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[a习作temp] Argument 53【凤凰涅槃作文小组】第1周第1次作业 on (7)annabelnalee [复制链接]

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In this argument, the arguer concludes that shyness during infancy is caused by the increased level of melatonin before they are given birth and clearly, this shyness they have shown will continues into their latter life. And in this argument, we may find out that this conclusion is just based on a discovery of some reserchers which suppose that these twenty-five infants were probably conceived in early autumn, and that is a time their mothers' production of melatonin would naturally increase because of the decreased daylight and melatonin is a material known to have effect on some brain functions. However, the statement alone does not constitute a logical argument in favor of its conclusion and fails to provide compelling support to make this argument sound.
The first problem with the argument is that the sample the arguer provides is not sufficient enough for just 25 infants were involved in the research and it may be a quite big possibility that some of these 25 infants were special case. Evidence provided by the researchers that these infants when exposed to unfamiliar stimuli like an unusual odor or a tape recording of an unknown voice showed signs of mild distress, but this evidence seems has no essential correlation with the conclusion of the argument that these infants will be shy in their life and also can not lead to the secret of hormone-melatonin which is produced by their mothers. And the survey is launched 13 years ago by the researches, that's quite a long time and it might not be suitable again for the conclusion given now, because of that it has been 13 years and human beings have changed a lot including these 25 infants, what if another group of infants researched nowadays have showed few signs of distress even no distress when putting into the circumstance that they are exposed to unfamiliar stimuli and their mothers did not secrete the hormone when they conceive their babies in early autumn? That might be a strong disproof to call the argument into question.
And the second obvious problem with the argument is that the follow-up study conducted earlier this year may illustrate nothing but just a phenomenon because there is no single number provided and it did not mention in which place the study was conducted and it should be quite definite that the place is given to our readers because statistics more than often explain the reason of a certain phenomenon. And the argument tells us that more than 50 per cent of these children but now teenagers who had once shown signs of distress identified themselves as shy. These are just their own perceptions of themselves that they are shy, but it should be another set of numbers show that is it also a fact that other people think these 25 teenagers are shy too because their vital view points can even reflect realer truth about the teenagers. If the 25 teenagers are not quite sure about their own characteristics whether they are shy or not and randomly told the researchers they defined themselves as shy people, consequently, the data won't be accurate to show us their true characteristics.  
To make this argument sound, the arguer should provide relevant scientific study to prove the hormone they have found do have correlation with the shyness of the 25 infants. And no matter the conclusion is true or not the arguer should                                                                                                                          







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