ISSUE78/0806-AW小组/第三次作业

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写得感觉很糟，而且45分钟内还没写完，结尾段是后来加上去的.....
下次不能写这么啰嗦



题目：ISSUE78 - "Schools should be required to teach the essential interconnectedness of all human beings and thus help eliminate wars, cultural clashes, and other forms of conflict."
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I strongly agreed with the claim that schools should teach students the interconnectedness of human beings in order to help eliminate wars and other conflicts. Because there are lots of wars and conflicts which were caused by the lack of understanding of interconnectedness of human beings.

There were numerous of wars in the past century. From World War I in 1914 to the Gulf War in 1990, each war brought magnificent loss to people. Houses were burnt down, innocent people were killed by invaders or conquerors. All of these things became scars of the past history.  So, what's the main reason for those wars exist?  Take the Gulf War as an example; we all know that Iraq invaded Kuwait in order to control its oil resources. However, since there are also lots of oil fields in Iraq, why those Iraqi leaders still want to obtain their neighbors resources? One of the most probably answer is those leaders are greedy. They want more than what they already had. And then, there was a war.

Thus, since those people are greedy, why they didn't negotiate with Kuwait and imported some crude oil from Kuwait instead of invade Kuwait to get oil? That's because those Iraqi leaders didn’t understand the essential interconnectedness of human beings.  Iraqi leaders thought the only way to get things they want is violence and suppress. They failed to use human's interconnectedness to solve oil problems. If they could see the interconnectedness between Iraqi people and Kuwaitis. They may solve problems in a more peaceful way. Therefore, teach students the essential interconnectedness of all human beings are necessary. Once students understand the interconnectedness, some wars could be eliminated. Because students will use interconnectedness to judge and solve problems instead of violence when they encounter problems.  

For cultural clashes, one of the reasons which catch the clashes is that people who come from different cultural backgrounds are failed to see the common things existed among different cultures. In that case, people who have different cultures may think that only their own culture is the best. And there are cultural conflicts. We all know that there are lots of cultural differences between westerners and easterners. Such as the color preference, food style, concept of deity, etc. But, people still could find something common from those aspects. For instance, westerners think that the God is the only god who rules the only one heaven. People pray and go to churches in order to show their respect and love for the God. In eastern countries, however, people usually believe that there are lots of gods and each god rule his/her own heaven. So, when the two kind of concepts meet with each other, conflicts may happen. Because people may claim that only their concept of deity is correct.  However, if people realized that although their concepts of deity are different, their common thing is all of them love their gods. No matter what the concept of gods is, people think that gods are kind-hearted and have formidable power, and people love and worship the god they believe in. Once people with different cultural background realize this point, some cultural clashes may disappear. That's the common thing existed in the human's interconnectedness. Thus, if students are taught with the essential interconnectedness of human beings, they are easier to reach a common point of view with others even those who have different customs and cultures compared with them.

As a conclusion, I think that the knowledge of essential interconnectedness could help students understand others’ opinion and behavior. It also can let people solve problems in peaceful ways. Therefore, schools should required to teach students that knowledge.

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I strongly agreed with the claim that schools should teach students the interconnectedness of human beings in order to help eliminate wars and other conflicts. (That's 或者前面用逗号,because只能是从句)Because there are lots of wars and conflicts which were caused by the lack of understanding of interconnectedness of human beings.

(There were numerous of wars in the past century. From World War I in 1914 to the Gulf War in 1990, each war brought magnificent loss to people. Houses were burnt down, and innocent people were killed by invaders or conquerors. All of these things became scars of the past history.  So, what's the main reason for those wars exist? )这些可以删掉,与主题关系不大Many wars were brought out because the leaders of two sides failed to use human's interconnectedness to solve problems.这样总起一下。Take the Gulf War as an example; we all know that Iraq invaded Kuwait in order to control its oil resources. However, since there are also lots of oil fields in Iraq, why those Iraqi leaders still want to obtain their neighbors resources? One of the most probably answer is that非口语最好别省 those leaders are greedy. They want more than what they already had. And then, there was a war.

Thus, since those people are greedy, why they didn't (didn't they)negotiate with Kuwait and imported some crude oil from Kuwait instead of invade Kuwait to get oil? That's because those Iraqi leaders didn’t understand the essential interconnectedness of human beings.  Iraqi leaders thought the only way to get things they want is violence and suppress. They failed to use human's interconnectedness to solve oil problems. If they could see the interconnectedness between Iraqi people and Kuwaitis. They may solve problems in a more peaceful way. Therefore, teach students the essential interconnectedness of all human beings are necessary. Once students understand the interconnectedness, some wars could be eliminated. Because students will use interconnectedness to judge and solve problems instead of violence when they encounter problems.  

For cultural clashes, one of the reasons which catch the clashes is that people who come from different cultural backgrounds are failed to see the common things existed among different cultures. (总起得很好，文化方面)In that case, people who have different cultures may think that only their own culture is the best. And there are cultural conflicts. We all know that there are lots of cultural differences between westerners and easterners. Such as the color preference, food style, concept of deity, etc. But, people still could find something common from those aspects. For instance, westerners think that the God is the only god who rules the only one heaven. People pray and go to churches in order to show their respect and love for the God. In eastern countries, however, people usually believe that there are lots of gods and each god rule his/her own heaven. So, when the two kind of concepts meet with each other, conflicts may happen. Because people may claim that only their concept of deity is correct.  However, if people realized that although their concepts of deity are different, their common thing is that all of them love their gods. No matter what the concept of gods is, people think that gods are kind-hearted and have formidable power, and people love and worship the god they believe in. Once people with different cultural background realize this point, some cultural clashes may disappear. That's the common thing existed in the human's interconnectedness. Thus, if students are taught with the essential interconnectedness of human beings, they are easier to reach a common point of view with others, even with those who have different customs and cultures compared with them.

As a conclusion, I think that the knowledge of essential interconnectedness could help students understand others’ opinion and behavior. It also can let people solve problems in peaceful ways. Therefore, schools should required to teach students that knowledge.

文章内容很深入。思想深刻。见解独到。
主体部分前两段写战争方面，后一段写文化方面。写的很好。但是前两段入题慢。结构不很合理。
开头段和结尾段由于时间原因，很仓促。可以再斟酌。