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Due to the modern fierce competition in the workforce market, people are afraid of wasting their time on learning useless information. Therefore, some argued that highschools, colleges and universities should spend more time on teaching them specific subjects and helping them prepare for their future careers and jobs. However, they omitted the fact that any subject is not isolated from other subjects. In addtion, they did not realize that our life involves various aspects besides working. Hence, I disagree that teaching specific subject is what these parts of our education system should do.

On the one hand, with the advancement of our society, any occupation has been built on the knowledge of diverse general subjects. In this sense, although the issue, about wheather high schools, colleges and universities should spend more time on teaching students specific knowledge instead of general subjects, seems controversial, it is not. General subjects are basics of all modern careers. For instance, an architect must possess knowledge in several subjects, such as mathmatics, physics, and chemistry. A doctor need to know biology, mathmatics, and chemistry. Therefore, it is also necessary for students to prepare their future careers that schools spend more time on teaching general subjects.

On the other hand, besides working, hobbies and friends are also parts of our life. First, in order to please and relax ourselves, we need to pursuit some hobbies, including reading, music, painting, and so on. To appreciate these hobbies, we need knowledge in  various general subjects. Second, we also need knowledge from general subjects to broaden topics on which we can talk with friends. In general, more knowledge you possess, more types of friends you can attract.

All in all, leaning general subjects is more important than leaning specific subjects for us. Consequently, I disagree that highschools, colleges and universities should spend more time teaching students specific subjects for future career preparation and spend less time teaching general subjects.

yuanhu124UID: 2444317

也顺道学习你的作文。
disagree是不及物动词，后面要加with
第二段的举例不错，把career和general subjects联系起来了。
整体不错，很清晰！

vanessa20UID: 2479494

Due to the modern fierce competition in the workforce market, people are afraid of wasting their time on learning useless information. Therefore, some argued that highschools, colleges and universities should spend more time on teaching them specific subjects and helping them prepare for their future careers and jobs. However, they omitted the fact that any subject is not isolated from other subjects. In addtion, they did not realize that our life involves various aspects besides working. Hence, I disagree   （intransitive verb ） that teaching specific subject is what these parts of our education system should do.（感觉指代不够清晰）

On the one hand, with the advancement of our society, any occupation has been built on the knowledge of diverse general subjects. In this sense, although the issue, about wheather high schools, colleges and universities should spend more time on teaching students specific knowledge instead of general subjects, seems controversial, it is not. General subjects are basics of all modern careers. For instance, an architect must possess knowledge in several subjects, such as mathmatics, physics, and chemistry. A doctor need to know biology, mathmatics, and chemistry. Therefore, it is also necessary for students to prepare their future careers that schools spend more time on teaching general subjects.

On the other hand, besides working, hobbies and friends are also parts of our life. First, in order to please and relax ourselves, we need to pursuit some hobbies, including reading, music, painting, and so on. To appreciate these hobbies, we need knowledge in  various general subjects. Second, we also need knowledge from general subjects to broaden topics on which we can talk with friends. In general, more knowledge you possess, more types of friends you can attract.

All in all, leaning general subjects is more important than leaning specific subjects for us. Consequently, I disagree that highschools, colleges and universities should spend more time teaching students specific subjects for future career preparation and spend less time teaching general subjects.

文章不错吖， 读上去感觉很流畅，尤其欣赏楼主的论证思维，
我也曾尝试论证第二段你的观点，可是写出来就一塌糊涂，很吃力，词不达意的感觉，在你的文章里学到不少
语言流畅，虽然有些句子有狂多插入语，如第二段第二句，却没有影响理解，而且 反复取非（最后一个  it is not)给人感觉很精妙！
不过我觉得插入语最好不要太多 三句即止好了;d:  看的时候太长累啊
密切关注LZ的文章，好好学习
PS：那些MINOR ERRORS记得注意注意就好了
想到什么再补充！

如果有空可以给我的文章提提建议吖！欢迎欢迎
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-877597-1-1.html

vanessa20UID: 2479494

Due to the modern fierce competition in the workforce market, people are afraid of wasting their time on learning useless information. Therefore, some argued that highschools, colleges and universities should spend more time on teaching them specific subjects and helping them prepare for their future careers and jobs. However, they omitted the fact that any subject is not isolated from other subjects. In addtion, they did not realize that our life involves various aspects besides working. Hence, I disagree   （intransitive verb ） that teaching specific subject is what these parts of our education system should do.（感觉指代不够清晰）

On the one hand, with the advancement of our society, any occupation has been built on the knowledge of diverse general subjects. In this sense, although the issue, about wheather high schools, colleges and universities should spend more time on teaching students specific knowledge instead of general subjects, seems controversial, it is not. General subjects are basics of all modern careers. For instance, an architect must possess knowledge in several subjects, such as mathmatics, physics, and chemistry. A doctor need to know biology, mathmatics, and chemistry. Therefore, it is also necessary for students to prepare their future careers that schools spend more time on teaching general subjects.

On the other hand, besides working, hobbies and friends are also parts of our life. First, in order to please and relax ourselves, we need to pursuit some hobbies, including reading, music, painting, and so on. To appreciate these hobbies, we need knowledge in  various general subjects. Second, we also need knowledge from general subjects to broaden topics on which we can talk with friends. In general, more knowledge you possess, more types of friends you can attract.

All in all, leaning general subjects is more important than leaning specific subjects for us. Consequently, I disagree that highschools, colleges and universities should spend more time teaching students specific subjects for future career preparation and spend less time teaching general subjects.

文章不错吖， 读上去感觉很流畅，尤其欣赏楼主的论证思维，
我也曾尝试论证第二段你的观点，可是写出来就一塌糊涂，很吃力，词不达意的感觉，在你的文章里学到不少
语言流畅，虽然有些句子有狂多插入语，如第二段第二句，却没有影响理解，而且 反复取非（最后一个  it is not)给人感觉很精妙！
不过我觉得插入语最好不要太多 三句即止好了;d:  看的时候太长累啊
密切关注LZ的文章，好好学习
PS：那些MINOR ERRORS记得注意注意就好了
想到什么再补充！

如果有空可以给我的文章提提建议吖！欢迎欢迎
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-877597-1-1.html

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啊?我一直以为agree和disagree后面跟that时不需要with呢！！上次给别人修改的时候还把人家的with给涂掉了，汗颜！
谢谢楼上两位

ourtransUID: 2241441

刚刚仔细查了一下，在辞典上和NY Times上，agree/disagree确实跟that从句时不用加介词呢。如果是直接跟宾语的话才要加呢。

vanessa20UID: 2479494

:o 好的！谢谢LZ提醒！