【INTO THE FIRE】 Issue7 by 银落（saya

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【INTO THE FIRE】 Issue7 by 银落（saya）
Issue7
The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.

As the video camera has been introduced to us humans, more and more people share a belief that video camera can display our contemporary life through its accurate and convincing record. Admittedly, no one, of course, will deny such fact that it do have vivid and objective view screen. However, we cannot overlook the importance of written records with its subjectivity and convenience simply for that.

According to this statement, it might be attempting to agree with the notion for two respects. The first argument is established on the reason that if we tend to show something picturesque or strong impact it incites, the most possible tool first coming into our minds will be the video camera. No doubt that due to its basic function is to record temporal and spatial events, it can provide us with not only lifelike images but also an illusion that we might think we have experienced such event, thus easier to explain why when it comes to the World Cup or the Olympic Games, discourse addressed by American President or their campaign debates, fashion collections in Paris or symphony concerts, the best way to witness and then record them is to use a video camera which is able to reproduce the very occasion happened that time, not presently.

The second argument which supports the assertion has to do with objectivity, as one of the most important considerations in measuring whether the event is well recorded. Consider, our TV news, for example. Obviously, it allows us to view the reality in an objective way, furthermore, we may detail the event through what video camera presents. Yet, can we accordingly say that we don’t need written records any more for the reason mentioned above? Just taking the same instance of TV news, can you imagine those view screens accompanied by no explanatory words which can provide the relevant background to supplement the records much better to our understanding?

Therefore, no less significance should be place on written records compared to the video camera. Despite the single reason above, there exists another two to appeal more emphasis on written records. One of argument against the position in which the assertion stands is its subjectivity. One apt illustration of this point involves diary. Certainly, it is a form of written records that we keep it every day by writing down all of our emotions such as what we felt, thought, cherished and detested, which values a lot just because the implicit-expressed personal feelings hidden between the lines. What’s more, it also can take us into an imaginary and lifelike world existing in the deep heart of an individual who keeps a log.

Another argument, the one I find most compelling, is that written records have an advantage over the video camera on convenience. Firstly, if we want to take a picture by video camera, we should possess it in hand, or we could simply envisioning doing so. Next, even if we are given such machine, there are so many instantaneous moments that we hardly have quick enough reaction and action to catch it. Finally, we clearly realize that the only access to watching finished product made by video camera calls for more sophisticated instrument such as TV set, computer to represent the work we have down. Contrarily, written records won’t trouble us like this. We can take down any idea once it bumps into our minds on a little paper with a pen that can be taken everywhere. We can also see the words used everywhere such as books, slogans, warning signs and so forth which contains diversified meanings and presentations.

In the final analysis, turning our focus on what form of documentation is more important is futile, and, of course, will cause controversy resulted from a great deal of different people’s habits to record daily life, news, expression of emotion, beautiful scenes in sight. Instead, what is more consequential is that no matter video camera or written records, both of them have its own advantage, thus things needed to be record can eventually show us a round and closer to real scope, which is the original purpose for which we use them.



Saya.

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【INTO THE FIRE】 Issue7 by 银落（saya）
Issue7
[ ]---是第一遍看边看边改的
（）---语法方面的问题
{ }---看过全文后又补充的
The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.{单方面观点与结尾有些矛盾，可以改成两方面的}

As the video camera has been introduced to us humans, more and more people share a belief that video camera can display our contemporary life through its accurate and convincing record. Admittedly, no one, of course[与前面的admittedly有点重复], will deny such (a) fact that it do have vivid and objective[形容的很有说服力] view screen. However, we cannot overlook the importance of written records with its subjectivity and convenience simply[转的有些突然让人摸不清头脑，可以先简单说些written records 的这方面的特点像可以描述内心世界，给人更多想象空间之类的，在明确提出对于它的不容忽视，然后再后文展开论述] for that.{是不是可以先不提wr因为前后都是说v的，可以放到后面一起说}

[上段结尾感觉想要转而论述WR的重要性，所以这里感觉有些怪，导致下面的it指代不明]According to this statement, it might be attempting to agree with the notion for two respects. The first argument is established on the reason that if we tend to show something picturesque or strong impact it incites, the most possible tool first coming into our minds will be the video camera. No doubt that due to its basic function is to record temporal and spatial events, it can provide us with not only lifelike images but also an illusion that we might think we have experienced such event, thus easier to explain why when it comes to the World Cup or the Olympic Games, discourse addressed by American President or their campaign debates, fashion collections in Paris or symphony concerts, the best way to witness and then record them is to use a video camera which is able to reproduce the very occasion happened that time, not presently.

The second argument which supports the assertion has to do with objectivity, as one of the most important considerations[这里是什么意思呀，没太懂] in measuring whether the event is well recorded. Consider, our TV news, for example. Obviously, it allows us to view the reality in an objective way, furthermore, we may detail the event through what video camera presents.[从这里写到下一段比较好吧] Yet, can we accordingly say that we don’t need written records any more for the reason mentioned above? Just taking the same instance of TV news, can you imagine those view screens accompanied by no explanatory words which can provide the relevant background[这个观点很赞的] to supplement the records much better to our understanding?

Therefore, no less significance should be place (placed)on written records compared to the video camera. Despite the single reason above, there exists another two to appeal more emphasis on written records. One of argument against the position in which the assertion stands is its subjectivity. One apt illustration of this point involves diary. Certainly, it is a form of written records that we keep it every day by writing down all of our emotions such as what we felt, thought, cherished and detested, which values a lot just because the implicit-expressed personal feelings hidden between the lines. What’s more, it also can take us into an imaginary and lifelike world existing in the deep heart of an individual who keeps a log.

Another argument, the one I find most compelling, is that written records have an advantage over the video camera on convenience. Firstly, if we want to take a picture by video camera, we should possess it in hand, or we could simply envisioning doing so. Next, even if we are given such machine, there are so many instantaneous moments that we hardly have quick enough reaction and action to catch it. Finally, we clearly realize that the only access to watching finished product made by video camera calls for more sophisticated instrument such as TV set, computer to represent the work we have down. [想法好]Contrarily, written records won’t trouble us like this. We can take down any idea once it bumps into our minds on a little paper with a pen that can be taken everywhere. We can also see the words used everywhere such as books, slogans, warning signs and so forth which contains diversified meanings and presentations.

In the final analysis, turning our focus on what form of documentation is more important is futile, and, of course, will cause controversy resulted from a great deal of different people’s habits to record daily life, news, expression of emotion, beautiful scenes in sight. Instead, what is more consequential is that no matter video camera or written records, both of them have its own advantage, thus things needed to be record（ed） can eventually show us a round and closer to real scope, which is the original purpose for which we use them.[语言好像有点儿太含蓄了，虽然明白是要共同利用但是还是明确指出一下好]
欢迎讨论，多多交流~~

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那个....第一段不是我写的....是pool里的题目~....

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Issue7
The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.

After the industrialization times, information epoch has been coming into being in our modern life. Benefiting of highly-developing technology, forms of record also experience a great revolution, and thus many digital products especially video camera becomes the leading form in recording, as majority reckons. However, though camera does have its own advantages, is that means that accurate and convincing record of contemporary can replace written records? What’s more, why it would be a tendency for majority to think so?

Actually, video camera do has its irreplaceable merits. One reason is its objectivity, as one of the most important considerations in measuring whether the event is well recorded. Consider, our TV news, for example. Obviously, it allows us to view the reality in an objective way, furthermore, we may detail the event through what video camera presents. Yet, can we accordingly say that we don’t need written records any more for the reason mentioned above? Just taking the same instance of TV news, can you imagine those view screens accompanied by no explanatory words which can provide the relevant background to supplement the records much better to our understanding?

Therefore, no less significance should be place on written records compared to the video camera. Despite the single reason above, there exists another two to appeal more emphasis on written records. One of argument against the position in which the assertion stands is its subjectivity. One apt illustration of this point involves diary. Certainly, it is a form of written records that we keep it every day by writing down all of our emotions such as what we felt, thought, cherished and detested, which values a lot just because the implicit-expressed personal feelings hidden between the lines. What’s more, it also can take us into an imaginary and lifelike world existing in the deep heart of an individual who keeps a log.

In addition, we can see written records are more convenient than video cameras for us to records for if we choose to use the latter one we must equipped with heavy instrument, battery, cassette, and so etc, while we can easily written what we see and feeling into lines simply with a pencil and a paper. However, why video camera is also regarded as the prevailing form in documentation? Perhaps it is because it is in the time of information, where myriads of information explode, finally leading to inability of us humans to reasoning deeper and speculating further, with excuse of lacking in time. Accordingly, what makes people consider that camera is more crucial than records is not their own nature, but their changed thinking custom, which is losing its complexity and depth. Coincidently, camera just satisfy people’s need for instant information and no further thinking.

In the final analysis, turning our focus on what form of documentation is more important is futile, and, of course, will cause controversy resulted from a great deal of different people’s habits to record daily life, news, expression of emotion, beautiful scenes in sight. Instead, what is more consequential is that no matter video camera or written records, both of them have its own advantage, what make people reckon video camera is more vital other than written records depends on their lazier cognitive ability.