TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 wallop 第22次作业

wallopUID: 2310651

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to finish a project and then start another than to finish two projects at the same time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.（06/24/07）


Do you believe you can do more than one tasks at the same time? There is a general discussion nowadays as to the whether people should finish projects one by one or together. Some people argue that people should concentrate and do their utmost on single project, but other people who are conscious of the key role that efficiency played, on the other hand, claim that it is wisdom to process tasks in parallel. Coincide with opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with the standpoint that people should better finish their projects one by one.

In the first place, it is indisputable that people have to face lots of sophisticated tasks in dynamic environments today, and nothing is more important to do utmost on them. Let's draw a typical case for example. The development of video game is definitely a complex and systematic project which involved tremendous people such as virtual artists, software engineers and so on. The whole project is divided into pieces which interlock with each other. People, experts in some specific field like computer science, keep their focus on these small and high techniques required tasks which demand they spare no effort to achieve a desire result. For example, software architect must be sure about every parts of component work perfectly. It is not wisdom for people to handle some other tasks at the same time. To the already similar facts, abundant further examples may be added.

In the second place, the more time we spend on one project, the more we can get from it. As can be seen in a statistics release by experts indicates that more than 87 percent of efficient and reliable work experience comes from the projects which cost more time than others. No one can doubt the essential fact that successful business man always advocate themselves in only one project for a long time, which enable them to make a striking and powerful experience summaries that can benefits them in the following projects. It is one project, to some extent, rather than many, that can bring something beyond the project itself.

Opposed to processing project serially are those who adhere to a belief that finish two projects at one time can save vast amounts time. For instance, people can deal with two customers who require same productions, develop two softwares which have the common functions, write two instructions for different study groups and so on. However, all these can be done one by one, which probably can have better performances.

From what has been discussed above, though the acceptability that the advantages of finishing two projects at the same time are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that finish a project and then start another leads to, so we could safely draw the viewpoint that people should better do their projects one by one.

不知道自己举的例子和文章的逻辑如何，希望大家指点指点，谢谢。

annazjyUID: 2630173

Do you believe you can do more than one tasks at the same time? There is a general discussion nowadays as to the whether people should finish projects one by one or together. Some people argue that people should concentrate and do their utmost on a single project, but other people who are conscious of the key role that efficiency played（你想表达是efficiency plays the key role？我觉得的play应用一般式plays）, on the other hand[color=Red]（but 和on the other hand 重复使用，应去掉一个）, claim that it is wisdom to process tasks in parallel. Coincide with opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with the standpoint that people should better finish their projects one by one（点题句，你想表达你的观点和大多数人一样，Coinciding with不要直接用动词，如果是我会改写很这样：Coinciding with opinion of  the majority,my heartfelt agreement with the standpoint is that people should better finish their projects one by one  ）.呵呵

In the first place, it is indisputable that people have to face lots of sophisticated tasks in dynamic environments(单数environment) today, and nothing is more important to do utmost on them（去掉on them）. Let's draw a typical case for example. The development of video game is definitely a complex and systematic project which involved tremendous people such as virtual artists, software engineers and so on. The whole project is divided into pieces which interlock with each other. People, experts in some specific field like computer science, keep their focus（复数focuses） on these small and high techniques required（用主动态吗？） tasks which demand they spare no effort to achieve a desire（desirable） result. For example, software architect must be sure about every parts （part）of component work perfectly. It is not wisdom for people（根据上文，应该用them吧？） to handle some other tasks at the same time. To the already similar facts, abundant further examples may be added.

In the second place, the more time we spend on one project, the more we can get from it. (好句)As can be seen in a statistics release（用过去是吗released） by experts indicates that more than 87 percent of efficient and reliable work experience comes from the projects which cost more time than others. No one can doubt the（an） essential fact that successful business man always advocate themselves in only one project for a long time, which enable them to make a striking and powerful experience summaries that can benefits them in the following projects. It is one project, to some extent, rather than many, that can bring something beyond the project itself.

Opposed to processing project serially are（is） those who adhere to a belief that finish two projects at one time can save vast amounts time. For instance, people can deal with two customers who require same productions, develop two softwares which have the common functions, write two instructions for different study groups and so on. However, all these can be done one by one, which probably can have better performances

From what has been discussed above, though the acceptability that the advantages of finishing two projects at the same time are considerable（你想表达什么，好处是可观的advantages are considerable，还是acceptability is considerable？ ）, they（it） cannot compete with the benefits that finish a project and then start another leads to（lead to benefit？可以改成the benefits from finishing a project and then start another one）, so we could safely draw the viewpoint that people should better do their projects one by one.

1.写得不错，例子用得很好，逻辑也很清楚
2.OPPOSED那一段可以再多做些解释
向你学习了:loveliness:

PS:欢迎回拍

桑梓UID: 2613051

Do you believe you can do more than one tasks at the same time? There is a general discussion nowadays as to the （删去）whether people should finish projects one by one or together. Some people argue that people should concentrate and do their utmost on single project,  but other people who are conscious of the key role that efficiency played, on the other hand（觉得和前文有重复）, claim that it is wisdom（wise？） to process tasks in parallel. Coincide（要用动名词吧） with opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with the standpoint that people should better finish their projects one by one.
In the first place, it is indisputable that people have to face lots of sophisticated tasks in dynamic environments today, and nothing is more important to do utmost on them（这句没看懂啊）. Let's draw a typical case for example. The development of video game is definitely a complex and systematic project which involved tremendous people such as virtual artists, software engineers and so on. The whole project is divided into pieces which interlock with each other. People（这个people有点突兀啊 直接删去好了）, experts in some specific field like computer science, keep their focus on these small and high techniques required tasks which demand they spare no effort to achieve a desire（d） result. For example, software architect must be sure about every parts of component work perfectly. It is not wisdom for people to handle some other tasks at the same time. To the already similar facts（觉得这句有点奇怪）, abundant further examples may be added.
In the second place, the more time we spend on one project, the more we can get from it. As can be seen in a statistics release by experts indicates（ing） that more than 87 percent of efficient and reliable work experience comes from the projects which cost more time than others. No one can doubt the essential fact that successful business man always advocate themselves in only one project for a long time, which enable them to make a striking and powerful experience summaries that can benefits them in the following projects. It is one project, to some extent, rather than many, that can bring something beyond the project itself.
Opposed to processing project serially are those who adhere to a belief that finish two projects at one time can save vast amounts（of） time. For instance, people can deal with two customers who require same productions, develop two softwares which have the common functions, write two instructions for different study groups and so on. However, all these can be done one by one, which probably can have better performances.（这段的论证有点不充分）

From what has been discussed above, though the acceptability that the advantages of finishing two projects at the same time are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that finish a project and then start（动名词） another leads to, so we could safely draw the viewpoint that people should better do their projects one by one.