ARGUMENT15【Aero小组】第2次作业

wellwillUID: 2238480

The arguer assumes that the sales of Old Diary would probably decrease greatly and so do their profits undoubtedly relying on a recent survey whose outcome shows that more than eighty percent of the respondents intend to diminish the foods containing fats and cholesterol from their diets. Furthermore, the arguer propounds a recommendation that Old Diary stockholders sell their shares and other investors not purchase stock in this company. To support this suggestion, he or she also cites such a fact that many of the food products currently marketed by Old Diary Industries are high in fat and cholesterol. In fact this argument suffers many fallacies.

First, the arguer fails to provide more accurate information about the survey. Unknown about the number of the people surveyed and respondents, we are not able to assess the validity of the survey, let along the arguer’s perspective. For example, if two hundred people participate in the survey but no more than ten respond to it, the outcome of survey is worthless of convincing that currently most people concern about their food structure. Even though the survey is sufficient in size and has a large number of respondents, we find no sign of such procedures for random samplings and we have good reason to doubt if the sample, selected by the survey, is representative enough to reflect the general attitudes of people. Perhaps the respondents over eighty percent of all are those who care about their diet health, so it is no wonder that they have a desire to reduce their intake of the foods containing fats and cholesterol. Apparently, unjustifiable is the survey. In addition, that today low-fat products is abound in many food stores makes no sense for the arguer cannot inter that the high-fat foods would lose prevailing market from this insufficient fact as evidence.

Secondly, the arguer, who believes that people prefer to the low-fat foods, falsely assumes that the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly and their profits will of course decrease merely based on the condition that many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy Industries are high in fat and cholesterol. Contrarily, maybe the fact just indicates that the high-fat food is also popular so that the products of Old Dairy Industries are still high in fat and cholesterol. What is more, the arguer ignores the basic economy principle and simply assumes the profits will change with the fluctuation of sales. Actually, this is not the case, for it is possible that the profits perpetuate the trend of increase and even skyrocket sharply despite of the decreasing sales. The arguer doesn’t consider and analyze other factors which influence on the profits of the company such as the cost, the price of products and the tax. If the cost of products is reduced, the price raised, and the tax diminished owing to the favorable tax policy devised by government, though the sales decrease, the profits are likely to rise. Without considering and ruling out these possibilities it is unwarranted for the arguer to substantiate the necessarily coherent relationship between the sales and the profits.
Finally, since the arguer cannot provide sufficient evidences and well-devised reasoning process to modify the fallacies mentioned above, we have good reason to question and reject the suggestion made by the arguer that Old Diary stockholders should sell out their shares in hand and not invest the stocks of the company. Because it is entirely possible that the company stands a dominant stage in current market and their high-fat products are also popular with a large number of consumers so that the stocks of the company may be a preferable object to invest.   

In short, to strengthen and to better assess this argument, the arguer should provide complete information to support that the resources cited are convincing. And the arguer should analyze the possible situations thoroughly and eliminate these possibilities to convince us his or her recommendation.

没怎么构思 直接按顺序攻击 有些话是硬凑上的因为担心字数不够 请大家不吝赐拍！

houyanchunUID: 2432949

Argument15:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-782531-1-1.html

wellwillUID: 2238480

我貌似不拍你的 头也已经分配好任务了呀

tonyyoreUID: 2317273

The arguer assumesthat the sales of Old Diary would probably decrease greatly and so dotheir profits undoubtedly relying on a recent survey whose outcomeshows that more than eighty percent of the respondents intend todiminish the foods containing fats and cholesterol from their diets.Furthermore, the arguer propounds a recommendation that Old Diarystockholders sell their shares and other investors not purchase stockin this company. To support this suggestion, he or she also cites sucha fact that many of the food products currently marketed by Old DiaryIndustries are high in fat and cholesterol. In fact this argumentsuffers many fallacies.
开头很不错
First, the arguerfails to provide more accurate （应该以详细为修饰吧） information about the survey. Unknownabout the number of the people surveyed and respondents, we are notable to assess the validity of the survey, let along（alone) the arguer’sperspective.(perspective在这里是什么意思呢？) For example, if two hundred people participated in thesurvey but no more than ten responded to it, the outcome of survey isworthless of convincing that currently most people concern about theirfood structure. Even though the survey is sufficient in size(scale) and has alarge number of respondents, we find no sign of such procedures forrandom samplings and we have good reason to doubt if the sample,selected by the survey, is representative enough to reflect the generalattitudes of people. Perhaps the respondents over eighty percent of allare those who care about their diet health, so it is no wonder thatthey have a desire to reduce their intake of the foods containing fatsand cholesterol. Apparently, unjustifiable is the survey.(这个倒装用的不是时候，感觉很做作) In addition,that today low-fat products is abound(abound是动词) in many food stores makes nosense for the arguer cannot inter that the high-fat foods would loseprevailing market from this insufficient fact as evidence. (这句话的结构是什么？没看懂。。。)

Secondly, thearguer, who believes that people prefer to the low-fat foods, falselyassumes that the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly andtheir profits will of course decrease merely based on the condition(可以删去)that many of the food products currently marketed by Old DairyIndustries are high in fat and cholesterol. Contrarily, maybe the factjust indicates that the high-fat food is also popular so that theproducts of Old Dairy Industries are still high in fat and cholesterol.What is more, the arguer ignores the basic economy principle and simplyassumes the profits will change with the fluctuation of sales.Actually, this is not the case, for it is possible that the profitsperpetuate the trend of increase and even skyrocket sharply despite ofthe decreasing sales.The arguer doesn’t consider and analyze otherfactors which influence on the profits of the company such as the cost,the price of products and the tax. If the cost of products is reduced,the price raised, and the tax diminished owing to the favorable taxpolicy devised by government, though the sales decrease, the profitsare likely to rise. Without considering and ruling out thesepossibilities it is unwarranted for the arguer to substantiate thenecessarily coherent relationship between the sales and the profits.
这一段的论述比较有力

Finally, since thearguer cannot provide sufficient evidences and well-devised reasoningprocess to modify the fallacies mentioned above, we have good reason toquestion and reject the suggestion made by the arguer that Old Diarystockholders should sell out their shares in hand and not invest thestocks of the company. Because it is entirely possible that the companystands a dominant stage in current market and their high-fat productsare also popular with a large number of consumers so that the stocks ofthe company may be a preferable object to invest.   

In short, tostrengthen and to better assess this argument, the arguer shouldprovide complete information to support that the resources(evidence?sources?) cited areconvincing. And the arguer should analyze the possible situationsthoroughly(表达全面地应该用comprehensively) and eliminate these possibilities to convince us (of) his or herrecommendation.

文章的语言还是不错的，论证的角度也比较恰当。但倒数第二段的论证失去了其本应有的意义，或许应该把别的逻辑错误概要的论述一下，成为一段，然后在最后一段开头用一句话表明这篇Argument的incredibility。

lovemxfUID: 2335206

The arguer assumes that the sales of Old Diary would probably decrease greatly and so do their profits undoubtedly relying on a recent survey whose outcome shows that more than eighty percent of the respondents intend to diminish the foods containing fats and cholesterol from their diets. Furthermore, the arguer propounds a recommendation that Old Diary stockholders sell their shares and other investors not purchase stock in（of）this company. To support this suggestion, he or she also cites（引用一般后边跟的是survey 这个动词有问题）such a fact that many of the food products currently marketed by Old Diary Industries are high in fat and cholesterol. In fact this argument suffers many fallacies.

First, the arguer fails to provide more accurate information about the survey. Unknown about the number of the people surveyed and respondents, we are not able to assess the validity of the survey, let along the arguer’s perspective. For example, if two hundred people participate in the survey but no more than ten respond to it, the outcome of survey is worthless of convincing that currently most people concern about their food structure. Even though the survey is sufficient in size and has a large number of respondents, we find no sign of such procedures for random samplings and we have good reason to doubt if the sample, selected by the survey, is representative enough to reflect the general attitudes of people. Perhaps the respondents over eighty percent of all are those who care about their diet health, so it is no wonder that they have a desire to reduce their intake of the foods containing fats and cholesterol. Apparently, unjustifiable is the survey. In addition, that today low-fat products is abound in many food stores makes no sense for the arguer cannot inter that the high-fat foods would lose prevailing market from this insufficient fact as evidence.（这个问题好像与SURVEY无关。）

Secondly, the arguer, who believes that people prefer to the low-fat foods,（就是废话可以不要） falsely assumes that the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly and their profits will of course decrease merely based on the condition that many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy Industries are high in fat and cholesterol. Contrarily, maybe the fact just indicates that the high-fat food is also popular so that the products of Old Dairy Industries are still high in fat and cholesterol. What is more, the arguer ignores the basic economy principle and simply assumes the profits will change with the fluctuation of sales. Actually, this is not the case, for it is possible that the profits perpetuate the trend of increase and even skyrocket sharply despite of the decreasing sales.（什么意思啊没看明白） The arguer doesn’t consider and analyze other factors which influence on the profits of the company such as the cost, the price of products and the tax. If the cost of products is reduced, the price raised, and the tax diminished owing to the favorable tax policy devised by government, though the sales decrease, the profits are likely to rise. Without considering and ruling out these possibilities it is unwarranted for the arguer to substantiate the necessarily coherent relationship between the sales and the profits.
Finally, since the arguer cannot provide sufficient evidences and well-devised reasoning process to modify the fallacies mentioned above, we have good reason to question and reject the suggestion made by the arguer that Old Diary stockholders should sell out their shares in hand and not invest the stocks of the company. Because it is entirely possible that the company stands a dominant stage in current market and their high-fat products are also popular with a large number of consumers so that the stocks of the company may be a preferable object to invest.   

In short, （没有结论句）to strengthen and to better assess this argument, the arguer should provide complete information to support that the resources cited are convincing. And the arguer should analyze the possible situations thoroughly and eliminate these possibilities to convince us his or her recommendation.

实在是太长了，我是应逼着自己看完的，argument400字就可以没有必要写这么多，而且的确觉得有很多废话。

[ 本帖最后由 lovemxf 于 2007-12-22 23:35 编辑 ]