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Agree or disagree: High schools,colleges and universities  should spend less time teaching about general subjects and spend more time teaching about preparing for future career and jobs.(2007.8.25)

What is the aim of high school and college education? According to a survey among all top American universities, most schools, especially libral arts colleges, claim that it is making their students better people. And certainly they have achieved satisfying results of bringing out so many notable and successful alumnis.

Offering general education benefits not only the student’s growth, but also the whole society’s development. Whole-person education teaches ethics, introduces learning methods, and most important of all, encourages innovation. Some valuable qualities that general education provides, such as Integrity, critical thinking, and creativity could not be aquired only through career preparation. Also, our society needs those qualities. Citizens are not only workers or farmers. Despite their job, they have to take the responsibility of educating their children and caring their parents,so they should get coherent education in high school and colleges to make them aware of their social obligations, which, done in a large scale, will make our society a more stable place to live in.

Furthermore, numerous people, in their adolescence, do not make propery decisions about their future careers, for the lack of self-awareness. An example in case is Picasso. Dreaming of becoming a poet in his youth, Picasso strove to get further literature training and practiced hard. He wrote and sent numerous poems to publishers; however, he not only got all of them rejected, but also received severe criticism and discouragement from some editors he once esteemed. It was then when Picasso realized that he had not the gift for writing, and began general search for a future career. In the following years, he grew aware of his unique talemt and creativity for drawing, which he was later succeeded in. Does one not choose a suitable profession, how could a career-orinated education suit him/her?

In the development of science and technology, there exists a novel subgect called interdisciplinary study, which requires students to be experts in more than one area. The combination of different subjects, such as biochemistry, is playing a more and more importat part in science and technology, so career preparation could not satisfy the needs of this development.

To sum up, though profession-oriented education could provide some useful skills, the modern society demands a more general education, which was, and well remain a suitable form to most students.

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Agree or disagree: High schools, colleges and universities  should spend less time teaching about general subjects and spend more time teaching about preparing for future career and jobs.(2007.8.25)

0cWhat is the aim of high school and college education? According to a survey among all top American universities, most schools, especially liberal arts colleges, claim that it is making their students better people. And certainly they have achieved satisfying results of bringing out so many notable and successful alumni.

Offering general education benefits not only the student’s growth, but also the whole society’s development. Whole-person education teaches ethics, introduces learning methods, and most important of all, encourages innovation. Some valuable qualities that general education provides, such as Integrity, critical thinking, and creativity could not be acquired(only) through（some mere） career preparations. Also, our society needs those qualities. (Citizens are not only workers or farmers. Despite their job, they have to) (参考A citizen, whatever his social status, have to take ……)take the responsibility of educating their children and caring their parents, so they should get(get是典型的口语词汇，可以用receive, obtain等等) coherent education in high school and colleges to make them aware of their social obligations, which, done in a large scale, will make our society a more stable(harmonious) place to live in.寄

托家园 XJst6z2n‑a|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREW-@G8x)NFurthermore, numerous people, in their adolescence, do not make proper decisions about their future careers, for the lack of self-awareness. An example in case is Picasso. Dreaming of becoming a poet in his youth, Picasso strove to get(同上) further literature training and practiced hard. He wrote and sent numerous poems to publishers; however, he not only got all of them rejected, but also received severe criticism and discouragement from some editors he once esteemed. It was then when Picasso realized that he had not the gift for writing, and began general search for a future career. In the following years, he grew aware (conscious) of his unique talent and creativity for drawing, which he was later succeeded in. Does one not choose a suitable profession, how could a career-orientated education suit him/her?寄托家园.Cw`0PS        G:bX

留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAto,G'uW        gwhat’s more,in the development of science and technology, there exists a novel subject called interdisciplinary study, which requires students to be experts in more than one area. The combination of different subjects, such as biochemistry, is playing a more and more important (significant)part in science and technology, so（therefore）, career preparation could not satisfy the needs of this development (trend).

RTo sum up, though profession(occupation)-oriented education could provide some useful skills, the modern society demands a more general education, which was, and well remain a suitable form to most students.

首段的liberal arts colleges用的很不错，从中暗示了楼主支持general subjects 的观点，但claim后面的句子太过于抽象，如果能表达出“学校的目标是让更多的人接受教育，提高全民的素质，并为培养有用的人才打下扎实的基础”，就可以和第二段楼主所论述的“基础教育能使整个社会发展收益”相互照应。

楼主用词还有待提高。文中多次出现相同的单词，需要加强词语的替换，楼主对于基础单词拼写错误也有不少，尽管在考试中不影响阅读的情况下，扣分概率较小，但平时训练希望多加注意。楼主的句式比较单调，虽然错误不多，但要得到高分还需多模仿一些好的作文语句。

楼主文章中出现多次not only but also. 对于这个用法有很多种变体：如替换Not only 有not just, not merely, not simply, not solely 等等。But also 有but, also but…as well 或者全部省略。亦可表示相同的含义。not only A but also B = B as well as A， 但前者的强调重点在 B ；后者的强调重点也在 B .（汉译时，要先译 as well as 后面的词）

以上是我的一些浅见。欢迎相互交流。

lizhenzhongUID: 2541611

Agree or disagree: High schools, colleges and universities  should spend less time teaching about general subjects and spend more time teaching about preparing for future career and jobs.(2007.8.25)

.gter.net;ea)Z&@(~8Q%E1Y0cWhat is the aim of high school and college education? According to a survey among all top American universities, most schools, especially liberal arts colleges, claim that it is making their students better people. And certainly they have achieved satisfying results of bringing out so many notable and successful alumni.

Offering general education benefits not only the student’s growth, but also the whole society’s development. Whole-person education teaches ethics, introduces learning methods, and most important of all, encourages innovation. Some valuable qualities that general education provides, such as Integrity, critical thinking, and creativity could not be acquired(only) through（some mere） career preparations. Also, our society needs those qualities. (Citizens are not only workers or farmers. Despite their job, they have to) (参考A citizen, whatever his social status, have to take ……)take the responsibility of educating their children and caring their parents, so they should get(get是典型的口语词汇，可以用receive, obtain等等) coherent education in high school and colleges to make them aware of their social obligations, which, done in a large scale, will make our society a more stable(harmonious) place to live in

|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREW-@G8x)NFurthermore, numerous people, in their adolescence, do not make proper decisions about their future careers, for the lack of self-awareness. An example in case is Picasso. Dreaming of becoming a poet in his youth, Picasso strove to get(同上) further literature training and practiced hard. He wrote and sent numerous poems to publishers; however, he not only got all of them rejected, but also received severe criticism and discouragement from some editors he once esteemed. It was then when Picasso realized that he had not the gift for writing, and began general search for a future career. In the following years, he grew aware (conscious) of his unique talent and creativity for drawing, which he was later succeeded in. Does one not choose a suitable profession, how could a career-orientated education suit him/her?寄托

家园.

Cw`0PS        G:bX留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAto,G'uW        gwhat’s more,in the development of science and technology, there exists a novel subject called interdisciplinary study, which requires students to be experts in more than one area. The combination of different subjects, such as biochemistry, is playing a more and more important (significant)part in science and technology, so（therefore）, career preparation could not satisfy the needs of this development (trend).

RTo sum up, though profession(occupation)-oriented education could provide some useful skills, the modern society demands a more general education, which was, and well remain a suitable form to most students.

首段的liberal arts colleges用的很不错，从中暗示了楼主支持general subjects 的观点，但claim后面的句子太过于抽象，如果能表达出“学校的目标是让更多的人接受教育，提高全民的素质，并为培养有用的人才打下扎实的基础”，就可以和第二段楼主所论述的“基础教育能使整个社会发展收益”相互照应。

楼主用词还有待提高。文中多次出现相同的单词，需要加强词语的替换，楼主对于基础单词拼写错误也有不少，尽管在考试中不影响阅读的情况下，扣分概率较小，但平时训练希望多加注意。楼主的句式比较单调，虽然错误不多，但得高分难度较大。

楼主文章中出现多次not only but also. 对于这个用法有很多种变体：如替换Not only 有not just, not merely, not simply, not solely 等等。But also 有but, also but…as well 或者全部省略。亦可表示相同的含义。not only A but also B = B as well as A， 但前者的强调重点在 B ；后者的强调重点也在 B .（汉译时，要先译 as well as 后面的词）


以上是我的一些浅见，欢迎相互交流。（在word 上改完粘帖，居然不是彩色的，只好再发一次）

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