作文求拍恩

wangruiwangyongUID: 2617334

With the rapid improvement in industry,more and more people enjoy the entertainment brought by TV.No one would deny that televison plays a significant role
in our daily life. In the face of the changes that are brought by television,people retain different attitudes.Some hold the opinion that the advantages for changes overweigh the disadvantages, while others think quite differently on the issue. I totally agree with the statement that these changes are more harmful than benefical.The reason are presented below.

To begin with, some bad effects of our health come of what we have done in watching TV. Children fail their eye sight resulting from overwatching these programs. Besides, a variety of
shows take up too much of peoer's time which can otherwise be used for more valuable activities, such as research or sports, and consequently result in poor academic performance. What's worse, the number of couch potato has sharply went up deriving from excessive time wasting in television.

The second reason for my propensity for the statement is that TV alienates our relationship with families and friends. In time past, they would sit on their front steps and visit on nice evenings. This neighborly visiting built close friendships, but it seldom takes place any longer. Even worse, some women have called themselves "sports widows" because their husbands spend every spare time watching televised football, base ball, and other sport.

Last but not least, children and students become addictive and they can not get themselves away from the negative influence of television. For instance, adult only program arouse their sadistic impulse. Furthermore, television usually presents children with a distorted picture of reality. More importantly, it is obvious that certain kinds of images selected by television portray people in a stereotyped way. All of these may trigger serious social problems.

Given the factors I have just outlined, I can only say that television has brought a storm of unpredictable negative influence .At the same time, every possible effort must be made to eliminate the bad parts of television while preserving the good benefits.

潇湘梦影UID: 2625619

With the rapid improvement in industry（很抽象）,more and more people 很怕见到这样的词组enjoy the entertainment brought by TV.No one would deny that televison plays a significant role
in our daily life. In the face of the changes that are brought by television,people retain different attitudes.Some hold the opinion that the advantages for changes overweigh the disadvantages, while others think 可以愠色下quite differently on the issue. I totally agree with the statement that these changes are more harmful than benefical.The reason are presented below.
----------------第一段，模板化...----------------------------------------------------------------------------

To begin with, some bad effects of our health come of what we have done in watching TV. Children fail their eye sight resulting from overwatching these programs 指什么. Besides, a variety of
shows take up too much of peoer's time which can otherwise be used for more valuable activities, such as research or sports, and consequently result in poor academic performance. What's worse, the number of couch potato has sharply went up deriving from excessive time wasting in television.

The second reason for my propensity for the statement is that TV alienates our relationship with families and friends. In time past, they would sit on their front steps and visit on nice evenings. This neighborly visiting built close friendships, but it seldom takes place any longer.----chinglish .Even worse, some women have called themselves "sports widows" because their husbands spend every spare time watching televised football, base ball, and other sport.

Last but not least, children and students become addictive and they can not get themselves away from the negative influence of television. For instance, adult only program arouse their sadistic可能这个词用得好，我很少见过 impulse. Furthermore, television usually presents children with a distorted picture of reality. More importantly, it is obvious that certain kinds of images selected by television portray people in a stereotyped way. All of these may trigger serious social problems. 为什么？ 什么problem?--------------论证呢

Given the factors I have just outlined, I can only say that television has brought a storm of unpredictable negative influence .At the same time, every possible effort must be made to eliminate the bad parts of television while preserving the good benefits.
感觉最后一段也是模板化...最后一句话说了等于没说一样。你可以举出一些具体的措施，来说明怎么预防或者减少看电视带来的危害~

建议：1). 每写出一个观点的时候，一定记得论证~至少是用你的理由...一句话即可。
        2). 模板化问题...第一段，特别是最后一段感觉没什么有用的信息...

anyway,总的结构写得不错。论点明确~
个人看法~  ^^

饱饭仔UID: 2505959

要说的都被说完了.....
没市场了我