[Try best] Issue 13 by suzie

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这个文章写的很吃力，大概是对于这方面积累和思考不多的缘故吧！几乎没有一个例子，第一段极其简略，最后一段是翻译来的一段话，给人感觉是文风突变啊。。。眼看deadline即至，只能把这篇东拼西凑之作交上凑数，惭愧惭愧。。。

TOPIC: ISSUE13 - "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."
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DATE: 2009-6-1 下午 07:51:01


As the lesser-known languages are being lost, is it the government’s duty to prevent the extinction? From my perspective, it's necessary to protect the languages, but it may be too hardly for government to do this job.

First of all, we should make clear that why the lesser-known languages are dying out. As we all know, language is a tool for communication. When people have to exchange information with who speak other languages, there must be one side of them to compromise and learn the new language. However, the reality is that the people in the ascendant are often those who have an advantage in economic, science or military. Now we can imagine how the disadvantaged groups compromised time and again, and then, it stands to reason that their mother tongue faced to the extinction. Actually, the phenomenon occurred in every period of history that cultural invasion leads to the faintish culture's decline. Indian culture’s transformation which the white man made is one powerful example. At the same time, a language's own faultiness may cause less people to use it, for its vocabulary and syntax can not meet the need of the complex communication.

According to all the presentation above, the salvation of languages is more like a duty which can hardly be completed for the local governments. Usually governments of the lesser-known languages speakers are not so powerful; the governments are powerless to protect the language, even if they wanted to. For example, how can we require the Somalia government to protect its endanger languages when most of its countrymen are in hungry.
And if the language itself is no longer applicable to the contemporary, the government is helpless as well. The Darwinian argument is applicable here, the extinction of the languages may be the result of "natural selection".

But on the other hand, terms of language, expression, syntax develop from generation to generation, they have become part of intangible cultural heritage of all mankind. The disappearance of any language, whether to the nation who use such language, or the mankind as a whole, is a huge loss.
The disappearance of one language will make us to say goodbye to a beautiful culture forever. So the languages should be protected, not by the local government but an organization just as the UNESCO, which can ignore the political and economic factors. Or, we can pin our hope on the people's devotion on their own language, it may be a better solution.



  

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Issue 13 by suzie
As the lesser-known languages are being lost, is it the government’s duty to prevent the extinction?（我觉得本题的问题关键是：小语种是不是该被保护，而不是说责任在不在政府） From my perspective, it's necessary to protect the languages, but it may be too hardly for government to do this job.

First of all, we should make clear that why the lesser-known languages are dying out. As we all know, language is a tool for communication. When people have to exchange information with who speak other languages, there must be one side of them to compromise and learn the new language. However, the reality is that the people in the ascendant are often those who have an（不一定是一个，用some吧） advantage in economic, science or military. Now we can imagine how the disadvantaged groups compromised time and again, and then, it stands to reason that（还是why？我不太清楚，感觉why更合适吧） their mother tongue faced to the extinction. Actually, the phenomenon occurred in every period of history that cultural invasion leads to the faintish（为何查不到这个词？） culture's decline. Indian culture‘s transformation which the white man made（没错，改为made by he white man更好） is one powerful example. At the same time, a language's own faultiness may cause less people to use it, for its vocabulary and syntax can not meet the need of the complex communication.（由于词汇和句法并不是唯一的原因，为避免太绝对，所以我感觉这句话应改为：At the same time, a language's own faultiness, such as its vocabulary and syntax can not meet the need of the complex communication, may cause less people to use it.）
According to all the presentation above, the salvation of（加上lesser-known，显得更具体） languages is more like a duty which can hardly be completed for the local governments. Usually governments of the lesser-known languages speakers are not so（用that是否更好？） powerful; the governments are powerless to protect the language, even if they wanted to.（是否有点重复，整句话改为：Usually, governments of the lesser-known languages speakers are not that powerful to protect the languages, even if they wanted to.） For example, how can we require the Somalia government to protect
its endanger(用endangered) languages when most of its countrymen are in hungry.
And if the language itself is no longer applicable to the contemporary, the government is helpless as well. The Darwinian（可以这么用吗？） argument is applicable here, the extinction of the languages may be the result of "natural selection".
But on the other hand, terms of language, expression,(and) syntax develop from generation to generation, they have become part of intangible cultural heritage of all mankind. The disappearance of any language, whether to the nation who use such language, or the mankind as a whole, is a huge loss.
The disappearance of one language will make(force是否更有力？) us to say goodbye to a beautiful culture forever. So the languages should be protected, not by the local government but an organization just as the UNESCO, which can ignore（ignores） the political and economic factors. Or, we can pin our hope on the people's devotion on their own language, it（which） may be a better solution.

总评：
第一次看你得大作，呵呵：）
1，
还是那个是否是政府责任的问题，我觉得本文重点应在于小语种是否该被保护，而不在于哪个机构来保护，这点我也不好下定论，最好找其他同学再商量一下，因为这事关是否跑题啊```
2，
其他都不错，论证比较深入，有些小毛病细心一点就行了。
3，
Indian culture’s transformation这种用法也对，改为 transformation of Indian culture更为地道，你看看范文就知道了，大多数都是用后者，同类用法在你文中也很多，我就不一一指出了

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