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xiahsoulUID: 2441730

ARGUMENT45 - The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.
"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."
提纲：
1.北极熊不一定减小了，可能只是不再打猎的那段时间、那个地点
2.不一定北极的温度下降了，就算下降了也不一定到了让冰融化了  洋流
3.因果关系不一定成立：同时发生不一定就有关系吧····他因：污染、过度打猎、紫外线
WORD:471                                              TIME:2008.2.8

The causal relationship between higher temperature and decreasing population is not as cogent as the arguer assumes, and cannot stand much reexamination.

To begin with, the arguer presumes in this argument that the population of arctic deer decreased according to the information given by local hunters. However, it may be not the case. Given that the hunters only hunt their quarries where is suitable for hunting and the arctic deer move over ice from island to island, it is entirely possible during the hunting time most of the deer migrate to other island where the situation is too hazardous that the hunters merely go hunting. Hence, the reports cannot reflect the overall population and the conclusion drawn based on that would be groundless.

Then, the arguer assumes, on the basis of global warming, that the sea ice in Canada's arctic region has melt, which is untenable as well. There is a chance that the temperature in Canada's arctic region remains as cold as before, or even colder. Further, even if we accept the temperature in that region decreased, if the global warming just cause slightly rising--perhaps only 0.1 degree-- in temperature, while the average temperature there is more than 30 degree below zero, namely, the change in temperature is not enough to contribute the melting of the sea ice. Or perhaps the huge decreases in temperature may be offset by the ocean current, for as far as my geographic knowledge I am concerned, the ocean current may also cause the sea freezing. Even if the temperature in Canada's arctic region really increased and as a result the sea ice has melt, We may think believe perhaps still in some of the year, the ice can cover the sea separating the islands although most of the time the ice melt. In fact, there is another possibility to consider: As the rising of temperature in Canada's arctic region, the arctic deer have already accommodated themselves to the changing surrounding. If either scenario above is the case, the age-old migration patterns did not be eliminated, let alone the deer is declining due to the breaking of the arctic deer's old habit.

Finally, the cause-and-effect relationship is not well established and overlook other factor may also serve to the declining population. Concurrence of global warming and fewer arctic deer does not indicate the two facts foregoing is relevant, not to mention the causal relationship. And other alternatives may be responsible for the declining population. Perhaps certain harmful human behaviors affect adversely to the living of arctic deer, such as the water pollution--the side effect of the industrial production, the expose to ultraviolet radiation, excessive hunting for arctic deer, and so forth.

In conclusion, the arguer fails to convince me on the correlation between the global warming and the lower population of arctic deer.

ilabcUID: 2298724

提纲：
1.北极熊(是鹿^_^)不一定减小了，可能只是不再打猎的那段时间、那个地点
2.不一定北极的温度下降了，就算下降了也不一定到了让冰融化了  洋流
3.因果关系不一定成立：同时发生不一定就有关系吧····他因：污染、过度打猎、紫外线
WORD:471                                              TIME:2008.2.8

The causal relationship between higher temperature and decreasing population is not as cogent as the arguer assumes, and cannot stand much reexamination.

To begin with, the arguer presumes in this argument that the population of arctic deer decreased according to the information given by local hunters. However, it may be not the case. Given that the hunters only hunt their quarries where is suitable for hunting and the arctic deer move over ice from island to island, it is entirely possible during the hunting time most of the deer migrate to other island where the situation is too hazardous that the hunters merely go hunting.(不太明白) Hence, the reports cannot reflect the overall population and the conclusion drawn based on that would be groundless.

Then, the arguer assumes, on the basis of global warming, that the sea ice in Canada's arctic region has melt, which is untenable as well. There is a chance that the temperature in Canada's arctic region remains as cold as before, or even colder. Further, even if we accept the temperature in that region decreased, if the global warming just cause slightly rising--perhaps only 0.1 degree-- in temperature, while the average temperature there is more than 30 degree below zero, namely, the change in temperature is not enough to contribute（contribute to） the melting of the sea ice. Or perhaps the huge decreases in temperature may be offset by the ocean current, for as far as my geographic knowledge I am concerned, the ocean current may also cause the sea freezing. Even if the temperature in Canada's arctic region really increased and as a result the sea ice has melt, We may think believe perhaps still in some of the year, the ice can cover the sea separating the islands although most of the time the ice melt. In fact, there is another possibility to consider: As the rising of temperature in Canada's arctic region, the arctic deer have already accommodated themselves to the changing surrounding. If either scenario above is the case, the age-old migration patterns did not be eliminated, let alone the deer is declining due to the breaking of the arctic deer's old habit.

Finally, the cause-and-effect relationship is not well established and overlook other factor may also serve to the declining population. Concurrence of global warming and fewer arctic deer does not indicate the two facts foregoing is relevant, not to mention the causal relationship. And other alternatives may be responsible for the declining population. Perhaps certain harmful human behaviors（activities） affect adversely to the living of arctic deer, such as the water pollution--the side effect of the industrial production, the expose to ultraviolet radiation, excessive hunting for arctic deer, and so forth.

In conclusion, the arguer fails to convince me on the correlation between the global warming and the lower population of arctic deer.

逻辑错误都找到了，议论展开的很充分，语法用词都不错。
唯一的缺点是开头结尾略显单薄。要适当充实。除此之外找不出什么更多的缺点了。
keep on fighting!

zephyrqqUID: 2260290

The causal relationship between higher temperature and decreasing population is not as cogent as the arguer assumes, and cannot stand much reexamination.

To begin with, the arguer presumes in this argument that the population of arctic deer decreased according to the information given by local hunters. However, it may be not the case. Given that the hunters only hunt their quarries where is suitable for hunting and the arctic deer move over ice from island to island, it is entirely possible during the hunting time most of the deer migrate to other island where the situation is too hazardous that the hunters merely hardly go hunting. Hence, the reports cannot reflect the overall population and the conclusion drawn based on that would be groundless.

Then, the arguer assumes, on the basis of global warming, that the sea ice in Canada's arctic region has melt, which is untenable as well. There is a chance that the temperature in Canada's arctic region remains as cold as before, or even colder. Further, even if we accept the temperature in that region decreased, if the global warming just cause slightly rising--perhaps only 0.1 degree-- in temperature, while the average temperature there is more than 30 degree below zero, namely, the change in temperature is not enough to contribute the melting of the sea ice. 不错，写得很细Or perhaps the huge decreases in temperature may be offset by the ocean current, for as far as my geographic knowledge I am concerned, the ocean current may also cause the sea freeze. Even if the temperature in Canada's arctic region really increased and as a result the sea ice has melt, We may think believe ？perhaps still in some of the year, the ice can cover the sea separating the islands although most of the time the ice melt. In fact, there is another possibility to consider: As the rising of temperature in Canada's arctic region, the arctic deer have already accommodated themselves to the changing surrounding. If either scenario above is the case, the age-old migration patterns did not be eliminated, let alone the deer is declining due to the breaking of the arctic deer's old habit.恩恩，写得真好，学习学习。。

Finally, the cause-and-effect relationship is not well established and the author overlooks other factor may also serve to the declining population. Concurrence of global warming and fewer arctic deer does not indicate the two facts foregoing is relevant, not to mention the causal relationship. And other alternatives may be responsible for the declining population. Perhaps certain harmful human behaviors affect adversely to the living of arctic deer, such as the water pollution--the side effect of the industrial production, the expose to ultraviolet radiation, excessive hunting for arctic deer, and so forth.

In conclusion, the arguer fails to convince me on the correlation between the global warming and the lower population of arctic deer.

看起来，xiahsoul已经有掌握神韵的感觉了啊，分析很透彻，用词也不错喔~