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Does Should teachers should (基础语法请注意啊。。) be paid as much as doctors, lawyers and business leaders? There is no consensus among people. Some argue that the contribution of teachers is not as high significant as others. On the other side of the leaf, others, including me, are convinced that teachers need to be highly paid. My reasons will be presented as follows.
There are two fundamental arguments to support my claim: the first one has to go on the aspect of psychology. For one thing, there is no denying that teachers will work harder and more energeticly when they get bonuses.(问题是关于薪水不是花红。如果你想说 当他们拿钱更多,应该是when they get more. bonus这么用是名词.) Such bonuses surely enhances teachers' self-confidence which is benefits both on teacher and students. For another, the high pay will enhance the social condition of this job, which will help students to respect their teachers. As a result, students will have a more efficient way of studying (这逻辑跨度很大啊。。). A survey conducted by Globe Education Committee indicates that both students and teachers will believe themselves are to be excellent when the teachers get high pay. (牵强就是因为中间跳得太厉害。。老师拿钱多,学生就尊重老师,然后就会好好学习 - 为什么?抢银行拿钱更多,为什么学生不会尊重抢银行的?因为教师是正当职业,一份薪水好的正当职业会给人留下好印象,留下好印象就容易让人尊重,学生尊重老师就会愿意听老师的话,愿意听话一般就比较愿意好好学习 - 逻辑讲究首尾相接,环环相扣,跳太多了让人看不明白。)
In addition, why there are so many people are fond of paying high salaries to teachers is that high salaries will enhance the quality of education. On one hand (这么快就重复用。。太多次了吧。。), it is universally acknowledge that there will be more citizens willing to enroll in that a job when that job gets high pay.(paid是动词过去式转形容词性的被动用法,要用也是the job IS HIGHLY paid) As a result of this, the quality of fundamental (What is 'fundamental education'? Don't just translate 基础教育 into English because there's no equivalent word for it.) education will surely be enhanced (Somebody can enhance something or something gets enhanced. One thing can't just 'enhance' itself.) when more highly educated people to be become teachers. Nothing is more significant than the fundamental education to a society. Besides, we cannot emphasize the enthusiasm of in a job too much. Such (Where do you 'such' from?) kind of high pay will impulses (已经给你改过这个用词了,this is not the correct word. 用spark) the enthusiasm of teachers and also lightens their express of life (?). My professor once told me that most of teachers spend half of their salaries on food, which (which指代什么? food? You have to be clear.) push them to take part-time jobs. Obviously, teachers will put more time on the quaility of education when they has no life pressure.
Nevertheless, an argument, also the one I find most compelling against my claim, is that the high pay of teacher is necessary, but where does the fund come from?(The question was whether teachers SHOULD be paid highly, so the counter argument will be teachers SHOULD NOT be paid highly. It's then a problem of 应该 vs 不应该, not 可以 vs 不可以) Although I concede this point, in my observation, the money should be paid by the government, citizens and even students. One needs to look no further than the education system in successful education developed countries (like which?) to find ample evidences that this is the case. For instance, the Singapore government has spend more then 30% of their funds on education (I wouldn't think so. More like 23% of budget. Plus, when we talk about education funding, we talk about the percentage of education funds to GDP, not to the budget.) and even has a law that the salary of high school teachers cannot be less then 1500 Singapore dollars, which equals the highest fellowship allowance of a PhD degree students. (Not true. While teachers in Singapore are quite well paid, PhD students get allowances that normally far exceed SGD$1,500.)
In sum, this issue is a complex one, which requires subjective judgments. Thus, doctors, lawyers and business leaders surely should be highly paid, other jobs, especially teachers, which satisfy the fundamentals needs of humans, like thirty thirst of knowledge and building up children' personality, are in more need of high salaries . In the final analysis, so significant the contribution brings brought by teachers is that we cannot afford to ignore them it. Consequently, teachers need to be paid the same as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders.
总结:
你对词汇时态和用法的掌握还是比较弱,不过基本讨论还可以做到让人看懂。论点论证方面还是不错的,只是请小心开数字 - 实在不行就用一个含糊的high,否则也就是托福考官多半没时间看那么多具体数字所以也就让你过去了,以后写论文的时候导师不会那么容易放过你的。。 |
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