 2287086

好的,这个没有注意,等一会就马上改正,哈哈,谢谢哦,你也把作文贴出来吧!大家一起帮助嘛

firhadayUID: 2287086

听了楼上的兄弟的,自己又改了一下,看看吧

firhadayUID: 2287086

似乎又忘记贴作文了,诶,看我这破记性!
Some may be fond of getting up early in the morning and sleeping early in the night because they would feel better, while others prefer the opposite living style. As for me, I am much more interested in the later one.
Admittedly, getting up early in the morning brings us a lot of benefits. I can breathe the fresh air in the morning, which may be vital to my healthy life. I can do some exercises in the morning such as jogging, aerobics, tennis, etc. That would make my figure perfect. Moreover, in the morning, memory is at its best level. So I can do a lot of reciting or memorizing works.
However, on the other hand, the disadvantages of this life style are obviously. To be frank, when the winter is coming, I prefer to bury myself in the bed because there is so warm. I even hated to get up at 7 or 8 in the winter morning, when the day are almost just after dawn and the temperature is so low. Besides, in my point of view, in order to get a healthy body, I must sleep early, to make up for the missing hours caused by the early getting up. Or I may live in the condition of sub-healthy.
In that case, I am so convinced that i am a person so in favor of getting late and work until late in the night because I am so in love with the environment and view of the late night. Admittedly, the late night is so quite. In that environment, I am ready to do more things, especially those trouble things and pains-taking things. I can have a good consideration of the problems and difficulties in the daily life. Apart from these, I am a person of romance. In my definition, the late night, with a lightening moon and some shiny stars are most romantic in the nature.
Furthermore, I need to be used to this working late life style because this life style may be the most suitable for my future work. We are now living in an ever-competing society. In order to get better work done, we need to spare more time for extra hour working. As a result, I will be not able to get to bed early in the night. Accordingly, I need to adapt myself to this kind of life style. In order to make the preparation, I think I should live that life style from now on.
In conclusion, early getting up and early getting to bed brings a lot of benefits to me. However, in our nowadays society, the contrary life style are more needed because that I often work extra hours. Besides, as for me, the late night means some atmosphere of romance, which is just my favorite one.

豆豆～UID: 2378384

开头比较模式化，不够吸引人，不过不会因为这个丢太多的分，比较保险。

later－－》 latter

are obviously  --> are obvious

when the winter is coming --> when winter comes

...

楼主的语法错误比较小，但是比较普遍。。。建议多注意小词，the，there，that的用法

In conclusion ==> To sum up. 因为in conclusion表示你得出结论后还有一个推进的过程，而sum up只是总结要点得出结论。

lz的作文比较chinglish，建议多看些英文的新闻，可以从中学到不少的表达法。

总的来说结构还是不错的。也用了详细的例子来论述。

An essay like this may earn a score of 3~3.5 out of 5.

GD LUCK WITH YOUR TOEFL!!!

squall3000UID: 2315646

帮你顶阿！～～

我也开了作文帖求改，豆豆斑斑，有空帮我也提提改进意见啊，多谢啦~~

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