Issue48 by zephyrqq

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ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
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Who made the significant events and trends possible in history, the famous few emphasized by history study, or the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten? To seek a proper answer to this question, we should make a reflection in retrospect of history itself, and get illumination. After that, it might be easy for us to understand that historians are right, it is the famous few that contribute more to the process of human history.

Admittedly, significant historical events and trends would not seems so significant if there had not been the efforts of groups of people who fought for these trends or events, or devoted themselves to these, or both. A typical example in this point is the Great Wall, which have been regarded as one of the seven great wonders of the world as well as a milestone in the history of Chinese architecture. Like any other conspicuous architectural works, the Great Wall would not have been but for the wisdom and strength of numerous hardworking labors in ancient China. This case might throw some light on the point that groups of people whose names have long been forgotten indeed made undeniable contribution to history.

However, we could not lose sight to the indispensable functions of famous few to make these important events and trends taken place, and some of them also got achievement by their own effort with little, if any, help of other people. During the Renaissance in Europe, a large number of painters and writers participated in this revolutionary trends, their activities helped greatly to form a harmony and agreeable atmosphere for artistical creativity. Nevertheless, it was the famous few, like Da Vinci, who laid the spiritual fundament and leaded the trends, and their masterpieces, such as the Last Supper, be viewed as represent the highest accomplishment of the creative style of Renaissance. When it comes to physics, it is the same. The work of a great number of people who focus in this discipline contributed to its development, and breakthroughs, like Newton's law of gravity and Einstein's special and general theory of relativity often brought by the famous few. These cases tells us that the famous few should be remembered by history, because they deserve it, due to their outstanding achievement.

Although both the famous few and groups of forgotten people were essential to historical events and trends, this does not mean that they are of the same importance. To some degree, the role plared by the famous few was more significant than that of groups of ordinary people, for the reason that they were prominent leaders in various areas of society, no matter politics or economy, science or art. This leaders possessed the power and wisdom to govern or lead the idea or action of others. Actually, history inevitably indicates that a group of people could achieve little without the guide of a the famous few.  Even the Great Wall was not built by ancient labors automatically, but under the force of the governor of the time. It was realized by the working of labors, however, it embodies the will of the governor, not the groups of people who built it. This case could be used to point out that the role of the leaders is overwhelmingly significant. Lacking of the direction of leaders, the abilities of groups of people could not be concentrated and then work together orderly to make something wonderful possible. The famous few were such great leaders of their society.

For all this reason, one does not have to go very far to see that the most significant events and trends in history is mainly own to the famous few, though groups of people also played a indispensable part in these trends and events. It seems that their achievement was quite dependent with the famous few. From the perspective of history study, it is not a mistake to place emphasis on prominent individuals. Because it is likely that to emphasize groups of people, instead of the famous few, means emphasize all the people, if so, history study might be but at the risk of emphasizing no one.

[ 本帖最后由 zephyrqq 于 2008-3-6 18:56 编辑 ]

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无奈啊，自己改。。

ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
字数：464   689       用时：00:45:00          日期：2008-3-1 9:09:56

Who made the significant events and trends possible in history, the famous few emphasized by history study, or the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten? To seek a proper answer to this question, we should make a reflection on retrospect of history itself, and get illumination. After that, it might be easy for us to understand that historians are right, it is the famous few that contributed more to the process of human history.

Admittedly, significant historical events and trends would not seems so significant conspicuous if there had not been the efforts of groups of people who fought for these trends or events, or devoted themselves to these, or both. A typical example in this point is the Great Wall, which have been regarded known as one of the Seven great Wonders of the AncientWorld as well as a milestone in the history of Chinese architecture. Like any other conspicuous architectural works, the Great Wall would not have been but for the wisdom and strength of numerous hardworking labors in ancient China. This case might throw some light on the point that groups of people whose names have long been forgotten indeed made undeniable contribution to history.

However, we could not lose sight of the indispensable functions of famous few to make these important events and trends taken place, and some of them also got achievement by their own effort with little, if any, help of other people. During the Renaissance in Europe, a large number of painters and writers participated in this revolutionary trends, their activities helped greatly to form a harmony and agreeable atmosphere for artistical creativity. Nevertheless, it was the famous few, like Da Vinci, who laid the spiritual fundament and leaded the trends, and their masterpieces, such as the Last Supper, be viewed as representations of the highest accomplishments of the creative style of Renaissance. the highest art accomplishments during the Renaissance. When it comes to physics, it is the same. The work of a great number of people who focused in on this discipline contributed to its development, and but historical breakthroughs in physics, like Newton's law of gravity and Einstein's special and general theory of relativity often brought by the famous few. These cases tells us that the famous few should would be certainly remembered by history, because they deserve it, due to for their outstanding achievement.

Although both the famous few and groups of forgotten people were essential to historical events and trends, this does not mean that they are were of the same importance. To some degree, the role played by the famous few was more significant than that of groups of ordinary people, for the reason that they were prominent leaders in various areas of society, no matter politics or economy, science or art. This leaders possessed the power and wisdom to govern or lead the idea or action of others. Actually, history inevitably indicates that a group of people could achieve little without the guide of a the famous few.  Even the Great Wall was not built by ancient labors automatically, but under the force of the governor of the time. It was realized by the working of labors, however, it embodies the will of the governor, not the groups of people who built it. This case could be used to point out that the role of the leaders is overwhelmingly significant. Lacking of the direction of leaders, the abilities of groups of people could not be concentrated and then work together orderly to make something wonderful possible. The famous few were such great leaders of their society.

For all these reasons, one does not have to go very far to see that the most significant events and trends in history were mainly own to the famous few, though groups of people also played a indispensable part in these trends and events. It seems that the achievements of groups of people were quite dependent on the leadership of the famous few. （From the perspective of history study, it is not a mistake to place emphasis on prominent individuals. Because it is likely that to emphasize groups of people, instead of the famous few, means emphasize almost all the people, if so, history study might be at the risk of emphasizing no one. However, history study should also focus on the significant events and trends in themselves. ）删了

[ 本帖最后由 zephyrqq 于 2008-3-3 14:06 编辑 ]

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JJ,我晚上帮你看吧!正好这个文章我有点疑问!

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ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
字数：464   689       用时：00:45:00          日期：2008-3-1 9:09:56

Who made the significant events and trends possible in history, the famous few emphasized by history study, or the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten? To seek a proper answer to this question, we should make a reflection on retrospect of history itself, and (to) get illumination. After that, it might be easy for us to understand that historians are right, it is the famous few that contributed more to the process of human history.
完全同意?看了你后面的内容,让我感觉你的开头还是没有把意思说清晰,可能我觉得开头说明白观点比一个花哨的介绍更重要
Admittedly, significant historical events and trends would not seems so significant conspicuous if there had not been the efforts of groups of people who fought for these trends or events, or devoted themselves to these, or both. A typical example in this point is the Great Wall, which have been regarded known as one of the Seven great Wonders of the AncientWorld as well as a milestone in the history of Chinese architecture. Like any other conspicuous architectural works, the Great Wall would not have been but for the wisdom and strength of numerous hardworking labors in ancient China. This case might throw some light on the point that groups of people whose names have long been forgotten indeed made undeniable contribution to history.
划线的是重复了的吧,在例子叙述时,可以多一些人的贡献,少一些事情的伟大,把例子中为中心服务的重点突现出来!
However, we could not lose sight to the indispensable functions of famous few to make these important events and trends taken place, and some of them also got achievement by their own effort with little, if any, help of other people. During the Renaissance in Europe, a large number of painters and writers participated in this revolutionary trends, their activities helped greatly to form a harmony and agreeable atmosphere for artistical creativity. Nevertheless, it was the famous few, like Da Vinci, who laid the spiritual fundament and leaded the trends, and their masterpieces, such as the Last Supper, be viewed as representations of the highest accomplishments of the creative style of Renaissance. the highest art accomplishments during the Renaissance. When it comes to physics, it is the same. The work of a great number of people who focused in on this discipline contributed to its development, and but historical breakthroughs in physics, like Newton's law of gravity and Einstein's special and general theory of relativity often brought by the famous few. These cases tells us that the famous few should would be certainly remembered by history, because they deserve it, due to for their outstanding achievement.
NEWTON的例子MS已经是雷同了,然后,对于TS的定义可以更清晰,可以说是少数领导了世界的变革.
Although both the famous few and groups of forgotten people were essential to historical events and trends, this does not mean that they are were of the same importance. To some degree, the role played by the famous few was more significant than that of groups of ordinary people, for the reason that they were prominent leaders in various areas of society, no matter politics or economy, science or art. This leaders possessed the power and wisdom to govern or lead the idea or action of others. Actually, history inevitably indicates that a group of people could achieve little without the guide of a the famous few.  Even the Great Wall was not built by ancient labors automatically, but under the force of the governor of the time. It was realized by the working of labors, however, it embodies the will of the governor, not the groups of people who built it. This case could be used to point out that the role of the leaders is overwhelmingly significant. Lacking of the direction of leaders, the abilities of groups of people could not be concentrated and then work together orderly to make something wonderful possible. The famous few were such great leaders of their society.

For all these reasons, one does not have to go very far to see that the most significant events and trends in history were mainly own to the famous few, though groups of people also played a indispensable part in these trends and events. It seems that the achievements of groups of people were quite dependent on the leadership of the famous few. （From the perspective of history study, it is not a mistake to place emphasis on prominent individuals. Because it is likely that to emphasize groups of people, instead of the famous few, means emphasize almost all the people, if so, history study might be at the risk of emphasizing no one. However, history study should also focus on the significant events and trends in themselves. ）删了

感觉很流畅,一正两反,语言不华丽但很舒服,表达也比较精确,这样去考试没有问题的,JJ加油!!!
P.S这个字体放不大,所以没有办法仔细看了,呵呵,原谅我吧!!!

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语言不错，观点是范文一样，认为名人的作用更大。

我写的是中立的，名人和群众都要被关注，你能帮我看看不？

多谢
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