12.8要考 我的作文大聚会!(,每日必定更新,更新到12.4)

firhadayUID: 2287086

这个,要分析透彻,我觉得是要这点字的

squall3000UID: 2315646

首句要清晰，我完全同意豆豆的意见！：）我只是想说，在清楚的前提下，将首句的句式搞得漂亮些，让rater一眼望到，可能比较上算：）

firhadayUID: 2287086

139. What do you consider to be the most important room in a house? Why is this room more important to you than any other room? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.   

In a house, I think the most important room is the sitting room. As it might be the biggest area in a house, it also be the place where our family members spend most time. I choose this room for the following reasons.
We often have some fun and relaxation in the sitting room. There are a lot of electrical equipment in this room, which can relax me. Take Hi-Fi as am example, I can listen to my favorite record after one day of tiring work. Just imagine the situation, you will know how wonderful it is. I close my eyes, lying on the soft sofa, with some slight smells of flower and the music of my favorite in the approach to the night. Besides, I can strengthen my body by doing some exercises in this room. All in all, in this room do I release much pressure.
Another important reason is that it is in this room our family members have a lot of communications and share happy hours together. As daily work become more stressful, we seldom talk or communicate to each other, especially for me and my parents, because we often have a lot of own business. However, in the sitting room, we often watch news together in the sitting room. At that time, we talk a lot about the news, discuss something happen in the daily life, and share some opinions and ideas about the problems. All these communications make relationship of family members more solid If one day, our sitting room no longer be the place we chat, our family would even break. Not until that day is coming, we could realize the importance of the sitting room.
At last but not the least, we often hold a lot of parties in sitting room. Owing to the huge area (compared to other areas in my house), we always host some parties for family members and friends. By chatting, joking and having delicious foods, not only our guests but also ourselves often have a lot of fun there. This room seems to be a perfect place for us to hold party.
To sum up, the most vital places in my house should be my sitting room, not only because it can relax us, but also it can bring happy to others through the party held there.

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[ 本帖最后由 firhaday 于 2007-12-6 17:57 编辑 ]

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楼主加油啊！

firhadayUID: 2287086

昨天出了点意外,在保存的时候,电脑死机了,我可怜的作文就没有了!

firhadayUID: 2287086

谢谢,成败就看后天了,我的T的写作就以今天的这个作为结束了

squall3000UID: 2315646

最后一天了！加油！：）