Issue83[SpringCity飞跃小组] 第二次作业

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83"Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."

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Common senses tell us that an ecosystem is smart enough to adjust itself ,because the all existence in a certain areas collaborate with one another as an entirety, which can stay at a dynamic balanced state. Those wilderness areas work in the same way. What's more, those remote wilderness areas, especially those accessible to only few people because of few turbulence from outside. Thus there is no need to preserve those wildness areas, is there? As a matter of fact, there is a very need, especially in nowadays.

As mentioned above, the wilderness areas can work as intellectual systems, so does the whole globe .The all things on the earth serve as the famous global ecosystem. That is to say, those wilderness areas are not alone as them seem apparently .It's reported that DDT, which once enjoys a good name of insecticide , in some bird in Arctic, where few souls visit at all. Their predators get contaminated via the so-called food chain. Since no eyes kept on those areas, if natural disasters fall on the creatures there, such as foods, plague and fires, the virgin area undoubtedly become a hell .Another huge problem , the notorious global warming crisis due to green house effect with the development of industry and increase of economy , should never be ignorant,. Thanks to globe warming, many small ecosystems have broken down, never getting recovered, and gone for good.

It's high time that the wildness areas, including those remote areas and those few people reach, should be preserved, not alone causing damages to them. The governments that work as the authorities, have great responsibility to take active actions now. For example, in China the population of the great panda in the wildness area once became small. Thanks to the Chinese government’s making good efforts to give human aids to those cute creatures, involving in man-assisted fertilization and feeding the baby pandas, the number of the great pandas is on the increase now. In case the publicly owned wildness areas get ruined, education and propagations about the huge importance of the preservation of wildness areas .Money and efforts as well as scientific and technological supports should be afforded to this global campaign.

In summary, the government should spare no efforts to preserve the publicly owned wildness areas, even those remote and inaccessible areas. To preserve those areas is to preserve our own home, the beautiful blue planet.

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我就看前两段吧，留点给后面的人看。

Common senses tell us thatan ecosystem is smart enough to adjust itself ,because the allexistence in a certain areas collaborate with one another as anentirety, which can stay at a dynamic balanced state. Those wildernessareas work in the same way. What's more, those remote wilderness areas,especially those accessible to only few people because of fewturbulence from outside. (没有谓语，不完整)Thus there is no need to preserve thosewildness areas, is there（太中文化了，可以该做 is that right?）? As a matter of fact, there is a very need,( 和前面一样的毛病，建议改成 I firmly suggest that ...的形式)especially in nowadays.


As mentioned above, thewilderness areas can work as intellectual systems, so does the wholeglobe（有没有这一句没啥关系吧） .The all things on the earth serve as the famous globalecosystem. (不知道为什么要用famous??也不是很清楚你想表达什么意思)That is to say, those wilderness areas are not alone as themseem apparently .It's reported that DDT, which once enjoys a good nameof insecticide , in some bird in Arctic, where few souls visit at all.（这句和DDT有关系么？）Their predators get contaminated via the so-called food chain. Since noeyes kept on those areas, if natural disasters fall on the creaturesthere, such as foods, plague and fires, the virgin area undoubtedlybecome a hell .Another huge problem , the notorious global warmingcrisis due to green house effect with the development of industry andincrease of economy , should never be ignorant,. Thanks to (虽然也有中性的意思，但是thanks to 主要还是用于褒义due to 就好很多)globewarming, many small ecosystems have broken down, never gettingrecovered, and gone for good.（什么意思？）
你的毛病是语言不够地道和熟练，总是中文思维翻译英文。积累太少了。短期要提高最好是背一些常用的模板和句型，可以参考别人写的文章。我最近的几篇文章都是模板套出来的，虽然没有什么个性但是很实用

It's high time that thewildness areas, including those remote areas and those few peoplereach, should be preserved, not alone causing damages to them. Thegovernments that work as the authorities, have great responsibility totake active actions now. For example, in China the population of thegreat panda in the wildness area once became small. Thanks to theChinese government’s making good efforts to give human aids to thosecute creatures, involving in man-assisted fertilization and feeding thebaby pandas, the number of the great pandas is on the increase now. Incase the publicly owned wildness areas get ruined, education andpropagations about the huge importance of the preservation of wildnessareas .Money and efforts as well as scientific and technologicalsupports should be afforded to this global campaign.

In summary, the governmentshould spare no efforts to preserve the publicly owned wildness areas,even those remote and inaccessible areas. To preserve those areas is topreserve our own home, the beautiful blue planet.