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The argument asserts that Luxess face cream has true effectiveness for improving of facial condition. It cites a study that a group of volunteers who use the cream every morning report their face skin get remarkable improvement. The support that the author provides seems reasonable for the claim. Nevertheless, with close scrutiny, it has logical flaws in many aspects.

In first place, the volunteer participated in this study has limited, and whether they are typical deserves the doubt. With different ages, people usually have different nature of skin, even the boys and girls usually with different condition of facial skin. It is entirely possible that all of them are young girls who have just been through the beach sunbath, and their face may have great improvement. Also it is possible that all of them have the characteristic of the facial skin that easily improved and most of us have no advantage for skin.

What is more, the argument has not give any information about the validation of the improvement for facial skin. If the volunteers only reported orally without any standard that they feel better for their skin or any comment that they looks more healthy and attractive than the condition before the use of cream, we are reasonable that their perceptive assertion is not valid enough. Maybe all of participants agree upon any product if they get paid. Even they actually thought their skin is improved, they can not persuade me that just by objective opinion. The only method is applying the official standard that everyone accepts. For example, measuring the softness of the skin, the color of the face, which are all defined by the well-justified standards.

Even we admit that all of the participants in the study truly improve their facial skin condition, and they are representative enough to typify all the consumers. However, there still be many possibility that all of them improve the skin condition not because by the cream but by other causes. Maybe the weather becomes warmer after a long cold, dry and windy winter, and the warm and wet weather keeps the faces comfortable and makes the skin looks better.

In sum, the author lends flawed evidence to bolster the argument. To solidify the conclusion, the author has to provide more research information and facts that all the consumer can really get their skin condition improved by Luxess cream, and rule out others possibilities that results into the improvement.

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The argument asserts that Luxess face cream has true effectiveness for improving -> improvement of facial condition. It cites a study that a group of volunteers who use the cream every morning report their face skin get remarkable improvement. The support that the author provides seems reasonable for the claim. Nevertheless, with close scrutiny, it has logical flaws in many aspects.

In first place, the volunteer participated -> participating in this study has limited ？limited what? scope?, and whether they are typical deserves the doubt. With different ages, people usually have different nature of skin, even the boys and girls are usually with different condition of facial skin. It is entirely possible that all of them are young girls who have just been through the beach sunbath, and their face may have great improvement. Also it is possible that all of them have the characteristic of the facial skin that easily improved and most of us have no advantage for skin.

What is more, the argument has not give ->given any information about the validation of the improvement for facial skin. If the volunteers only reported orally without any standard that they feel better for their skin or any comment that they looks more healthy and attractive than the condition before the use of cream, we are reasonable that their perceptive assertion is not valid enough. (we are reasonable that 有点别扭）Maybe all of participants agree upon any product if they get paid. Even they actually thought their skin is improved, they can not persuade me that just by objective opinion. The only method is applying the official standard that everyone accepts. For example ->Take, for example, measuring the softness of the skin, the color of the face, which are all defined by the well-justified standards.

Even we admit that all of the participants in the study truly improve their facial skin condition, and they are representative enough to typify all the consumers. However, there still be many possibility that all of them improve the skin condition not because by the cream but by other causes. Maybe the weather becomes warmer after a long cold, dry and windy winter, and the warm and wet -> warmth and wetness weather keeps the faces comfortable and makes the skin looks -> look better.

In sum, the author lends flawed evidence to bolster the argument. To solidify the conclusion, the author has to provide more research information and facts that all the consumer can really get their skin condition improved by Luxess cream, and rule out others possibilities that results into the improvement.

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