【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组chelseajcole的 第17次作业】

chelseajcoleUID: 2589519

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to cooperate
with other well is more important today than in the past. Use specific reasons
and examples to support your answer.（03/04/07）

“You and me ,live in the global village together”is one sentence of the lyric of 2008 Beijing Olympic game theme song.Definitely,the highly developed technology,such as telecommunication and Internet,help human being achieve the goal of whole world talking.If someone stay at home all hie/her life,he/she will out of date.Change has come to our whole global.People who want to seize the moment should accustomed to this change.One obvious change we recognize is the ability of cooperate with others.Cooperation,working with others,is more significant than any time before.

In the finance and economy field,the globle trading, shipment and stock market make infulence on each other dramaticly.No contury colud developing by itself.The products which can bought in other place always cheaper than manufacture it by oneself.This rule force current people to buy goods frome others.During the process,cooperation occurred.All of us remember the life when we live in the country and cultivate the crops,raise a group of fowl by ourselves and even make clothes.That is the ideal life which never see in modern society.More cooperation needed since the way we produce the things different with what we done before.

Another great change of modern society is that people do the job more elaborate then past.For example,30 years ago,college students can do alomost every thing after they graduate,but now,all have change.Even the students who major in automobile can divided by several different research direction,the students who major in making the cars,who major in car transportation and who major in how to sell the car.The results of various subjects lead to modern people more specilized in their own field.When a big car company like BMW or Benz,must organize all kinds of talants from manufacture to sale,form the transportaion to the car insurance.Only through the cooperation with different talants could the company finished the whole business.Specilized skills increase the cooperation among the people nowadays.

Additional,if people could cooperate with each other frequently than before,the nice enviroment can be created.Cooperation make people know each other more,therefore,the relationship among the community more intimate.To create the friendly environment for ourselves,we as people,should take more care to others. Helping neighbour receive the letters or newspaper when they travle and next time,you forget to pay the electricity fee and cut off by the power station,youe neighbour offer a wonderful accommodation that night help you to avoid a nightmire.The saying “Cooperation is more important than before” also in our daily life.


The theme of 2010 Shanghai EXPO is :”Better city better life”.Only through the cooperation could we get that goal.

liurui8802UID: 2595045

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to cooperate! s, _% Y3 x3 z
with other well is more important today than in the past. Use specific reasons
and examples to support your answer.（03/04/07）
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“You and me ,live in the global village together”is one sentence of the lyric+s of 2008(the) Beijing Olympic game +s theme song.Definitely,the highly developed technology,such as telecommunication and Internet,help human being achieve the goal of (whole world talking)没这么表达的.If someone stay+s at home all hie/her life,he/she will (be)out of date.Change has come to our whole global(这是个形容词，应该用名词).People who want to seize the moment should（get） accustomed to this change.One obvious change we recognize is the ability of cooperate with others.Cooperation,(which translates simply as)working with others,is more significant than (any time before)改成ever .开头导入主题太长太慢

In the finance and economy field,the globle trading, shipment and stock market make infulence on each other dramaticly.No contury colud developing（could后面的动词形式不用说了吧） by itself.The products which can（be） bought in other place+s (are)always cheaper than manufacture it by oneself(这句话太绝对了.This rule force+s current people to buy goods frome others.During the process,cooperation occurred.All of us remember the life when we live in the country(countryside) and cultivate the crops,raise a group of fowl by ourselves and even make clothes.That is the ideal life which never see in modern society.这句话跟你这段的主题冲突，既然赞成合作来全球化生产，小农形式的生产能被称作ideal?)More cooperation needed since the way we produce the things different with what we done before. 没看懂。   这段论述不充分，没看出全球化和合作的明显关系到底是什么，难道买别的国家的东西就叫合作？
Another great change of modern society is that people do the job more elaborate then past.For example,30 years ago,college students can do alomost every thing after they graduate这句话绝对了,but now,all have change+d.Even the students who major in automobile can(be) divided by several different research direction,the students who major in making the cars(这好像不算个专业吧？),who major in car transportation and who major in how to sell the car.这句话除了三个定语从句修饰的主语，就没有谓语！！The results of various subjects lead to后面接名词，你后面这个不符合语法要求 modern people more specilized in their own field.When a big car company like BMW or Benz,must organize all kinds of talants from介词后面接ing. manufacture to sale,form the transportaion to the car insurance.Only through the cooperation with different talants could the company finished为什么突然用过去时？ the whole business.Specilized skills increase the cooperation among the people nowadays.这段除了后面的论证有效，前面论证比较离题，让人摸不着头脑。
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Additional（in addition）,if people could cooperate with each other frequently than before,the nice enviroment can be created.你这句话前半句是虚拟语气，后半句又没用，看看相关语法Cooperation make+s people know each other more,therefore,the relationship among the community(is) more intimate.To create the friendly environment for ourselves,we as people,should take more care to(of) others. Helping neighbour receive the letters or newspaper when they travle and next time什么意思？,you forget to pay the electricity fee and cut off by the power station,youe neighbour offer a wonderful accommodation that night help you to avoid a nightmire.The saying “Cooperation is more important than before” also in our daily life.这段论述太牵强了，帮助他人跟合作还是有区别的吧？

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The theme of 2010 Shanghai EXPO is :”Better city better life”.Only through the cooperation could we get that goal.结尾想跟开头相互呼应，但是太潦草。匆匆结尾。