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TOPIC: ISSUE143 - "Artists should pay little attention to their critics.* Criticism tends to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity."
*those who evaluate works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
WORDS: 619          TIME: 01:15:00          DATE: 2009/1/24 19:07:18

When it comes to the relationship between artist and critics, the speaker asserts that artists should pay little attention to criticism. It is true that negative criticism, for an artist, could be a rock lies on his way to the pinnacle of the arts, but it is not complete.(中立态度)

Creativity is an imaginative skill for artist to produce works. It is a result of artist's inner effort like inspiration and perspiration. And it is also influenced by many outer factors such as the social environment and other's attitude toward artist's products. Since criticism can be classified into other's attitude, whether a negative commentary is accurate and impersonal is crucial to an artist.(定义creativity)

Well-trained critics consider almost every aspect of an art work and then offer trustworthy evaluations to artists, who therefore know the beneficial and detrimental parts in their products. Subsequently the artists can reflect on the appearance of disadvantages and try to get rid of it. This is beneficial to their creativity. Critics also play an important role in connecting artists and the public. In the light of human beings' insufficient knowledge of arts, they can hardly judge the connotation and value of an art work. Critics look over the products first then show their commentaries, the public could thereby know the art works well and are interested in them. Widely accepted and appreciated, the artists may be eminent and wealthy enough to afford their travels or further learning, which stimulate and perfect the emergence of inspiration.(critics的好处: 推动和完善creativity)

However, some critics see the world through conservative and obsolete spectacles. They consider all advanced and new ideologies as defections of the tradition; then they criticize the art works sharply, which hurt the emotion and creativity of the artists fiercely. The Statue of Liberty was first condemned by Augusta Chronicle as a pagan image unsuitable to the US. Beethoven's opuses, for example, are dismissed by the early critics, who accustomed to the predictable harmonies and melodic lengths of Haydn, as literally resulting in their ears' hurt. Beethoven was lucky, he did the trick by hard working and endurance before long, while some of the artists were not appreciated even in their times. Thomas Eakins, whose paintings were rejected as intolerable by public; Van Gogh, sold only one of his paintings in his entire career, but their works are now recognized as among the greatest in the artistic tradition. (不少critics抵制新思想的出现,误导大众导致artists不被承认,削弱了他们的creativity)

Moreover, the poor critics and critics who are lack of knowledge of art, probably comment art works unjustly and mislead the public. Artists may therefore loose self-confidence or creative inspiration, and then give up their career or venturesome attempt, which destroy the creativity.(同时限于critics自身的水平,评价不一定客观)

Although the criticism may judge artists unfairly due to the poor knowledge, the obsolete ideology, and the individual point of view, it is steadfast self-confidence and striving crucial for an artist to be a success man or a loser. The artists mentioned above are all successful and prominent today but not so welcomed in their own time. Why the streams of their creativities and inspirations never dried up? It was the perspiration invigorated their mind. When faced with satires and ridicules, one bright light aimed the darkness is their convictions and hard working. They paid little attention to critics, and made their own way.(即使criticism很不公正,creativity也能由artists的勤奋和永不放弃获得)

To sum up, the author should not draw a conclusion from the negative aspect of critics unilateral. The criticism has both beneficial and detrimental influences on the creativity of an artist, just as the coin has two sides. Comprehensive consideration must be taken into to make a fair judgment. However, in my opinion, intrinsic elements such as non-stop hard working and eternal self-confidence play a more significant role, for an artist, than the extrinsic affection, "Criticism".(综合上述观点)

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给楼主点意见，互相学习
第一段应直接给出正反俩观点，益处，弊处）
2，删掉第二段，或将其与倒数第二段整合论述创造主要来源于与艺术家自身，不然不觉得自相矛盾了吗
3．再正反论述
4，句子略显简单。
TOPIC: ISSUE143 - "Artists should pay little attention to their critics.* Criticism tends to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity."
*those who evaluate works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
WORDS: 619          TIME: 01:15:00          DATE: 2009/1/24 19:07:18

When it comes to the relationship between artist and critics, the speaker asserts that artists should pay little attention to criticism. It is true that negative criticism, for an artist, could be a rock lies on his way to the pinnacle of the arts, but it is not complete.(中立态度)（什吗叫not complete,应该直接给出反面观点）
Creativity is an imaginative skill for artist to produce works. It is a result of artist's inner effort like inspiration and perspiration.（为什吗灵感和汗水是靠内部努力得来的，不明白） And it is also influenced by many outer factors such as the social environment and other's attitude(s) toward artist's products. Since criticism can be classified into other's attitude, whether a negative commentary is accurate and impersonal is crucial to an artist.(定义creativity) (这段中心思想不明白，定义creativity?这个对文章有用吗)

Well-trained critics consider almost every aspect of an art work and then offer trustworthy evaluations to artists, who therefore know the beneficial and detrimental parts in their products. Subsequently the artists can reflect on the appearance of disadvantages and try to get rid of it. This is beneficial to their creativity.、| Critics also play an important role in connecting artists and the public. In the light of human beings' insufficient knowledge of arts, they can hardly judge the connotation and value of an art work. Critics look over the products first then show their commentaries, the public could thereby(then) know the art works well and are interested in them(有点别扭). Widely accepted and appreciated, the artists may be eminent and wealthy enough to afford their travels or further learning, which (may)stimulate and perfect the emergence of inspiration.(critics的好处: 推动和完善creativity)（这样的论据也可以嗄）（这段包含俩重意思，应分段论述）

However, some critics see the world through conservative and obsolete spectacles. They consider all advanced and new ideologies as defections of the tradition; then they criticize the art works sharply, which hurt the emotion and creativity of the artists fiercely. The Statue of Liberty was first condemned by Augusta Chronicle as a pagan image unsuitable to the US. Beethoven's opuses, for example, are dismissed by the early critics, who accustomed to the predictable harmonies and melodic lengths of Haydn, as(which) literally resulting in their ears' hurt. Beethoven was lucky, he did the trick by hard working and endurance before long, while some of the artists were not appreciated even in their times. Thomas Eakins, whose paintings were rejected as intolerable by public; Van Gogh, sold only one of his paintings in his entire career, but their works are now recognized as among the greatest in the artistic tradition. (不少critics抵制新思想的出现,误导大众导致artists不被承认,削弱了他们的creativity)（例子太多了吧）

Moreover, the poor critics and critics who are lack of knowledge of art,（评论家缺乏对艺术的了解？？？） probably comment art works unjustly and mislead the public. Artists may therefore loose self-confidence or creative inspiration, and then give up their career or venturesome attempt, which destroy the creativity.(同时限于critics自身的水平,评价不一定客观)

Although the criticism may judge artists unfairly due to the poor knowledge, the obsolete ideology, and the individual point of view, it is steadfast self-confidence and striving crucial for an artist to be a success man or a loser. The artists mentioned above are all successful and prominent today but not so welcomed in their own time. Why the streams of their creativities and inspirations never dried up? It was the perspiration invigorated their mind. When faced with satires and ridicules, one bright light aimed the darkness is their convictions and hard working. They paid little attention to critics, and made their own way.(即使criticism很不公正,creativity也能由artists的勤奋和永不放弃获得)

To sum up, the author should not draw a conclusion from the negative aspect of critics unilateral. The criticism has both beneficial and detrimental influences on the creativity of an artist, just as the coin has two sides. Comprehensive consideration must be taken into to make a fair judgment. However, in my opinion, intrinsic elements such as non-stop hard working and eternal self-confidence play a more significant role, for an artist, than the extrinsic affection, "Criticism".(综合上述观点)（到底该不该注意评论家 嗄，作者的破题点是创造力到底来自哪里？）

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【1】When it comes to the relationship between artist(s) and critics, the speaker asserts that artists should pay little attention to criticism. It is true that negative criticism, for an artist, could be a rock lies on his way to the pinnacle of the arts, but it is not complete.(中立态度)

【2】Creativity is an imaginative skill for artist to produce works. It is a result of artist's inner effort like inspiration and perspiration(inner 不应该有汗水吧，改成individual). And it is also influenced by many outer factors such as the social environment and other's attitude toward artist's products. Since criticism can be classified into other's attitude, whether a negative commentary is accurate and impersonal is crucial to an artist.(定义creativity)[一二段，可以再简略点，合一起比较好，单独拿出来定义比较繁琐吧]
【3】Well-trained critics consider almost every aspect of an art work and then offer trustworthy evaluations to artists, who therefore know the beneficial and detrimental parts in their products. Subsequently the artists can reflect on the appearance of disadvantages and try to get rid of it. This is beneficial to their creativity. Critics also play an important role in connecting artists and the public. In the light of human beings' insufficient knowledge of arts, they can hardly judge the connotation and value of an art work. Critics look over the products first then show their commentaries, the public could thereby know the art works well and are interested in them. Widely accepted and appreciated, the artists may be eminent and wealthy enough to afford their travels or further learning, which stimulate and perfect the emergence of inspiration.(critics的好处: 推动和完善creativity)

【4】However, some critics see the world through conservative and obsolete spectacles. They consider all advanced and new ideologies as defections of the tradition; then they criticize the art works sharply, which hurt the emotion and creativity of the artists fiercely. The Statue of Liberty was first condemned by Augusta Chronicle as a pagan image unsuitable to the US[这个例子不完整，没有体现出评论的破坏作用，如今依然矗立着]. Beethoven's opuses, for example, are dismissed by the early critics, who accustomed to the predictable harmonies and melodic lengths of Haydn, as literally resulting in their ears' hurt[好像不是，主要是疾病造成吧]. Beethoven was lucky, he did the trick by hard working and endurance before long, while some of the artists were not appreciated even in their times. Thomas Eakins, whose paintings were rejected as intolerable by public; Van Gogh, sold only one of his paintings in his entire career, but their works are now recognized as among the greatest in the artistic tradition. (不少critics抵制新思想的出现,误导大众导致artists不被承认,削弱了他们的creativity)

【5】Moreover, the poor critics and critics who are lack of knowledge of art, probably comment art works unjustly and mislead the public. Artists may therefore loose self-confidence or creative inspiration, and then give up their career or venturesome attempt, which destroy the creativity.(同时限于critics自身的水平,评价不一定客观)[个人觉得 4 ，5 段可以合为一段，毕竟也没有深入展开]
【6】Although the criticism may judge artists unfairly due to the poor knowledge, the obsolete ideology, and the individual point of view, it is steadfast self-confidence and striving crucial for an artist to be a success man or a loser.[强调句不错] The artists mentioned above are all successful and prominent today but not so welcomed in their own time. Why the streams of their creativities and inspirations never dried up? It was the perspiration invigorated their mind. When faced with satires and ridicules, one bright light aimed the darkness is their convictions and hard working. They paid little attention to critics, and made their own way. (即使criticism很不公正,creativity也能由artists的勤奋和永不放弃获得)

【7】To sum up, the author should not draw a conclusion from the negative aspect of critics unilateral. The criticism has both beneficial and detrimental influences on the creativity of an artist, just as the coin has two sides. Comprehensive consideration must be taken into to make a fair judgment. However, in my opinion, intrinsic elements such as non-stop hard working and eternal self-confidence play a more significant role, for an artist, than the extrinsic affection, "Criticism".(综合上述观点)