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Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated

People are always talking about the convenience bring by the advanced technology. For they may get rid of the weariness arises from the housework, say, cooking, cleaning, etc, and what is more, they may enjoy a luxury life bring by modern technology. However, while modern people are enjoying the comfort and banal luxury life of dwelling in the edifices, they do not realize that they have been deprived of the necessities of life, which is critical to us. Believed it or not, We are leading a life which is becoming more and more complicated induced from our so called advanced technology.

In the first place, let us get down to the fundamentals and find the essentialities of our life. For instance, health, which is the foundation of our life. In our technology less past, our ancestors lead a much simpler life than we are. They lived a natural way of inhabitation, say ,get up after the sunrise, take rest after the sunset. Accompany with correspondingly amount of labor, they had good health. However, We modern people are in violent contrast with them. Equipped with modern apparatuses, which will do everything for us, we are just too happy to stay idle , and enjoy chips and tv serious on sofa, or stay up late in the midnight chatting with friends… In that circumstance, normal cycles of life are disturbed, then disease occurred, which calls for improved medicine to make it up. What a complicated yet ironical cycle it bring with!

What is more, frontier technology may bring unnecessary troubles when it is on striking. At that time, the former versatile servant may become a piece of rubbish if you can not fix it up. Computer is a good example. My hospital is a pioneer in the information age, and almost every department has been connected by the internet and intranet. It is so convenient that we cancelled the hand-writing system of prescription. Just several days before, one of computers was attacked by an unknown virus, soon the whole system did not work because of it. Then the entire hospital was paralyzed because nobody could work without this convenient system!

Overall , we are deprived of some essences that life has to offer, because we are too reliable on our intelligence, which brings us irregular life and laziness that may arouse many a troubles.

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People are always talking about the convenience brought by the advanced technology. For they may get rid of the weariness ariseing from the housework, say, cooking, cleaning, etc, and what is more, they may enjoy a luxury life brought by modern technology. However, while modern people are enjoying the comfort and banal luxury life of dwelling in the edifices, they do not realize that they have been deprived of the necessities of life, which is critical to us. Believe it or not, We are leading a life which is becoming more and more complicated induced from our so called advanced technology0 ^!
In the first place, let us get down to the fundamentals and find the essentialities of our life. For instance, health, which is the foundation of our life. In our technology less past, our ancestors lead a much simpler life than we are. They lived in a natural way of inhabitation, say ,get up after the sunrise, take rest after the sunset. Accompany with correspondingly amount of labor, they had good health. However, We modern people are in violent contrast with them. Equipped with modern apparatuses, which will do everything for us, we are just too happy to stay idle , and enjoy chips and tv series on sofa, or stay up late in the midnight chatting with friends… In that circumstance, normal cycles of life are disturbed, then disease occurred, which calls for improved medicine to make it up. What a complicated yet ironical cycle it brings with!
What is more, frontier technology may bring unnecessary troubles when it is on striking. At that time, the former versatile servant may become a piece of rubbish if you can not fix it up. Computer is a good example. My hospital was a pioneer in the information age, and almost every department has been connected to the internet and intranet. It was so convenient that we cancelled the hand-writing system of prescription. Just several days before, one of computers was attacked by an unknown virus, soon the whole system did not work because of it. Then the entire hospital was paralyzed because nobody could work without this convenient system!
Overall , we are deprived of some essences that life has to offer, because we are too reliable on our intelligence, which brings us irregular life and laziness that may arouse many  troubles.
评注：红色的是我觉得用错的词
1、we are just too happy to stay idle。too……to结构是“太……而不能”用在这里说不通啊
2、which calls for improved medicine to make it up。make up有这个用法么？我是说有用在这里是什么意思呢？有作用？治愈？
3\我标绿色的say,这个好像是用在口语中多些，不晓得书面语中可不可以出现！！
总体来说细节和例子都很充实，写的不错~只是在衔接上，在例子与主题句的关系上有待推敲下。比如举得health的问题，语句组织上再推敲下，看怎么能更好更直接的说明因为远古人的简单生活，他们比现代人更健康~~
以上是拙见，说得不对的地方请包涵！
用得好的句子：
get up after the sunrise,and take rest after the sunset。