Argument173 @@ A Dream@@ 小组第一次作业 by optionhj

optionhjUID: 2639105

In this argument, the arguer conclude that they should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers. To strengthen this conclusion, the arguer provides two evidences, one is the decrease of the number of cover stories of their competitor; the other is the increasing cost of their foreign bureaus.At first glance,the argument might be somehow reasonable,but close scrutiny reveals that it contains several unconvincing assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive.

First of all, the argument claims that the selling records of their magazines are so bad ,because of the international news of the front covers in their magazines.And automatically assumes that this problem is the only reason that their magazines sold very badly.The auguer obviously overlooks other possible explanations for this phenomenon. For example,perhaps the inside content of the articles of their magazines is so tasteless that people do not like reading it and purchasing magazines.or perhaps the design of the cover it self cannot attract the attention of readers,so readers are not interested in their magazines .Without ruling out such possibilities,I cannot accept the arguer's point that the covers with international news stories result in the poor selling record of the magazine issues.

Second, even assuming that the covers with international news stories may lead to the poor selling record of the magazine issues , the arguer unfairly consider the actions of competing news-maganizes that they have significantly decreased the number of cover stories.in addition, the arguer neglect the possibility that they could attract a number of new readers by using covers with interesting international news stories,but their rivals do not realize this point, in contrast, they decrease the number of cover stories.So, we do not reckon that the number of cover stories should be decreased,due to the reason that competitors reduce the cover stories.

Finally, the arguer considers that if they reduce the emphasis on international news and the number of cover stories, they may improve the selling record of maganizes. But the arguer do not support any information about the tastes of readers,so the decrease of our emphasis on international news and cover stories maybe is possible to take no action to improve the selling record of magazines.Perhaps readers perfer reading some kind of news stories to other kinds.So we cannot accept recommendations that the arguer supports.

To sum up, the arguer's conclusion that they should decrease they emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their maganize covers,is not well supported as it stands.To bolster it ,the author must provide more evidence,such as the cover design and the content of inside articles. To better assess the problem, I would aslo need to know the tastes of readers.

kenteUID: 2597633

本文基本逻辑错误都找出来了，语言上也挺不错，只是有些地方单复数的地方要稍微注意。
其实，argu论点都找准了，语言上稍微练下就ok了。
另外本文的结尾处略显仓促，觉得少了点什么。。。。。

仓促之中的拙见。。。。。。

112810asUID: 2646494

In this argument, the arguer conclude that they should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers. To strengthen this conclusion, the arguer provides two evidences(应该是3个原因吧 ？), one is the decrease of the number of cover stories of their competitor; the other is the increasing cost of their foreign bureaus.At first glance,the argument might be somehow reasonable,but close scrutiny reveals that it contains several unconvincing assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive.

First of all, the argument claims that the selling records of their magazines are so bad ,because of the international news of the front covers in their magazines.And automatically （主语是？）assumes that this problem is the only reason that their magazines sold very badly.The auguer obviously overlooks other possible explanations for this phenomenon. For example,perhaps the inside content of the articles of their magazines is so tasteless that people do not like reading it and purchasing magazines.or perhaps the design of the cover it self cannot attract the attention of readers（应该是杂志的设计而不是封面设计吧，封面设计可是包括新闻这个的）,so readers are not interested in their magazines .Without ruling out such possibilities,I cannot accept the arguer's point that the covers with international news stories result in the poor selling record of the magazine issues.

Second, even assuming that the covers with international news stories may lead to the poor selling record of the magazine issues , the arguer unfairly consider the actions of competing news-maganizes that they have significantly decreased the number of cover stories.in addition, the arguer neglect the possibility that they could attract a number of new readers by using covers with interesting international news stories,but their rivals do not realize this point, in contrast, they decrease the number of cover stories.So, we do not reckon that the number of cover stories should be decreased,due to the reason that competitors reduce the cover stories.（我举得没有说服力）

Finally, the arguer considers that if they reduce the emphasis on international news and the number of cover stories, they may improve the selling record of maganizes. But the arguer do not support any information about the tastes of readers,so the decrease of our emphasis on international news and cover stories maybe is possible to take no action to improve the selling record of magazines.Perhaps readers perfer reading some kind of news stories to other kinds.So we cannot accept recommendations that the arguer supports.（论据太少，整个一段基本都在说作者观点是错的，而没具体说出为什么错）

To sum up, the arguer's conclusion that they should decrease they emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their maganize covers,is not well supported as it stands.To bolster it ,the author must provide more evidence,such as the cover design and the content of inside articles. To better assess the problem, I would aslo need to know the tastes of readers.

分析的不够透彻，应该再找找逻辑错误点，你找的太少
对于逻辑性错误攻击你得论据太少，不够