【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组gundammole第二十九次作业】

gundammoleUID: 2300958

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Extended family is not as important as it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. （09/22/07）

Nowadays, individuals spend most of their time on work and pay less attention on their families, which make them believe that it is better to have one or no children in a family. When human beings enjoy their happy life without the disturbing of children, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the disadvantages of having less family members? Considerable though the advantages that small families enjoys are, they can not compete with the benefits that extended family brings about, when both parents’ and children’s future are taken into account.

To begin with, in small families, old parents are most likely to be abandoned to the homes for senior citizens. When they grow older, children do not have enough time to take care of them. For instance, my uncle only has a son in his family, who got the chance to continue his Doctor Degree in Harvard University several years ago. Now he is a professor in that world famous university. There is little doubt, however, he can not always be at home with his parents in China. After my aunt passed away, there is no one has enough time to look after my uncle, and his son finally sent him to the homes for senior citizens in a town nearby. How lonely those old people are!

In addition, children may be overprotected or spoiled by their parents, making them weaker individuals. They not only do not know how to take care of themselves, but are also quite selfish and do not like to communicate with others. As a child, I was also overprotected. For my honesty, I always can get what I want from my parents. Once I missed my mother's performance, and I was so angry that I demanded her to dance for me again on the stage, or I would not leave. I have not realized my weak individuals until I began my life in a university, which is thousand miles away from home. As far as I am concerned, if I had a brother or sister, I can be more tolerant and independent.

Furthermore, when facing troubles, the more family members we have, the more help we can get. With their help, people do not need to worry about there is no reliable person they can talk to, or ask for advice.

In general, if one day I would be a parent, I would definitely choose to have more than two children, because it is better for all the family members. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt objection to the idea that extended family is not important as it was in the past. Although we are living in a highly advanced society, having an extended family is also necessary.

lulufriendUID: 2612617

不好意思~前几天有点事耽搁拉~~现在才改你的文~~实在对不起。。。

Nowadays, individuals spend most of their time on work and pay less attention on their families, which make them believe that it is(would be会不会好一些阿~) better to have one or no children in a family. When human beings enjoy their happy life without the disturbing of children, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the disadvantages of having less family members? Considerable though the advantages that small families enjoys(enjoy) are(倒装不错啊~~), they can not compete with the benefits that extended family brings about, when both parents’ and children’s future are taken into account.(很喜欢这一句！~)$ x; V+ f- e7 ]/ R6 H. f- D% p
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To begin with, in small families, old parents are most likely to be abandoned to the homes for senior citizens. When they grow(become?) older, children do not have enough time to take care of them. For instance, my uncle only has a son in his family, who got the chance to continue his Doctor Degree in Harvard University several years ago. Now he is a professor in that world famous university. There is little doubt, however, he can not always be at home with his parents in China. After my aunt passed away, there is no one has enough time to look after my uncle, and his son finally sent him to the homes for senior citizens in a town nearby. How lonely those old people are!

In addition, children may be overprotected or spoiled by their parents, making them weaker individuals. They not only do not know how to take care of themselves, but are also quite selfish and(even会不会好一些?有点极端阿~) do not like to communicate with others. As a child, I was also overprotected. For my honesty, I always can get what I want from my parents. Once I missed my mother's performance, and I was so angry that I demanded her to dance for me again on the stage, or I would not leave. I have not realized my weak individuals until I began my life in a university, which is thousand miles away from home. As far as I am concerned, if I had a brother or sister, I can be more tolerant and independent.(LZ这样写也挺有道理的~我的那篇我把extendedfamily理解的是不仅多孩子，主要是更多大人~~觉得会有众星捧月的感觉~)   U" u0 I; _; l# @/ _. g4 X7 Q. P

Furthermore, when facing troubles, the more family members we have, the more help we can get. With their help, people do not need to worry about there is no reliable person they can talk to, or ask for advice.
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In general, if one day I would(were to/should) be a parent, I would definitely choose to have more than two children, because it is better for all the family members. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt objection to the idea that extended family is not important as it was in the past. Although we are living in a highly advanced society, having an extended family is also necessary.

写的很好啊~~只稍加修改了一点点~~加油！

gundammoleUID: 2300958

2# lulufriend
哈哈.没事啦,大家都有忙的时候.谢谢你的批改!

soilinkinUID: 2163892

Nowadays, individuals spend most of their time on work and pay less attention on their families, which make them believe that it is better to have one or no children in a family. When human beings enjoy their happy life without the disturbing of children, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the disadvantages of having less family members? Considerable though the advantages that small families enjoys are, they can not compete with the benefits that extended family brings about, when both parents’ and children’s future are taken into account.

To begin with, in small families, old parents are most likely to be abandoned to the homes for senior citizens. When they grow older, children do not have enough time to take care of them. For instance, my uncle only has a son in his family, who got the chance to continue his Doctor Degree in Harvard University several years ago. Now he is a professor in that world famous university. There is little doubt, however, he can not always be at home with his parents in China. After my aunt passed away, there is no one has enough time to look after my uncle, and his son finally sent him to the homes for senior citizens in a town nearby. How lonely those old people are!

In addition, children may be overprotected or spoiled by their parents, making them weaker individuals. They not only do not know how to take care of themselves, but are also quite selfish and do not like to communicate with others. As a child, I was also overprotected. For my honesty, I always can get what I want from my parents. Once I missed my mother's performance, and I was so angry that I demanded her to dance for me again on the stage, or I would not leave. I have not realized my weak individuals until I began my life in a university, which is thousand miles away from home. As far as I am concerned, if I had a brother or sister, I can be more tolerant and independent.

Furthermore, when facing troubles, the more family members we have, the more help we can get. With their help, people do not need to worry about there is no reliable person they can talk to, or ask for advice.

In general, if one day I would be（become） a parent, I would definitely choose to have more than two children, because it is better for all the family members. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt objection to the idea that extended family is not important as it was in the past. Although we are living in a highly advanced society, having an extended family is also necessary.

好吧你赢了...我的确没什么改的...
不好意思改晚了...