『Toefl Dark_Tournament写作组laqfanfan第16次作业』

laqfanfanUID: 2618864

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are busy doing different things that they can do few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People who hold the opinion that individuous are busy doing different things that they can do few things well,for varies of affairs may distract people's focus of attention to one thing.As they should concentrate on a confirmed thing which is the most important.However,I would argue instead that people are busy doing different things not only can help them find out mysterious connection of  inner of the things, but also  provides them a relative easy environment to do different things for relax.


To start with, if we noly do one thing day in and day out but never care about what was happening outside the window,maybe we can not undertake it well.For instance, a student who study in economics read economical books all day but never acquire the financial news around the world, as a result he/she might think economics is a boring lesson.On the other hand, students who get themselves involved in stock market might return their economical studies with renewed vigor.What was an abstact academic pursuit becomes a concrete and interesting goal with a real relationship to the students' life.

In addition, we can't devote ourselves to one thing in a long period of time without stop. That's why we need a rest bewteen two classes durning study.If we have a body exercise,listen a  melodious music or play a funny game after a hard work,it would be more efficient rathen than concentrate on one thing all day.

Finally,faced with a mounting life pace and incresingly competitive job market, we should do things more and more efficient.When we wait for a bus ,we can read books for a little time, when we have a meal, we can listen to radios in order to obtain the news,and examples as such are  numerous.  Therefore,I think if we use our time properly, we can do different things and also accomplish them excellant.

gundammoleUID: 2300958

1# laqfanfan
People who hold the opinion that individuous(individuals)are busy doing different things that they can do few things well, for varies of affairs may distract people's focus of attention to one thing. As they should concentrate on a confirmed thing which(which去掉) is the most important. However, I would argue instead that people are busy doing different things not only can help them find out mysterious connection of  inner of the things(什么意思?表达有点问题), but also  provides them a relative (relatively) easy environment to do different things for relax.

To start(begin) with, if we noly (only) do one thing day in and day out but never care about what was happening outside the window, maybe we can not undertake it well. For instance, a student who study in economics read economical books all day but never acquire the financial news around the world, as a result he/she might think economics is a boring lesson. On the other hand, students who get ithemselves (themselves)involved in stock market might return their economical studies with renewed vigor. What was an abstact(abstract)
academic pursuit becomes a concrete and interesting goal with a real relationship to the students' life.

In addition, we can't devote ourselves to one thing in a long period of time without stop. That's why we need a rest bewteen (between) two classes durning study(可以改为at school). If we have a body exercise(a body exercises是什么?), listen (listen to) a melodious music or play a funny game after a hard work, it would be more efficient rathen(rather) than concentrate on one thing all day.


Finally, faced (facing) with a mounting life pace and incresingly (increasingly) competitive job market, we should do things more and more efficient (efficiently). When we wait for a bus, we can read books for a little time, when we have a meal, we can listen to radios in order to obtain the news, and examples as such are numerous.  Therefore, I think if we use our time properly, we can do different things and also accomplish them excellant (excellently).

总体来说还不错,可能是LZ没有仔细检查,犯了一些拼写的错误.
文章的论点的两个理由有些雷同,如果LZ能提出第三个理由来支持那就更好了.
个人观点,仅供参考,望共勉^_^