【☆09GRE作文冲刺组】hjjsherriff2月13日ARGUE65 作文

hjjsherriffUID: 2459384

In this memo, the author claims that in order to reduce expenses, discontinue stocking many imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheese would be an ideal way. To strengthen the conclusion, the author states that all of the five best-selling cheeses last year were all domestic cheese, and the survey indicates that more people are prefer to the domestic cheeses. However, the statement provides little credible evidence to the conclusion, which makes it unpersuasive as it stands.

To begin with, the author claims that five kinds of domestic cheeses are included in the five best-selling cheeses last year, but the author fails to provide sufficient evidence that the rank of cheeses last year would also be applied to the lately years. Perhaps people prefer to the domestic cheeses because some advertisements or discount
were made in order to extend the selling of domestic cheeses, or perhaps there were some negative news on the imported cheeses last year.
The author can not convince me buy ruling out these possibilities, so that the author's assumption is dubious.

Moreover, the author's assumption is based on the fact that the survey is able to reflect the general idea of the people in America, but this may not be the case.
We do not know how the subscribers are conducted or how well they could represent the general opinion. It is entirely possible that the survey is conducted only few places or the subscribers are conducted to answer the expected answers. Without providing more evidence that the survey is actually reflect the general opinion, the author's assumption is doubtless unconvincing.

In addition, granted that the survey can reflect the general opinion, the author unfairly assumes that the result of the newly stores can be applied to all of the stores in America. The author ignores some fact that different people in different place have extremely various choices. Perhaps people in many states without newly opened stores are fond of imported cheeses. As a result, the author should put forward more statistics that the change does benefit the company, or else the author is just hasty draw that assumption.


In sum, the author's assumption is unwarranted. To bolster it the author must provide more information confirming that the result last year is continuing. To strengthen it I would need to know that how the survey was conducted and the institution of the respondents. I would need to know the statistics that the trend of newly store can be applied to all of the stores in America.

tanyujing2UID: 2600111

In this memo, the author claims that in order to reduce expenses, discontinue stocking many imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheese would be an ideal way. To strengthen the conclusion, the author states that all of the five best-selling cheeses last year were all domestic cheese, and the survey indicates that more people are prefer to the domestic cheeses. However, the statement provides little credible evidence to the conclusion, which makes it unpersuasive as it stands.

To begin with, the author claims that five kinds of domestic cheeses are included in the five best-selling cheeses last year, but the author fails to provide sufficient evidence that the rank of cheeses last year would also be applied to the lately years. Perhaps people prefer to the domestic cheeses because some advertisements or discount
were made in order to extend the selling of domestic cheeses, or perhaps there were some negative news on the imported cheeses last year.
The author can not convince me buy ruling out these possibilities, so that the author's assumption is dubious.

Moreover, the author's assumption is based on the fact that the survey is able to reflect the general idea of the people in America, but this may not be the case.
We do not know how the subscribers are conducted or how well they could represent the general opinion. It is entirely possible that the survey is conducted only few places or the subscribers are conducted to answer the expected answers. Without providing more evidence that the survey is actually reflect the general opinion, the author's assumption is doubtless unconvincing.可以多论述一点，主要的逻辑反驳要突出来~

In addition, granted that the survey can reflect the general opinion, the author unfairly assumes that the result of the newly stores can be applied to all of the stores in America. The author ignores some fact that different people in different place have extremely various choices. Perhaps people in many states without newly opened stores are fond of imported cheeses. As a result, the author should put forward more statistics that the change does benefit the company, or else the author is just hasty draw that assumption.


In sum, the author's assumption is unwarranted. To bolster it the author must provide more information confirming that the result last year is continuing. To strengthen it I would need to know that how the survey was conducted and the institution of the respondents. I would need to know the statistics that the trend of newly store can be applied to all of the stores in America.


逻辑连接语言都很好的，就是要突出你的观点就更好啦~~~