【Try Best】第一小组 argument173 by小红莓

小红莓UID：2641349

TOPIC: ARGUMENT173 - The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.

"Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers."
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TIME: 00:49:47
DATE: 2009-6-2 16:23:34

In this argument the speaker recommends that, in order to sell more magazines, Newsbeat, the publisher of a newsmagazine, should decrease the number of cover stories that devote to international news and decrease emphasis on such stories. To support the argument, the speaker points out that their poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those featured international news stories on their front cover and competing magazines have significantly decreased the number of such kind of stories on cover covers. The speaker also claims that the cost of maintaining foreign bureaus is increasing. At the first glance, the argument seems reasonable. However, it is problematic in several critical respects.

First of all, the author provides no evidence that the international news stories are the reason for decrease in selling. The author fails to rule out other possibilities that influenced selling. Perhaps the international news stories are attractive but the way to write them is to be improved. Or perhaps all the magazines were poor-selling during those days because there are some other activities in their country that attracted people and few people focus on the magazines. Lacking more specific information about other reasons, it's impossible to have that conclusion.

Secondly, the author fails to rule out the selling of other magazines those decreased the number of cover stories about international news. If they sell fewer magazines than before, we may have a contradictive conclusion that Newsbeat should increase emphasis on international news and displaying more stories of this kind on covers.

Thirdly, even though the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing, the author fails to rule out the profit made by them and whether the cost will continue increase or not. If the profit made by the foreign bureaus is much more than the cost, or if the magazines would sell even poorer after the foreign bureaus were canceled, or if the cost will decrease in the future, we may also have a contradictive conclusion.

In sum, the speaker's argument is questionable. To strengthen the argument, the speaker must provide clear evidence that the international news stories rather than one or more other factors that cut down the selling of Newsbeats. The author must also provide better evidence that the selling of the magazines would increase, or at least maintain, after the suggestion is put into fact. Finally, to better assess the argument I would need to know whether the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news will continue increase or not.

cooljcqUID：2498528

by cooljcq

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Secondly, the author fails to rule out the selling of other magazines those decreased the number of cover stories about international news. If they sell fewer magazines than before, we may have a contradictive conclusion that Newsbeat should increase emphasis on international news and displaying more stories of this kind on covers.

Thirdly, even though the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing, the author fails to rule out the profit made by them and whether the cost will continue increase or not. If the profit made by the foreign bureaus is much more than the cost, or if the magazines would sell even poorer after the foreign bureaus were canceled, or if the cost will decrease in the future, we may also have a contradictive conclusion.

In sum, the speaker's argument is questionable. To strengthen the argument, the speaker must provide clear evidence that the international news stories rather than one or more other factors that cut down the selling of Newsbeats. The author must also provide better evidence that the selling of the magazines would increase, or at least maintain, after the suggestion is put into fact. Finally, to better assess the argument I 我？would need to know whether the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news will continue increase or not. 文章没什么错误，可以看出写的时间紧凑，字数是个问题，还有就是辩驳点，有些找得有点勉强，而且辩驳的三段字数不多，因而力度不够中间三段加起来和开头结尾一样长了。其实来外看卷主要看中间，结尾没来得及不也有拿full mark的吗。嘿，以后别这样规定时间写了，竟可能快，但是前提要写得好，因为这样才能把问题想透彻，才能把知道的语法通过思索运用的作文中，如果就这样追求速度，那很难提高深度，只有深度提上了，加速就不那么difficult了。哈加油。