Argument45 Thrive小组第5次作业

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ARGUMENT45 - The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.

提纲
1.       猎户的报告并没有支持作者的观点；
2.       deer减少和全球变暖的巧合也不能支持作者的观点；
3.       deer的减少或许还有其它原因。

In this editorial, the writer claims that the decline in arctic deer populations result from deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea. To support this argument, reports from local hunters which show decline in deer being are cited to coincide the global warming trends which have caused the sea ice to melt, for the arctic deer have to keep moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year in order to search for food. However, this argument is flawed in several aspects, and is thus unconvincing.

Firstly, the local hunters' reports which claim that the deer populations are declining lend no support to this argument. The writer fails to provide the details of these reports, for example, how many hunters take part in reporting, the size of areas which these reports mentioned, is this decline short-term or long-term, and so forth, thus they are unconvincing. As these reports are from local hunters, what about other areas? Are the other places also suffering from the same decline of deer being? Perhaps arctic deer just only decline in the writer's region, while they are experiencing prosperity in other regions conversely. So the local hunters' reports cannot substantiate the writer's conclusion.

Secondly, the coincidence between the decline of deer populations and recent global warming trends lend no credibility to the writer's conclusion. As the writer asserts, arctic deer have to keep moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year because their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. However, there is a possible assumption that the global warming may make plants flourish in cold places. The plants are sufficient to feed deer being in these areas, thus there is no need for them to travel any more. In a word, the writer fails to establish a causal relationship between the decline of deer populations and recent global warming trends, therefore, it is unwarranted to claim that he decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

Even if the deer populations are declining, it is unfairly to assert that the decline is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea. There are many possible reasons which may actually be responsible for the decline of deer being's populations. It is entirely possible that the hunters' excessive hunting is an important reason which lead to the decline of deer being's populations, or the demolishment of deer being's habitat caused by pollution can also be responsible for this decline. Another possible assumption is natural selection for the arctic deer are so choosy on the habitat; they are not adaptable any more. Without ruling out these possible reasons, the writer of this editorial cannot conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations results from deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

In sum, the writer's conclusion is deteriorated by these flaws, thus is not persuasive. To support the conclusion, the writer should provide the details of the reports which he or she cites; the writer also should clarify the relationship between the decline of deer populations and recent global warming trends; and before the conclusion is made, other possible reason that may be responsible for the decline of the deer populations should be considered.

z12y12l12UID: 2452277

In this editorial, thewriter claims that the decline in arctic deer populations result fromdeer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across thefrozen sea. To support this argument, reports from local hunters whichshow decline in deer being are cited to coincide the global warmingtrends which have caused the sea ice to melt, for the arctic deer haveto keep moving over ice from island to island during the course of ayear in order to search for food. However, this argument is flawed inseveral aspects, and is thus unconvincing.(觉得没有必要restate)

Firstly, the local hunters'reports which claim that the deer populations are declining lend nosupport to this argument. The writer fails to provide the details ofthese reports, for example, how many(为了和后面保持一致，就用the number of吧) hunters take part in reporting,the size of areas which these reports mentioned, is this declineshort-term or long-term, and so forth, thus they(what?) are unconvincing. Asthese reports are from local hunters, what about other areas? Are theother places also suffering from the same decline of deer being?Perhaps arctic deer just only decline in the writer's region, whilethey are experiencing prosperity in other regions conversely. So thelocal hunters' reports cannot bthe writer's conclusion.

Secondly, the coincidencebetween the decline of deer populations and recent global warmingtrends lend no credibility to the writer's conclusion.(换个句型吧...) As the writerasserts, arctic deer have to keep moving over ice from island to islandduring the course of a year because their habitat is limited to areaswarm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough,at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating theislands, allowing the deer to travel over it.(又restate，没有实质分析...) However, there is apossible assumption that the global warming may make plants flourish incold places. The plants are sufficient to feed deer being in theseareas, thus there is no need for them to travel any more. In a word,the writer fails to establish a causal relationship between the declineof deer populations and recent global warming trends, therefore, it isunwarranted to claim that he decline in arctic deer populations is theresult of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patternsacross the frozen sea(觉得这段分析的没有太多的实质内容...).

Even if the deerpopulations are declining, it is unfairly to assert that the decline isthe result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migrationpatterns across the frozen sea. There are many possible reasons whichmay actually be responsible for the decline of deer being'spopulations. It is entirely possible that the hunters' excessivehunting is an important reason which lead to the decline of deerbeing's populations, or the demolishment of deer being's habitat causedby pollution can also be responsible for this decline. Another possibleassumption(感觉这个assumption是不能这么用的) is natural selection for the arctic deer are so choosy onthe habitat; they are not adaptable any more. Without ruling out thesepossible reasons, the writer of this editorial cannot conclude that thedecline in arctic deer populations results from deer being unable tofollow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

In sum, the writer'sconclusion is deteriorated by these flaws, thus is not persuasive. Tosupport the conclusion, the writer should provide the details of thereports which he or she cites; the writer also should clarify therelationship between the decline of deer populations and recent globalwarming trends; and before the conclusion is made, other possiblereason that may be responsible for the decline of the deer populationsshould be considered.