【12月-1月IBT综合备考大帖】之【TWE作文】 12.18作业

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. People busy doing different things that they can do few things well.
As the world is getting smaller and smaller, Culture and technology exchange. One can get tremendous of information to improve ourselves. As music, we had can absorb western culture through orchestra, we also can inherit our own country’s folk music. Mention to sport, basketball from America fashion all over the world, ping pong from Europe now become our country’s best ball, badminton and swimming popular in our country as well. Refer to painting, besides Chinese painting, oil painting is also available to students. Not mention to variety of information had produced currently, there had huge amount of information in the network, tremendous publish established, variety of newspaper and broadcasting. As so many educations waiting us to learn, one can do all kinds of thing, get all the information as much as possible? Or we just focus one only one thing to achieve the peak place? Different time have different answer.

If I am in young age or in teenage time, I would like to choose different things to learn. For I have  zest, but not hyperkinetic, I like almost all kinds of sport, considering sport can improve my physiology condition and preparing myself for the study challenging. Also because of the good condition of physiology I had a strong body and seldom had illness. It saved a lot of time visiting doctor which can focus on my study. Also I like music, when I was young, I had learned piano and guitar, base on which I engage in orchestra to pursue my mania of music when I grow up. While I refer music because I know from scientific American that music is in your gene. Music is has connection with language, researchers finding suggest that music and language had common evolution background. And the researchers also find the musical DNA overlapped with region associated with dyslexia. I definitely agree with it. Knowing music make one more intelligent and more created. Also painting is related to writing. When I was young, my painting teacher told me that. And I realize the more one pain, the more element of expression he/she get, which makes one expressing more precision. And information get from variety way can make us brighter and get in touch with current society.

In another way, when we are in our colleague, we should focus on only one subject that we major. For only in that way, we are able to learn more deeply. Take major in information for example. Learning information science, one not only must be good at mathematics but also have to familiar with the programming. At that time, students have a lot of homework to do, a lot of papers to read. One is likeliest to have leisure time for other things like music instrument and sports. So, when we are at colleague, we should focus on our major not spent too much time for other activities, which is necessary way for us to do a good job in our major. Imaging one wants to learn all kinds of things, all the courses in colleague, he/she will all consuming and result nothing excellent.

In conclusion, whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well, different time have different answer. When I was young, I would like to do a lot of thing. But in colleague, I would focus on my major and do it well.

[ 本帖最后由 xlwxxy 于 2008-12-19 19:00 编辑 ]

chineseladyUID: 2403976

As the world is getting smaller and smaller, Culture and technology exchange has been exchanging. One can get tremendous of information to improve ourselves. As music, we had can absorb western culture through orchestra, we also can inherit our own country’s folk music. Mention to sport, basketball from America fashion all over the world, ping pong from Europe now become our country’s best ball, badminton and swimming popular in our country as well. Refer to painting, besides Chinese painting, oil painting is also available to students. Not mention to variety of information had produced currently, there had huge amount of information in the network, tremendous publish established, variety of newspaper and broadcasting. As so many educations waiting us to learn(用被动态), one can do all kinds of thing, get all the information as much as possible? Or we just focus (one是on吧) only one thing to achieve the peak place? Different time have different answer.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE} gg.I/q"ly-WIf I am in (were in my early age) young age or in teenage time, I would like to choose different things to learn. For I have  zest, but not hyperkinetic, I like almost all kinds of sport, considering sport can improve my physiology condition and preparing myself for the study challenging. Also because of the good condition of physiology I had a strong body and seldom had illness. It saved a lot of time visiting doctor which can focus on my study. Also I like music, when I was young, I had learned piano and guitar, base on which I engage in orchestra to pursue my mania of music when I grow up. While I refer music because I know from scientific American that music is in your gene. Music is has connection with language, researchers finding suggest that music and language had common evolution background. And the researchers also find the musical DNA overlapped with region associated with dyslexia. I definitely agree with it. Knowing music (make单三形式) one more intelligent and more created. Also painting is related to writing. When I was young, my painting teacher told me that. And I realize the more one pain, the more element of expression he/she get, which makes one expressing more precision. And information get from variety way can make us brighter and get in touch with current society.寄托家园
I9x/x ]?In another way, when we are in our colleague, we should focus on only one subject that we major. For only in that way, we are able to learn more deeply. Take major in information for example. Learning information science, one not only must be good at mathematics but also have to familiar with the programming. At that time, students have a lot of homework to do, a lot of papers to read. One is likeliest to have leisure time for other things like music instrument and sports. So, when we are at colleague, we should focus on our major not spent too much time for other activities, which is necessary way for us to do a good job in our major. Imaging one wants to learn all kinds of things, all the courses in colleague, he/she will all consuming and result nothing excellent.
In conclusion, whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well, different time have different answer. When I was young, I would like to do a lot of thing. But in colleague, I would focus on my major and do it well.

LZ 说的colleague是想说大学不? 文中有些地方出现较简单的语法错误,有的地方前后时态不一致.可能是没有检查的原因吧. 而且举例不够具体,好像只是琐碎的举例…

chineseladyUID: 2403976

天啊 又是这么大 重来好了

chineseladyUID: 2403976

As the world is getting smaller and smaller, Culture and technology exchange has been exchanging. One can get tremendous of information to improve ourselves. As music, we had can absorb western culture through orchestra, we also can inherit our own country’s folk music. Mention to sport, basketball from America fashion all over the world, ping pong from Europe now become our country’s best ball, badminton and swimming popular in our country as well. Refer to painting, besides Chinese painting, oil painting is also available to students. Not mention to variety of information had produced currently, there had huge amount of information in the network, tremendous publish established, variety of newspaper and broadcasting. As so many educations waiting us to learn(用被动态), one can do all kinds of thing, get all the information as much as possible? Or we just focus (one是on吧) only one thing to achieve the peak place? Different time have different answer.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE} gg.I/q"ly-WIf I am in (were in my early age) young age or in teenage time, I would like to choose different things to learn. For I have  zest, but not hyperkinetic, I like almost all kinds of sport, considering sport can improve my physiology condition and preparing myself for the study challenging. Also because of the good condition of physiology I had a strong body and seldom had illness. It saved a lot of time visiting doctor which can focus on my study. Also I like music, when I was young, I had learned piano and guitar, base on which I engage in orchestra to pursue my mania of music when I grow up. While I refer music because I know from scientific American that music is in your gene. Music is has connection with language, researchers finding suggest that music and language had common evolution background. And the researchers also find the musical DNA overlapped with region associated with dyslexia. I definitely agree with it. Knowing music (make单三形式) one more intelligent and more created. Also painting is related to writing. When I was young, my painting teacher told me that. And I realize the more one pain, the more element of expression he/she get, which makes one expressing more precision. And information get from variety way can make us brighter and get in touch with current society.寄托家园rw.w+?"Mp
I9x/x ]?In another way, when we are in our colleague, we should focus on only one subject that we major. For only in that way, we are able to learn more deeply. Take major in information for example. Learning information science, one not only must be good at mathematics but also have to familiar with the programming. At that time, students have a lot of homework to do, a lot of papers to read. One is likeliest to have leisure time for other things like music instrument and sports. So, when we are at colleague, we should focus on our major not spent too much time for other activities, which is necessary way for us to do a good job in our major. Imaging one wants to learn all kinds of things, all the courses in colleague, he/she will all consuming and result nothing excellent.
In conclusion, whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well, different time have different answer. When I was young, I would like to do a lot of thing. But in colleague, I would focus on my major and do it well.


LZ 说的colleague是想说大学不? 文中有些地方出现较简单的语法错误,有的地方前后时态不一致.可能是没有检查的原因吧. 而且举例不够具体,好像只是琐碎的举例…

chineseladyUID: 2403976

As the world is getting smaller and smaller, Culture and technology exchange has been exchanging. One can get tremendous of information to improve ourselves. As music, we had can absorb western culture through orchestra, we also can inherit our own country’s folk music. Mention to sport, basketball from America fashion all over the world, ping pong from Europe now become our country’s best ball, badminton and swimming popular in our country as well. Refer to painting, besides Chinese painting, oil painting is also available to students. Not mention to variety of information had produced currently, there had huge amount of information in the network, tremendous publish established, variety of newspaper and broadcasting. As so many educations waiting us to learn(用被动态), one can do all kinds of thing, get all the information as much as possible? Or we just focus (one是on吧) only one thing to achieve the peak place? Different time have different answer.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE} gg.I/q"ly-WIf I am in (were in my early age) young age or in teenage time, I would like to choose different things to learn. For I have  zest, but not hyperkinetic, I like almost all kinds of sport, considering sport can improve my physiology condition and preparing myself for the study challenging. Also because of the good condition of physiology I had a strong body and seldom had illness. It saved a lot of time visiting doctor which can focus on my study. Also I like music, when I was young, I had learned piano and guitar, base on which I engage in orchestra to pursue my mania of music when I grow up. While I refer music because I know from scientific American that music is in your gene. Music is has connection with language, researchers finding suggest that music and language had common evolution background. And the researchers also find the musical DNA overlapped with region associated with dyslexia. I definitely agree with it. Knowing music (make单三形式) one more intelligent and more created. Also painting is related to writing. When I was young, my painting teacher told me that. And I realize the more one pain, the more element of expression he/she get, which makes one expressing more precision. And information get from variety way can make us brighter and get in touch with current society.寄
/x ]?In another way, when we are in our colleague, we should focus on only one subject that we major. For only in that way, we are able to learn more deeply. Take major in information for example. Learning information science, one not only must be good at mathematics but also have to familiar with the programming. At that time, students have a lot of homework to do, a lot of papers to read. One is likeliest to have leisure time for other things like music instrument and sports. So, when we are at colleague, we should focus on our major not spent too much time for other activities, which is necessary way for us to do a good job in our major. Imaging one wants to learn all kinds of things, all the courses in colleague, he/she will all consuming and result nothing excellent.
In conclusion, whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well, different time have different answer. When I was young, I would like to do a lot of thing. But in colleague, I would focus on my major and do it well.


LZ 说的colleague是想说大学不? 文中有些地方出现较简单的语法错误,有的地方前后时态不一致.可能是没有检查的原因吧. 而且举例不够具体,好像只是琐碎的举例…

chineseladyUID: 2403976

As the world is getting smaller and smaller, Culture and technology exchange has been exchanging. One can get tremendous of information to improve ourselves. As music, we had can absorb western culture through orchestra, we also can inherit our own country’s folk music. Mention to sport, basketball from America fashion all over the world, ping pong from Europe now become our country’s best ball, badminton and swimming popular in our country as well. Refer to painting, besides Chinese painting, oil painting is also available to students. Not mention to variety of information had produced currently, there had huge amount of information in the network, tremendous publish established, variety of newspaper and broadcasting. As so many educations waiting us to learn(用被动态), one can do all kinds of thing, get all the information as much as possible? Or we just focus (one是on吧) only one thing to achieve the peak place? Different time have different answer.
证|TOEFL|GRE} gg.I/q"ly-W
I am in (were in my early age) young age or in teenage time, I would like to choose different things to learn. For I have  zest, but not hyperkinetic, I like almost all kinds of sport, considering sport can improve my physiology condition and preparing myself for the study challenging. Also because of the good condition of physiology I had a strong body and seldom had illness. It saved a lot of time visiting doctor which can focus on my study. Also I like music, when I was young, I had learned piano and guitar, base on which I engage in orchestra to pursue my mania of music when I grow up. While I refer music because I know from scientific American that music is in your gene. Music is has connection with language, researchers finding suggest that music and language had common evolution background. And the researchers also find the musical DNA overlapped with region associated with dyslexia. I definitely agree with it. Knowing music (make单三形式) one more intelligent and more created. Also painting is related to writing. When I was young, my painting teacher told me that. And I realize the more one pain, the more element of expression he/she get, which makes one expressing more precision. And information get from variety way can make us brighter and get in touch with current society.


In another way, when we are in our colleague, we should focus on only one subject that we major. For only in that way, we are able to learn more deeply. Take major in information for example. Learning information science, one not only must be good at mathematics but also have to familiar with the programming. At that time, students have a lot of homework to do, a lot of papers to read. One is likeliest to have leisure time for other things like music instrument and sports. So, when we are at colleague, we should focus on our major not spent too much time for other activities, which is necessary way for us to do a good job in our major. Imaging one wants to learn all kinds of things, all the courses in colleague, he/she will all consuming and result nothing excellent.

In conclusion, whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well, different time have different answer. When I was young, I would like to do a lot of thing. But in colleague, I would focus on my major and do it well.


LZ 说的colleague是想说大学不? 文中有些地方出现较简单的语法错误,有的地方前后时态不一致.可能是没有检查的原因吧. 而且举例不够具体,好像只是琐碎的举例…

chineseladyUID: 2403976

不好意思啊 一连发了几次 字体总是不对 最后一篇还好吧

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

其实可以从新编辑的。 不用发那么多次！
辛苦了

无音萧UID: 2518358

As the world is getting smaller and smaller, Culture and technology exchange. One can get tremendous of information to improve ourselves. As music, we had can absorb western culture through orchestra, we also can inherit our own country’s folk music. Mention to sport, basketball from America fashion all over the world, ping pong from Europe now become our country’s best ball, badminton and swimming popular in our country as well. Refer to painting, besides Chinese painting, oil painting is also available to students. Not mention to variety of information had produced currently, there had huge amount of information in the network, tremendous publish established, variety of newspaper and broadcasting. As so many educations waiting us to learn, one can do all kinds of thing, get all the information as much as possible? Or we just focus one only one thing to achieve the peak place? Different time have different answer.（排比用得很流畅，但我觉得开头有点太绕了，个人比较喜欢快入主题。另外一点是，有没有觉得有点偏题了?题目说的是人们喜欢做很多事情，但能做好的没多少这种说法对不对。可是，你的论题是该做多点事情还是做少点事情？..不知道我的感觉对不对哦）

If I am in young age or in teenage time, I would like to choose different things to learn. For I have  zest, but not hyperkinetic, I like almost all kinds of sport, considering sport can improve my physiology condition and preparing myself for the study challenging. Also because of the good condition of physiology I had a strong body and seldom had illness. It saved a lot of time visiting doctor which can focus on my study. Also I like music, when I was young, I had learned piano and guitar, base on which I engage in orchestra to pursue my mania of music when I grow up. While I refer music because I know from scientific American that music is in your gene. Music is has connection with language, researchers finding suggest that music and language had common evolution background. And the researchers also find the musical DNA overlapped with region associated with dyslexia. I definitely agree with it. Knowing music make one more intelligent and more created. Also painting is related to writing. When I was young, my painting teacher told me that. And I realize the more one pain, the more element of expression he/she get, which makes one expressing more precision. And information get from variety way can make us brighter and get in touch with current society.（乍看之下，论证很有力度。可惜论点偏了）
In another way, when we are in our colleague, we should focus on only one subject that we major.（个人感觉这样的分论点不好，因为这只是个别例子，会不会先来个总结的，再提出个个例子好些？）For only in that way, we are able to learn more deeply. Take major in information for example. Learning information science, one not only must be good at mathematics but also have to familiar with the programming. At that time, students have a lot of homework to do, a lot of papers to read. One is likeliest to have leisure time for other things like music instrument and sports. So, when we are at colleague, we should focus on our major not spent too much time for other activities, which is necessary way for us to do a good job in our major. Imaging one wants to learn all kinds of things, all the courses in colleague, he/she will all consuming and result nothing excellent.¬F

In conclusion, whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well, different time have different answer. When I was young, I would like to do a lot of thing. But in colleague, I would focus on my major and do it well.
总体感觉，楼主的写作功底很不错，排比写的很好。语法问题我就没有细究了。但是在理解题目上或许有些偏差。仅仅是一家之言，请见谅。
希望楼主能回拍哦~~~
我的作业：https://bbs.gter.net/forum-53-1.html

[ 本帖最后由 无音萧 于 2008-12-19 13:58 编辑 ]

nickey0809UID: 2349468

好像离题了啊……

nickey0809UID: 2349468

whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well,
从这句话看出理解错误
这个教训告诉我们think it over before behavior, or the result will be disappointing

xiaojing1115UID: 2578357

As the world is getting smaller and smaller, Culture and technology exchange has been exchanging. One can get tremendous of information to improve ourselves. As music, we had can absorb western culture through orchestra, we also can inherit our own country’s folk music. Mention to sport, basketball from America fashion all over the world, ping pong from Europe now become our country’s best ball, badminton and swimming popular in our country as well. Refer to painting, besides Chinese painting, oil painting is also available to students. Not mention to variety of information had produced currently, there had huge amount of information in the network, tremendous publish established, variety of newspaper and broadcasting. As so many educations waiting us to learn(用被动态), one can do all kinds of thing, get all the information as much as possible? Or we just focus (on） only one thing to achieve the peak place? Different time have different answer（感觉开头太绕了，有点离题，其实可以以来就摆出观点）

（when）I am in (were in my early age) young age or in teenage time, I would like to choose different things to learn. For I have  zest, but not hyperkinetic, I like almost all kinds of sport, considering sport can improve my physiology condition and preparing myself for the study challenging. Also because of the good condition of physiology I had a strong body and seldom had illness. It saved a lot of time visiting doctor（这个which指代不明你想说的是时间吧？） which can focus on my study. Also I like music, when I was young, I had learned piano and guitar, base on which I engage(engeged)in orchestra to pursue my mania of music when I grow up. While I refer music because I know from scientific American that music is in your gene. Music is has connection with language, researchers finding suggest that music and language had common evolution background. And the researchers also find the musical DNA overlapped with region associated with dyslexia. I definitely agree with it. Knowing music one more intelligent and more created. Also painting is related to writing. When I was young, my painting teacher told me that. And I realize the more one pain, the more element of expression he/she get, which makes one expressing more precision. And information get from variety way can make us brighter and get in touch with current society.(感觉这段和题目没有什么关系)

In another way, when we are in our colleague, we should focus on only one subject that we major. For only in that way, we are able to learn more deeply. Take major in information for example. Learning information science, one not only must be good at mathematics but also have to familiar with the programming. At that time, students have a lot of homework to do, a lot of papers to read. One is likeliest to have leisure time for other things like music instrument and sports. So, when we are at colleague, we should focus on our major not spent too much time for other activities, which is necessary way for us to do a good job in our major. Imaging one wants to learn all kinds of things, all the courses in colleague, he/she will all consuming and result nothing excellent.

In conclusion, whether we should busy doing different things or we should do few things well, different time have different answer. When I was young, I would like to do a lot of thing. But in colleague, I would focus on my major and do it well.

论证过程中感觉偏题了，语言很好，加油

[ 本帖最后由 xiaojing1115 于 2008-12-19 20:14 编辑 ]

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

回想一下，好像没有切中要害。
不过这个题目不好写。我现在知道要从全局考虑。不能只站在自己学生的角度，要顾及到所有读者。
写作功底只是指，排比吧，自己还是很多单词的用法很生疏，很多用法还不地道！还很需upgrade啊！
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-902113-1-1.html
以上是有详细评论的同题文章可以参照。

无音萧UID: 2518358

希望能和你多加交流哈~~一起努力

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

请问开头第一段不能罗列一些与题目相关的现象吗？
如果直接回答很少内容可以写啊。而且我觉得有必要先对题目定义做一下阐述，为下文论证做铺垫。

[ 本帖最后由 xlwxxy 于 2008-12-19 21:31 编辑 ]