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【题目】Arguement33

The following report appeared in an archaeology journal.
'The discovery of distinctively shaped ceramic pots at various prehistoric sites scattered over a wide area has led archaeologists to ask how the pots were spread. Some believe the pot makers migrated to the various sites and carried the pots along with them; others believe the pots were spread by trade and their makers remained in one place. Now, analysis of the bones of prehistoric human skeletons can settle the debate: high levels of a certain metallic element contained in various foods are strongly associated with people who migrated to a new place after childhood. Many of the bones found near the pots at a few sites showed high levels of the metallic element. Therefore, it must be that the pots were spread by migration, not trade.'

在广泛区域分散分布的很多史前遗迹发现的形状独特的陶壶导致考古学家提出疑问：这些壶是如何流传的？有些人相信壶的制造者迁移到别的地方并把壶随之带来；另一些人相信壶是通过贸易流传的，而他们的制造者留在一个地方。现在，对于史前人类骨骼的分析可以解决这个争论: 在多种食物中都含有的某种金属元素的高含量与那些成年后移居到新地方的人有很高的关联性。在一些遗迹的壶附近发现的很多骨头都显示出这种金属元素的高含量。因此，这些壶肯定是通过迁徙而不是贸易来流传的。

【提纲】
1.There is no necessary association between migrants and foods contained high-level metallic element.
2. Few cannot stand for all.
3. Other flaws

【正文】

As to the issue that how the pots were scattered, some people convince it is led by the migration flow while others believe the pots were spread by trade and（but） their makers remained in one place. In this editorial（这个词我查了下 意思是社论和评论，感觉有点不合适,argument应该可以吧） the author argues that the pots were spread by migration because of the high contain（certain） level of metallic elements in people's bones. However,（a） careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that the argument accomplishes little toward supporting the author's claims, as discussed below.

To support the claims, the author points out that "high levels of a certain metallic element contained in various foods are strongly associated with people who migrated to a new place." Actually, there is no necessary association between migrants and foods contained high-level metallic element. The food migrants eat（ate） in the motherland might also exist or be planted in the new place. The author does not indicate people could just gain one certain element in a certain limited place.(这句话有些没明白，即使作者表明了人们只能在一个特定的有限的地方摄取一种特定的元素，那么原住民呢？他们也可能摄入这种元素，而且sites发现的骨头有可能是他们的。我觉得这里你直接就说the author does not indicate that a certain metallic element only existed in migrants' bodies。） Different foods could contain the same element just like both orange and broccoli contain vitamin.

The author also argues that "many of the bones found near the pots at a few sites showed high levels of the metallic element" but just a few sites can't stand for all the sites and it is unconvincing to make such a conclusion that pots were spread by migration. On the other hand, the high levels of the metallic element in bones might be affected by putting near the pots after death, not stay with the pots all the time during the life time.（all the time 和 during the life time 重复了吧） The author does not provide sufficient evidence to state that high levels of the metallic element are formed before people's death.（后两句话好像是说metallic element 也有可能是后来才在骨头里的，原来的骨头里可能没有。这个想法新颖。学习了:loveliness: ）

There are also other flaws found in the author's assumption. The author does not give sufficient evidence which can prove the bones are from those who migrated to a new place after childhood. People also could adopt certain kinds of metallic element after they grow（grew） up. The metallic element remained from childhood might disappear through metabolism. And the author also can not prove（that） the bones near the pots belong to the pots owners. There might be no certain relationship between pots and people（the bones owners). Furthermore, how to define the childhood? To what level we could say it’s high level of metallic element?

In short, without abundant evidence that could explain the above problems, the author can not safely conclude that the pots were spread by migration, not trade
感觉全文整体思路清晰，语言也比较流畅，表达比较明确。不过建议可以再拉出一个错误 详细地剖析下，比如即使骨头就是migrants的，但是骨头边的pots也不一定是他们迁徙时带的，也有可能是交易的。望继续努力，加油啊！！:handshake :handshake

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