issue139 Every new generation needs to redefine 'right' and

sunbeamyliUID：104835

139"Every new generation needs to redefine 'right' and 'wrong' in its own terms and according to the conditions of its own time."

这次写得多了点，考虑到例子和论据能在许多文章中用也就不管那么多了。
Now you might consider test tube baby commonplace, but you cannot imagine the hot ethical debate over it, once it was, between the divided legislators. It was then a controversial issue. Thanks to those fierce arguments, whether for and against its legitimacy, present parents, who have infertility problems, do not have to worry about the identity of their newborn child: clauses have been added in the laws to redefine it.

Such concern about ever-increasing complexity of people’s interrelation blame on the biological achievement made in the lab.  During the past 6 years, breakthrough has been made in cloning.  However, the application to human cloning is still banned by the international community.  Although opponents often cite technical unsophistication as pretext, failure to explain within the existed ethics might also account for most government decision. Since human is held to be unique and sacred, is human cloning intrinsically wrong by posing a perceived risk of altering this "nature”? Is the cloned baby psychologically harmed and have to endure all the prejudice and hostile from a world that stigmatize him as abnormal?  Until all these perplexities untangled, human reproductive cloning would be allowed without being subject to criminal penalties.

New line should be drawn not only about the moral issues. Due to the fickleness of technological advancement, businessmen find it urgent to rejustify their original practices. While the introduction of Internet provides visible convenience and efficiency, conventional rules are being never before challenged.  In the B-to-B mode, how to judge the action of e-mail receiving? Does an automatic reply represent the intent of the receiver?  What if he comes to the office, the next day, discovering that the quote is too high or the shipping time is not suitable? And is the sender going to bear all the faults for the lost of email, since it’s difficult to find the same things out as did the fax users by checking call-out list? As to the B-to-C mode, problems still exist. How to identify the customer? Is it the responsibility for an online shop to sell alcohol to a teenager disguised as an above-the-legal-age by impermissibly using parent’s credit card? And buying a defective product, which court should the plaintiff appeal to if the accuse has no fixed business cite?

Puzzled? Scared to shop online again? Yours worries were at a time the law drafters’. Fortunately, since the ever surface of these issues, they haven’t stopped to work out a solution. You would be relieved once you look through the Model Law of E-commerce and its related decrees defining and regulating almost all the behavior arisen from Internet.

Aside from that, sports seem to be a field in which criteria is more frequently altered.  In order to enhance the competitiveness and visual effects of some games, fundamental changes have been made in such item as Ping Pong. While spectators applaud the positive sign in sportsmanship, they also pay attention to IOC, the International Olympic Committee about their constant efforts in the anti-doping campaign. Faced with the increasing use of performing-enhancing drugs, the institution has declared harsher penalties and release of illegal dietary supplements is updated timely to ensure the pith of athletic spirit, fairness.

In the process of evolution, human beings survive through each vicissitude by re-examining the situation and making quick response as well as adjustment.  This adaptation requires that every new generation redefine “right” and “wrong” in its own terms and according to the conditions of its own time.  Thus, the social structure and activities could remain in order judging by the current standards.  No matter in ethics, business or sports, man’s redefinition and rejustification at last makes them more confident in confronting whimsicality. And that’s one of the keys that differentiate human from other animals.

sunbeamyliUID：104835

刚才粗略地看了一遍，发现许多不妥之处。自我修改一下吧
Now you might consider test tube baby commonplace, but you cannot imagine the hot ethical debate over it, once it was, between the divided legislators. It was then a controversial issue. Thanks to those fierce arguments, whether for and against its legitimacy, present parents, who have infertility problems, do not have to worry about the identity of their newborn child: clauses have been added（included) in the laws to redefine it.

Such concern about ever-increasing complexity of people’s interrelation blame on the biological achievement (made in the lab去掉，罗嗦）. During the past 6 years, breakthrough has been made in cloning （加animals）. However, the application to human cloning is still banned by the international community. Although opponents often cite technical unsophistication as pretext, failure to explain within the existed ethics might also account for most government decisiton(decisition改为inhibition）. Since human is held to be unique and sacred, is （human cloning 改为 the cloning of man）intrinsically wrong by posing a perceived risk of altering this "nature”? Is the cloned baby psychologically harmed and have to endure all the prejudice and hostile from a world that stigmatize him as abnormal? Until all these perplexities untangled, human reproductive cloning would be allowed without being subject to criminal penalties.

New line should be drawn not only about the moral issues. Due to the fickleness of technological advancement, businessmen find it urgent to rejustify their original practices. While the introduction of Internet provides visible convenience and efficiency, conventional rules are being never before challenged. In the B-to-B mode, how to judge the action of e-mail receiving? Does an automatic reply represent the intent of the receiver? What if he comes to the office, the next day, discovering that the quote is too high or the shipping time is not suitable? And is the sender going to bear all the faults for the lost of email, since it’s difficult to find the same things out as did the fax users by checking call-out list? As to the B-to-C mode, problems still exist. How to identify the customer? Is it the responsibility for an online shop to sell alcohol to a teenager disguised as an above-the-legal-age by impermissibly using parent’s credit card? And buying a defective product, which court should the plaintiff appeal to if the accuse has no fixed business cite?

Puzzled? Scared to shop online again? Yours worries were at a time the law drafters’. Fortunately, since the ever surface of these issues, they haven’t stopped to work out a solution. You would be relieved once you look through the Model Law of E-commerce and its related decrees defining and regulating almost all the behavior arisen from Internet.

Aside from that, sports seem to be a field in which criteria is more frequently altered. In order to enhance the competitiveness and visual effects of some games, fundamental changes have been made in such item as Ping Pong. While spectators applaud the positive sign in sportsmanship, they also pay attention to IOC, the International Olympic Committee about their constant efforts in the anti-doping campaign. Faced with the increasing use of performing-enhancing drugs, the institution has declared harsher penalties and release of illegal dietary supplements is updated timely to ensure the pith of athletic spirit, fairness.

In the process of evolution, human beings survive through each vicissitude by re-examining the situation and making quick response as well as adjustment. This adaptation requires that every new generation redefine “right” and “wrong” in its own terms and according to the conditions of its own time. Thus, the social structure and activities could remain in order judging by the current standards. No matter in ethics, business or sports, man’s redefinition and rejustification at last makes them more confident in confronting whimsicality. And that’s one of the keys  （utimately differentiating） human from other animals.

tomatoeggsUID：82073

Now you might consider test tube baby commonplace, but you cannot imagine the hot ethical debate over it, once it was, between the divided(several) legislators. It was then a controversial issue（此句赘余）. Thanks to those fierce arguments, whether for and against its legitimacy, present parents（与do not have to…语法连接上有问题， 是否在present后加by）, who have infertility problems, do not have to worry about the identity of their newborn(newly-born) child: clauses have been added in the laws to redefine it.

Such concern about ever-increasing complexity of people’s interrelation blame(interrelated blames or complaints) on the biological achievement(s) made in the lab. During the past 6 years, breakthrough has been made in cloning. However, the application to human cloning is still banned by the international community(communities). Although opponents often cite technical unsophistication as pretext, failure to explain(in explanations) within the existed ethics might also account for most government decision(most of the governmental decisions). Since human(being) is held to be unique and sacred, is human cloning intrinsically wrong by posing a perceived risk of altering this "nature”? Is the cloned baby psychologically harmed and have to endure all the prejudice and hostile from a world that stigmatize him as abnormal? Until all these perplexities untangled, human reproductive cloning would be allowed without being subject to criminal penalties.

New line should be drawn not only about the moral issues(不太明白). Due to the fickleness of technological advancement（advance）, businessmen find it urgent to rejustify their original practices. While the introduction of Internet provides visible convenience and efficiency, conventional rules are being never before challenged（have never been challenged so profoundly）. In the B-to-B mode, how to judge the action of e-mail receiving? Does an automatic reply represent the intent of the receiver? What if he comes to the office, the next day, discovering that the quote is too high or the shipping time is not suitable? And is the sender going to bear all the faults for the lost of email, since it’s difficult to find the same things out as did the fax users by checking call-out list? As to the B-to-C mode, problems still exist. How to identify the customer? Is it the responsibility for an online shop to sell alcohol to a teenager disguised as an above-the-legal-age by impermissibly(这里不应用副词) using parent’s credit card? And buying a defective product, which court should the plaintiff appeal to if the accuse has no fixed business cite?

Puzzled? Scared to shop online again? Yours worries were at a time the law drafters’. Fortunately, since the ever surface of these issues（表达似不妥）, they haven’t stopped to work out a solution. You would be relieved once you look through the Model Law of E-commerce and its related decrees defining and regulating almost all the behavior arisen（arising） from Internet.

Aside from that, sports seem to be a field in which criteria is(are) more frequently altered. In order to enhance the competitiveness and visual effects of some games, fundamental changes have been made in such item as Ping Pong. While spectators applaud the positive sign in sportsmanship, they also pay attention to IOC, the International Olympic Committee about their constant efforts in the anti-doping campaign. Faced with the increasing use of performing-enhancing(illegal，其实我也不太了解如何表达此词，但此用法有点weird) drugs, the institution has declared harsher penalties and release of illegal dietary supplements is updated timely to ensure the pith of athletic spirit, fairness.

In the process of evolution, human beings survive through each vicissitude by re-examining the situation and making quick response as well as adjustment. This adaptation requires that every new generation redefine “right” and “wrong” in its own terms and according to the conditions of its own time. Thus, the social structure and activities could remain in order judging(judged) by the current standards. No matter in ethics, business or sports, man’s redefinition and rejustification at last makes(make) them more confident in confronting whimsicality(?). And that’s one of the keys that differentiate human from other animals.


Well done really. You’ve used so many forceful evidences to support your view. Maybe it would be better to use more symbolic transmittal words or sentences between paragraphs. Also, apart from the presence of piles of evidences, some conclusive words are needed actually strengthen the completeness and coherence.

paisleyUID：64183

写的挺好的。看起来这是最有思辩味的一个ISSUE了。
挺难的，暂时也没想出什么好说的来。就是觉得例子稍微多了些，论说的地方太少了。

kiki_yaUID：46397

读的发晕...我一般觉得发晕的文章都是那种too good to be true的...:p

真的写得很好!

Faced with the increasing use of performing-enhancing(illegal，其实我也不太了解如何表达此词，但此用法有点weird) drugs,
我觉得performing-enhancing drugs可直接换为stimulants.  illegal drugs肯定不妥!

sunbeamyliUID：104835

谢谢同志们还有版主paisley花时间看我的文章，谢谢tomatoeggs的改正和建议。
谈谈关于你提到的一些问题。词汇方面：
1。应该是performance-enhancing drug,以前曾在报纸上看到过不是很确定，现在终于在纽约时报上关于IOC的报道中得到证实。
2。present 是形容词，文中指现代的父母亲。
3。most government decision=most of the governmental decisions
      human=human being 可查牛津字典
4。New line should be drawn not only about the moral issues。意思是人们不仅要在道德上划清界限（说明哪些是"right",哪些是“wrong"）。不过这句话在考虑再三后，为了更切题和与上一段文字呼应，决定改为：In fact, new line should be periodically drawn not only in the moral issues.
5。advancement，advance虽然都可作名词，但通常科学和社会进步用前者，后者更多用在作“提升，升职”
6。impermissibly using parent’s credit card。这里impermissibly是修饰后面的动词using，所以为副词。不要被using的动名词形式迷惑。
7。the ever surface of these issues。意为：这个问题刚刚浮出水面。surface这里是指某种事物有了某种明显迹象
8。whimiscality 瞬息万变的事态
  其他的我都非常同意你的修改。：）

关于“摆事实”和“说道理”应当互相平衡的问题，我是这样想的。说这篇文章的抽象，就在于redefine 'right' and 'wrong' in its own terms and according to the conditions of its own time在生活中到底指什么，我在这篇文章是通过“道德观念”，“商家做生意”，“体育”三个方面在新时期面临的新问题都需要制定新的判断准则来说明的，其本身就是用“摆事实”的方法来“说道理”。而对于实例的总结，无非就是用不同的话重复题目，写了反而罗嗦，还不如在最后又将三个例子共同说明的具体概念----制定法律重新定义规范人们的行为-----抽象为人类不断确立对错的标准，也就是该题目。

不过，根据大家的意见，我从非作者的角度再读文章时，觉得直接说试管婴儿的例子是有点突兀。如果在开头加这么一句话可能会好一些：So fast is the world changing that people is obliged to reassess their situation and import new vision to them.

tomatoeggsUID：82073

1。应该是performance-enhancing drug,以前曾在报纸上看到过不是很确定，现在终于在纽约时报上关于IOC的报道中得到证实。
2。present 是形容词，文中指现代的父母亲。
3。most government decision=most of the governmental decisions
human=human being 可查牛津字典
4。New line should be drawn not only about the moral issues。意思是人们不仅要在道德上划清界限（说明哪些是"right",哪些是“wrong"）。不过这句话在考虑再三后，为了更切题和与上一段文字呼应，决定改为：In fact, new line should be periodically drawn not only in the moral issues.
5。advancement，advance虽然都可作名词，但通常科学和社会进步用前者，后者更多用在作“提升，升职”
6。impermissibly using parent’s credit card。这里impermissibly是修饰后面的动词using，所以为副词。不要被using的动名词形式迷惑。
7。the ever surface of these issues。意为：这个问题刚刚浮出水面。surface这里是指某种事物有了某种明显迹象
8。whimiscality 瞬息万变的事态


我想问一下这些好句子是从哪得到的？除了《纽约时报》（网上的吗？请注明网址；还是杂志呢？）外，也谢谢你的指正，我学到很多啊。

sunbeamyliUID：104835

不好意思，读了四年的英语，句子还要临阵磨枪，东凑西拚的话，太丢人了吧！

sunbeamyliUID：104835

其实我的句型很简单，还是那句话，重要的是内容是思想，而不是形式。
词汇方面也不是一朝一夕看两个单词就能怎样的，关键是能够表达意思，用的恰当就好了。
建议做完GRE阅读后，在回顾一遍，每篇几乎都是很棒的issue和argument。
现在临时看纽约时报，一点用都没有，只有浪费时间。不过还是给你网址：www.nytimes.com

lily_changUID：50566

楼主,,我一直关注你的作文,发现你的语言和立论都很厉害啊,,PFPF啊,,我要向你学习...向你靠近.你的作文有范文的风采.

turtle24UID：122933

你寫得很好, 用了很多較複雜的語法, 我學了不少, 這是我少少意見:

1. Thanks to those fierce arguments, whether for and against its legitimacy, the scientific discovery presented a solution to parents who had been infertile.  They no longer needed to worry about the identity of their newborn child as clauses have been added in the laws to redefine it. 我認為這樣改較合乎英文語法

2. Is the cloned baby psychologically harmed and (has) to endure all the prejudice and (hostilities) from a world that stigmatize him as abnormal?
-- only some small grammatical errors

3. (Before) the introduction of Internet provides visibility (不是visible) , convenience and efficiency, conventional rules has never been challenged.

4. And buying a defective product, which court should the plaintiff appeal to if the (defendant) (個人覺得accuse不對, 應用名詞) has no fixed business (site)?

5. Your worries are at a time the law drafters' (I don't understand what it means?????)

6. What is "anti-doping" campaigns??? Pls. advise

7. Thus, the social structure and activities could maintain (remain 是不合語法, 請改用maintain) (in order judging by the current standards????這裡不明所以, pls. make it clear).

sunbeamyliUID：104835

谢谢，你们的关注是我写作的动力！^----^
to Turtle 24

3. (Before) the introduction of Internet provides visibility (不是visible) , convenience and efficiency, conventional rules has never been challenged.  其实，我这里的visible是形容词，显而易见的，明显的意思。

4. And buying a defective product, which court should the plaintiff appeal to if the (defendant) (個人覺得accuse不對, 應用名詞) has no fixed business (site)?   我问中用的是the accused, 意为被指控者。

5. Your worries are at a time the law drafters' (I don't understand what it means?????)  不仅你担心，法律起草者们也曾经为此大伤脑筋。

6. What is "anti-doping" campaigns??? Pls. advise  反兴奋剂（食物添加剂）运动

7. Thus, the social structure and activities could remain in order judging by the current standards.  （remain in order=keep in order， judging by the current standards, 用现代的标准来看）

其他的意见很好，我照单全收。：P

我今天还会贴一篇，请大家继续关注!!!!
同志们，还有不到一个月，一起加油！！！！

realenzymeUID：68994

真的可以说是有范文的感觉了！！