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Argument 173

The publisher of the Magazine, Newsbeats asserts that to maximize sales of the magazine, they should decrease its emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on its covers. To support this conclusion the publisher points out that the magazine's poorest-selling issues during the last three years have been those with cover stories on international events, and during same period the number of international cover stories appearing in other news magazines has decreased. In several aspects, the evidence has little support for the conclusion.

First of all, the fact that the poorest selling during the last three years were those with international cover stories could be explained in a variety of factors. Perhaps the international events broadcasted in the magazines are not as interesting themselves. Or perhaps the style in which the magazine dictates the international issue rather is not as subjective to attract conventional readers. If so, the publisher's assertion on the relationship between cover stories and selling records would be arbitrary when those events are more interesting or stories are composed in a more impersonal manner to stimulate the sales. In short, without ruling out other possible factors that influenced the sales, the publisher cannot justifiably conclude that international covers were the cause of the relatively poor sales.

Secondly, the publisher tries to support its view by mentioning competing news-magazines’ act in decreasing the number of cover stories that devote to international news, yet it fails to indicate whether those magazines experienced an increase or a decrease after the act. It is possible, for instance, that other magazines experienced declining sales for issues focusing only on domestic news. If so, the publisher's attempt in convincing the readers would make little sense. Conversely, if the other magazines experienced the same correlation between cover stories and sales record, the fact would give more considerable support the conclusion.

Thirdly, the memo cites increasing costs of maintaining international bureaus as an additional reason to decrease the focus on international news. While it dose lend support to the publisher’s conclusion, it ignores the possible benefits in maintaining the international bureaus. If other magazines de-emphasize international coverage due to similar reasons, Newsbeat might stand out for it's the only one covering international news, which additionally stimulates the sales in great amount. Thus, it would be too hasty to implement the publisher's suggestion without enough outlooks into the future.

In sum, the memo is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the assertion, the memo must give a definite relationship between the poor sales and international covers by filtering all other possible contributions. To better support the assertion that Newsbeat should de-emphasize international news, we need to know what changes in sales volume other news magazines experienced by de-emphasizing international news. Besides, we should also be informed with the possible impact to other magazines when bureau costs in international news increase.

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0910AW 同主题写作第二期 ARGUMENT173 by lovinamy

The publisher of the Magazine, Newsbeats asserts that to maximize sales of the magazine, they should decrease its（their？） emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on its covers（这里是题目中的原话，不太好）. To support this conclusion the publisher points out that the magazine's poorest-selling issues during the last three years have been those with cover stories on international events, and during same period the number of international cover stories appearing in other news magazines has decreased. In several aspects, the evidence has little support for the conclusion.（这里基本是重复题目的内容，没有自己的观点，最后一句没来由的说论据不足，我觉得可以概括性的说一下自己反驳的理由）

First of all, the fact that the poorest selling during the last three years were those with international cover stories（和第一段中一摸一样，觉得至少要换个说法） could be explained in a variety of factors. Perhaps the international events broadcasted in the magazines are not as interesting themselves（这句感觉不错）. Or perhaps the style in which the magazine dictates the international issue rather is not as subjective to attract conventional readers. If so, the publisher's assertion on the relationship between cover stories and selling records would be arbitrary when those events are more interesting or stories are composed in a more impersonal manner to stimulate the sales. In short, without ruling out other possible factors that influenced the sales, the publisher cannot justifiably conclude that international covers were the cause of the relatively poor sales（这一段分析很顺畅）.

Secondly, the publisher tries to support its view by mentioning competing news-magazines’ act in decreasing the number of cover stories that devote to international news, yet it fails to indicate whether those magazines experienced an increase or a decrease after the act（这里的表达很好）. It is possible, for instance, that other magazines experienced declining sales for issues focusing only on domestic news. If so, the publisher's attempt in convincing the readers would make little sense. Conversely, if the other magazines experienced the same correlation between cover stories and sales record, the fact would give more considerable support the conclusion.

Thirdly, the memo cites increasing costs of maintaining international bureaus as an additional reason to decrease the focus on international news. While it dose lend support to the publisher’s conclusion, it ignores the possible benefits in maintaining the international bureaus（是不是前后调换一下，把while放后面，更能突出“it ignores”）. If other magazines de-emphasize international coverage due to similar reasons, Newsbeat might stand out for it's the only one covering international news, which additionally stimulates the sales in great amount（观点很犀利）. Thus, it would be too hasty to implement the publisher's suggestion without enough outlooks into the future（结尾不错）.

In sum, the memo is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the assertion, the memo must give a definite relationship between the poor sales and international covers by filtering all other possible contributions. To better support the assertion that Newsbeat should de-emphasize international news, we need to know what changes in sales volume other news magazines experienced by de-emphasizing international news. Besides, we should also be informed with the possible impact to other magazines when bureau costs in international news increase.

结尾略显啰嗦，当然这只是个人观点，认为倒数第二段的结尾很好，可以在这里结束论述了。
和bean8885（https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=958919&extra=）写得可以找到很多相似的地方，是不是模仿模板的啊？
整体读起来思路清晰，结构严谨，中间的分析有一气呵成的感觉^_^
佩服……
下次注意发帖题目哦，应该是：0910AW 同主题写作第二期 ARGUMENT173 by lovinamy？