issue144 @@A DREAM @@小组第二次作业 bywobaobao519

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刚上来的时候吓了一大跳，恩，一整版啊，应该是论坛上的问题把
恩，很谢谢你耐心的修改！！！
RE:楼主，问个问题，你是从中文翻译成英文的吧？
问得我很不好意思的说，不是，我没有把中文译成英文，我是直接写的，就是用英文写的，中间似乎好像也没有想什么中文，可能没有意识到把，呃，很困惑为什么会给你留下这样的印象，恩，看来我得好好加油了，把我说的心虚了~~
RE：你最后几句是在论证critic还是在说读书呀？）
我这里仅仅只是用这样的一句话来证明说我们对critic 要有critical thinking ，不能所有的都相信，可能是我的例子举得不好把，看的时候自己没有感觉，还以为用得不错，晕一下
RE：which指什么？我的这句话的确是有问题的，我原本就是要表达criticilze the thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do这些东西是lasting value的，现在看来，似乎这样也不对，呃，改成这样吧，Giving poeple insightful thinking and what is more, showing  people a way to better understanding of the works is another kind of the lasting value, cirtic's value.
RE:3个it is句型，句型重复，主要因为这种句型没有特点   
我是打算写一个排比的句子的，呃，印象中有看到过，可能自己用的不好吧
RE：we neglect the fact that the critists are people, people make mistakes（这个用重句）
这句话是我在看friends 里面学的，原话，可能他的那个比较的生活化，不适合用在作文上吧。
RE:there will be no less than hundred thousands（第一次见，应该不对）
被你问到了，我没有十足的把握，只是印象中没有多想就写出来了
算了，还是改掉吧，there will be no less than several thousands
恩，接下来，我要努力的方向的确是积累句型~~~
再次谢谢了哈

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

不是吧，我写的那么多的东西怎么没有了，我明明发了啊，晕，晕，晕~~~~~白写了，我写了好久的说，55555555555
好吧，不能让别人的劳动成果白费，决定再写一次，55
RE：people use art = to communicate with each other, to reflesh themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art(把这个调整到=处).我并不是很明白会什么要这样的改，我觉得这样也可以啊，而且我很习惯这样的写法，看不出那里错了，请教请教
RE：which（指什么？） 这句话我错了，我想表达的意思是 give the audience guidence, criticilze the thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do,这些是critic 的value 的，呃，现在看来这样也是不行的，我改一下
RE:3个it is句型，句型重复，主要因为这种句型没有特点）
我是想写排比句的~~~
RE： critists are people, people make mistakes（这个用重句）.
这个是我从老友记上学来的，可能太过于生活化，不适合把，但是这的确是比较地道的表达方法，个人认为。
RE：no less than hundred thousands（第一次见，应该不对）,
问道我了，我没有确切的证据，只是自然流落出来的，我还是改一下把
RE:你最后几句是在论证critic还是在说读书呀？）
我是在论证我们对于critic 也要保持critical thinking的，不能完全相信critic，就想到了这个这句话，用来论证我们对critic是要有怀疑的精神的
RE问个问题，你是从中文翻译成英文的吧？感觉好多句子你都是初中生那种翻译方法词对词
呃，问的我很不好意的说，我没有翻译，我是直接写的，直接用英语写的，我在写的时候似乎没有意识自己是在想中文，还是英语，感觉上没有很多的中文，大部分句子的都是英文的啊，呃， 很困惑为什么会给你留下这样的印象，55555，我想不透~~~
下回把字体弄成4号的，方便看。——知道了！！

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

为什么发不上去，？

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

好吧，我再一次崩溃一下，我发了两次了，我打了两次了，晕晕晕，太烦躁了，我已经写了近2个小时了，他再发不上我就不发了，讨厌！
首先，谢谢你的修改，不是因为你的那么认真，我发了一次不成功我就不发了，5555
REpeople use art = to communicate with each other, to reflesh themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art(把这个调整到=处). （我不是很了解这样改的作用，我觉得这样也可以啊，而且我觉得这样很舒服啊，请教请教）
RE：which（指什么？） 这个句子我错了，我改下
RE：3个it is句型，句型重复，主要因为这种句型没有特点）
呃，我是想写排比句的~~~
RE：will be no less than hundred thousands（第一次见，应该不对）,
恩，问到我了，我也不是很有把握，这个句子是很自然的出现的，我也不知道可不可以这样，只是觉得这个句子比较熟悉
RE：你最后几句是在论证critic还是在说读书呀？）
我是在论证我们要对critic 保持critical thinking ， 不能完全的相信， 就写到这样的一句话了，就是写出来了~~
RE：问个问题，你是从中文翻译成英文的吧？
这个问题问的我不好意思的说，我没有从中文翻译成英语，从来就没有这样的习惯，我就是这样写啊， 直接写英文，很困惑为什么会让你形成这样的印象，5555555555
RE：初中生那种翻译方法词对词
呃，不知道，我知道自己有一个问题就是写的不深入还有就是用词很简单，句型比较的单一，很困惑，为什么你看完之后是这样的感觉呢？555

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes. The works of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art. The critic, who evaluate those works, and their value lies in the fact that they give the audience guidence, criticilze the thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do. Hence, both the critists and artists have something of lasting value.


As the beginning,artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative and original thinking. The gardener decorates the garden to transverse the garden to become a excellent place.  The artist deploy their imaginary  power, to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement. It is the from painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate part in our life, provids lasting values.

Secondly, critist, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, showing the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist is the basic to understanding of the point above.  Sometimes, from so many kinds and various books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.  What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art works and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and giving the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may  light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. Consider, a person with little know about the Chinese tradition read the 《Red Chamber Dream》 for the first time，what most likely to happen is that he would not know whole story and consider it as nothing special. Actually, we, though critic, knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books , called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than several thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist should be major repossiblily due to the case.  That is why different critists has different opinions about the same books. .  In the long history run, it is the critist who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the reader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from  another aspect, we should be critical with the critic, and have your own system of measurement, to tell whether this is worthwhile or not. just as an old saying that if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book.



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who evulate those artists' wonderful works, both of them are necessary and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, although in different aspects. The artist give people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us  more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, how to come out with several questions quetioning their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.   
恩，我昨天晚上写了三遍的回复原来还是没有发上去啊，晕死，我真的不想再写一遍了，太晕了~~

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

我明明昨天晚上来都有看到啊，晕，怎么会没有了呢？？？？
恩，好吧，我佩服，我在大概写一下吧
RE问个问题，你是从中文翻译成英文的吧？
呃，这个问题问的我很不好意思啊，我没有从中文翻译成英文啊，我就是这样写的啊，感觉上自己没有怎么想中文啊，很困惑为什么会给你留下这样的印象~~~？？？？
RE你最后几句是在论证critic还是在说读书呀？）
我是想通过写这句话来证明我们对critic也要有critical thinking 的，呃，可能没有表达的好，我改了
REthe critists are people, people make mistakes（这个用重句）
我这个是在看《friends》的时候学的句型，他们就是这样的表达的，可能比较的口语化把，改成are people ,who make mistakes  这样是不是会好一点？

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes. The works of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art. The critic, who evaluate those works, and their value lies in the fact that they give the audience guidence, criticilze the thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do. Hence, both the critists and artists have something of lasting value.


As the beginning,artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative and original thinking. The gardener decorates the garden to transverse the garden to become a excellent place.  The artist deploy their imaginary  power, to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement. It is the from painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate part in our life, provids lasting values.

Secondly, critist, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, showing the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist is the basic to understanding of the point above.  Sometimes, from so many kinds and various books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.  What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art works and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and giving the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may  light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. Consider, a person with little know about the Chinese tradition read the 《Red Chamber Dream》 for the first time，what most likely to happen is that he would not know whole story and consider it as nothing special. Actually, we, though critic, knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books , called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than several thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist should be major repossiblily due to the case.  That is why different critists has different opinions about the same books. .  In the long history run, it is the critist who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the reader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from  another aspect, we should be critical with the critic, and have your own system of measurement, to tell whether this is worthwhile or not. just as an old saying that if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book.



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works ,and the critic who evulate those artists' wonderful works, both of them are necessary and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, although in different aspects. The artist give people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us  more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, how to come out with several questions quetioning their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.   
恩，我昨天晚上写了三遍的回复原来还是没有发上去啊，晕死，我真的不想再写一遍了，太晕了~~

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes. The works of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art. The critic, who evaluate those works, and their value lies in the fact that they give the audience guidence, criticilze the thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do. Hence, both the critists and artists have something of lasting value.


As the beginning,artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative and original thinking. The gardener decorates the garden to transverse the garden to become a excellent place.  The artist deploy their imaginary  power, to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement. It is the from painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate part in our life, provids lasting values.

Secondly, critist, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, showing the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist is the basic to understanding of the point above.  Sometimes, from so many kinds and various books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.  What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art works and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and giving the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may  light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. Consider, a person with little know about the Chinese tradition read the 《Red Chamber Dream》 for the first time，what most likely to happen is that he would not know whole story and consider it as nothing special. Actually, we, though critic, knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books , called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than several thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist should be major repossiblily due to the case.  That is why different critists has different opinions about the same books. .  In the long history run, it is the critist who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the reader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from  another aspect, we should be critical with the critic, and have your own system of measurement, to tell whether this is worthwhile or not. just as an old saying that if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book.



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who evulate those artists' wonderful works, both of them are necessary and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, although in different aspects. The artist give people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us  more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, how to come out with several questions quetioning their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.   
恩，我昨天晚上写了三遍的回复原来还是没有发上去啊，晕死，我真的不想再写一遍了，太晕了~~

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes. The works of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art. The critic, who evaluate those works, and their value lies in the fact that they give the audience guidence, criticilze the thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do. Hence, both the critists and artists have something of lasting value.


As the beginning,artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative and original thinking. The gardener decorates the garden to transverse the garden to become a excellent place.  The artist deploy their imaginary  power, to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement. It is the from painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate part in our life, provids lasting values.

Secondly, critist, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, showing the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist is the basic to understanding of the point above.  Sometimes, from so many kinds and various books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.  What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art works and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and giving the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may  light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. Consider, a person with little know about the Chinese tradition read the 《Red Chamber Dream》 for the first time，what most likely to happen is that he would not know whole story and consider it as nothing special. Actually, we, though critic, knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books , called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than several thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist should be major repossiblily due to the case.  That is why different critists has different opinions about the same books. .  In the long history run, it is the critist who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the reader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from  another aspect, we should be critical with the critic, and have your own system of measurement, to tell whether this is worthwhile or not. just as an old saying that if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book.



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who evulate those artists' wonderful works, both of them are necessary and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, although in different aspects. The artist give people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us  more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, how to come out with several questions quetioning their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.   
恩，我昨天晚上写了三遍的回复原来还是没有发上去啊，晕死，我真的不想再写一遍了，太晕了~~

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes. The works of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art. The critic, who evaluate those works, and their value lies in the fact that they give the audience guidence, criticilze the thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do. Hence, both the critists and artists have something of lasting value.


As the beginning,artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative and original thinking. The gardener decorates the garden to transverse the garden to become a excellent place.  The artist deploy their imaginary  power, to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement. It is the from painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate part in our life, provids lasting values.

Secondly, critist, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, showing the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist is the basic to understanding of the point above.  Sometimes, from so many kinds and various books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.  What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art works and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and giving the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may  light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. Consider, a person with little know about the Chinese tradition read the 《Red Chamber Dream》 for the first time，what most likely to happen is that he would not know whole story and consider it as nothing special. Actually, we, though critic, knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books , called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than several thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist should be major repossiblily due to the case.  That is why different critists has different opinions about the same books. .  In the long history run, it is the critist who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the reader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from  another aspect, we should be critical with the critic, and have your own system of measurement, to tell whether this is worthwhile or not. just as an old saying that if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book.



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who evulate those artists' wonderful works, both of them are necessary and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, although in different aspects. The artist give people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us  more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, how to come out with several questions quetioning their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.   
恩，我昨天晚上写了三遍的回复原来还是没有发上去啊，晕死，我真的不想再写一遍了，太晕了~~

nicoleqUID: 2626973

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes （lives？）。The work of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh （reflesh?）themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art.(此分局修饰art吧，提前句型) The critic, who evaluate those works, give the audience guidence（guidance）, criticilze the（？）thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do, which is another kind of lasting value （谁的持续价值？加上of critics？）（句式和上句一样，）. Hence, both the critists （critics ）and artists both have something of lasting value.（LZ是想表达两者都有价值对吧，具体到句子请表意明确。）


As the beginning, artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative thinking, and original thinking. The gardener decorates
the garden to transverse the garden (一句话中两次出现可以用代词)to become an excellent place. The artist deploys their imaginary power,（这里，号没必要吧） to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement（pleasure）. It is the from
？painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate （unsubstantial）part in our life, providing lasting values.

Secondly, critist（critics？）, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, music, painting, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, who show the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist（critic？） is the basic to understanding of the point above. Sometimes, from so many kinds and various（重复了吧） books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.
What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art work and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and give the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. From the critic, we know much deeper than before. Consider, a person who has little about the Chinese tradition first time read the 《Red Chamber Dream》，the most likely that he would not know what is the whole story talking about and would be nothing （specular拼写？）. Actually, we knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists（critics？） are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists（critics？） have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist （critics？）at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books, called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than hundred thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist（critics？） should be major repossiblily（ responsibility？ ）due to the case.


（需要分段？）That is why different critists（critics？） has different opinions about the same books. In the long history run, it is the critist（critics？） who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the leader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from another aspect to explain my point is that we should be critical with the critic, never believe everything being told, there is old saying that the if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book. （很多谚语都是根据自己的需要来用，建议不要生硬翻译）



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who elevate those artist' wonderful works, both of them are nessary 拼写and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, but in different aspects. The artist gave people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, came out with several questions quetioning拼写 their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.
总之，立场鲜明，我得向LZ学习。
LZ的作文是重量级的，看完脖眼睛都酸了O(∩_∩)O~。
LZ，提倡每个论点后跟加例子，素材准备要重视，否则，作文会空洞。
单复数形式注意下。标点后空一格。

nicoleqUID: 2626973

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes （lives？）。The work of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh （reflesh?）themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art.(此分局修饰art吧，提前句型) The critic, who evaluate those works, give the audience guidence（guidance）, criticilze the（？）thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do, which is another kind of lasting value （谁的持续价值？加上of critics？）（句式和上句一样，）. Hence, both the critists （critics ）and artists both have something of lasting value.（LZ是想表达两者都有价值对吧，具体到句子请表意明确。）


As the beginning, artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative thinking, and original thinking. The gardener decorates
the garden to transverse the garden (一句话中两次出现可以用代词)to become an excellent place. The artist deploys their imaginary power,（这里，号没必要吧） to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement（pleasure）. It is the from
？painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate （unsubstantial）part in our life, providing lasting values.

Secondly, critist（critics？）, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, music, painting, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, who show the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist（critic？） is the basic to understanding of the point above. Sometimes, from so many kinds and various（重复了吧） books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.
What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art work and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and give the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. From the critic, we know much deeper than before. Consider, a person who has little about the Chinese tradition first time read the 《Red Chamber Dream》，the most likely that he would not know what is the whole story talking about and would be nothing （specular拼写？）. Actually, we knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists（critics？） are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists（critics？） have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist （critics？）at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books, called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than hundred thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist（critics？） should be major repossiblily（ responsibility？
）due to the case.


（需要分段？）That is why different critists（critics？） has different opinions about the same books. In the long history run, it is the critist（critics？） who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the leader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from another aspect to explain my point is that we should be critical with the critic, never believe everything being told, there is old saying that the if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book. （很多谚语都是根据自己的需要来用，建议不要生硬翻译）



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who elevate those artist' wonderful works, both of them are nessary 拼写and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, but in different aspects. The artist gave people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, came out with several questions quetioning拼写 their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.
总之，立场鲜明，我得向LZ学习。
LZ的作文是重量级的，看完脖眼睛都酸了O(∩_∩)O~。
LZ，提倡每个论点后跟加例子，素材准备要重视，否则，作文会空洞。
单复数注意下。标点后空一格。
PS：我作文里的例子是最近搜集的。素材狠重要。

nicoleqUID: 2626973

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes （lives？）。The work of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh （reflesh?）themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art.(此分局修饰art吧，提前句型) The critic, who evaluate those works, give the audience guidence（guidance）, criticilze the（？）thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do, which is another kind of lasting value （谁的持续价值？加上of critics？）（句式和上句一样，）. Hence, both the critists （critics ）and artists both have something of lasting value.（LZ是想表达两者都有价值对吧，具体到句子请表意明确。）


As the beginning, artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative thinking, and original thinking. The gardener decorates
the garden to transverse the garden (一句话中两次出现可以用代词)to become an excellent place. The artist deploys their imaginary power,（这里，号没必要吧） to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement（pleasure）. It is the from
？painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate （unsubstantial）part in our life, providing lasting values.

Secondly, critist（critics？）, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, music, painting, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, who show the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist（critic？） is the basic to understanding of the point above. Sometimes, from so many kinds and various（重复了吧） books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.
What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art work and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and give the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. From the critic, we know much deeper than before. Consider, a person who has little about the Chinese tradition first time read the 《Red Chamber Dream》，the most likely that he would not know what is the whole story talking about and would be nothing （specular拼写？）. Actually, we knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists（critics？） are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists（critics？） have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist （critics？）at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books, called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than hundred thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist（critics？） should be major repossiblily（ responsibility？ ）due to the case.


（需要分段？）That is why different critists（critics？） has different opinions about the same books. In the long history run, it is the critist（critics？） who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the leader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from another aspect to explain my point is that we should be critical with the critic, never believe everything being told, there is old saying that the if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book. （很多谚语都是根据自己的需要来用，建议不要生硬翻译）



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who elevate those artist' wonderful works, both of them are nessary 拼写and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, but in different aspects. The artist gave people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, came out with several questions quetioning拼写 their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.
总之，立场鲜明，我得向LZ学习。
LZ的作文是重量级的，看完脖眼睛都酸了O(∩_∩)O~。
LZ，提倡每个论点后跟加例子，素材准备要重视，否则，作文会空洞。
单复数注意下。标点后空一格。
PS：我作文里的例子是最近搜集的。素材狠重要。

nicoleqUID: 2626973

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes （lives？）。The work of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh （reflesh?）themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art.(此分局修饰art吧，提前句型) The critic, who evaluate those works, give the audience guidence（guidance）, criticilze the（？）thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do, which is another kind of lasting value （谁的持续价值？加上of critics？）（句式和上句一样，）. Hence, both the critists （critics ）and artists both have something of lasting value.（LZ是想表达两者都有价值对吧，具体到句子请表意明确。）


As the beginning, artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative thinking, and original thinking. The gardener decorates
the garden to transverse the garden (一句话中两次出现可以用代词)to become an excellent place. The artist deploys their imaginary power,（这里，号没必要吧） to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement（pleasure）. It is the from
？painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate （unsubstantial）part in our life, providing lasting values.

Secondly, critist（critics？）, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, music, painting, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, who show the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist（critic？） is the basic to understanding of the point above. Sometimes, from so many kinds and various（重复了吧） books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.
What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art work and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and give the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. From the critic, we know much deeper than before. Consider, a person who has little about the Chinese tradition first time read the 《Red Chamber Dream》，the most likely that he would not know what is the whole story talking about and would be nothing （specular拼写？）. Actually, we knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists（critics？） are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists（critics？） have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist （critics？）at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books, called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than hundred thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist（critics？） should be major repossiblily（ responsibility？
）due to the case.


（需要分段？）That is why different critists（critics？） has different opinions about the same books. In the long history run, it is the critist（critics？） who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the leader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from another aspect to explain my point is that we should be critical with the critic, never believe everything being told, there is old saying that the if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book. （很多谚语都是根据自己的需要来用，建议不要生硬翻译）



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who elevate those artist' wonderful works, both of them are nessary 拼写and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, but in different aspects. The artist gave people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, came out with several questions quetioning拼写 their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.
总之，立场鲜明，我得向LZ学习。
LZ的作文是重量级的，看完脖眼睛都酸了O(∩_∩)O~。
LZ，提倡每个论点后跟加例子，素材准备要重视，否则，作文会空洞，论证无力。
单复数注意下。标点后空一格。
PS：我作文里的例子是最近搜集的。素材狠重要。

nicoleqUID: 2626973

Art is one of the fundamental possessions in people's lifes （lives？）。The work of art gives people insightful inspiration and impart on the emotion, people use art to communicate with each other, to reflesh （reflesh?）themselves, to get reborn, which we call the lasting value of the art.(此分局修饰art吧，提前句型) The critic, who evaluate those works, give the audience guidence（guidance）, criticilze the（？）thoughts and have deeper understanding of the works than most common people do, which is another kind of lasting value （谁的持续价值？加上of critics？）（句式和上句一样，）. Hence, both the critists （critics ）and artists both have something of lasting value.（LZ是想表达两者都有价值对吧，具体到句子请表意明确。）


As the beginning, artist, as the gardener of the beautiful garden, is the resource of the creative thinking, and original thinking. The gardener decorates
the garden to transverse the garden (一句话中两次出现可以用代词)to become an excellent place. The artist deploys their imaginary power,（这里，号没必要吧） to make the world a better place to live in, by means of painting, music, novels and etc. It is from the music which we can get peaceful and encouragement. It is from novels which we can attain the enjoyment and pleasurement（pleasure）. It is the from？painting which we achieve the sense of hope and inspiration. we can not imagine the life without art, therefore, art, the unsubsituate（unsubstantial）part in our life, providing lasting values.

Secondly, critist（critics？）, those who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, music, painting, etc, as the guidance of the beautiful garden, who show the people around, to find the most fabulous flowers in the garden, also provide some lasting value, as the artist do. Knowing the real function of the critist（critics？）, is the basic to understanding of the point above. Sometimes, from so many kinds and various（重复了吧） books, we have confronted anxiety, because we have no idea which one to choose. Here, the critic came, and told us which one is really worthy reading, which one is not. It not only save our a lot of energy, but also, the every master piece would be at our sight as soon as possible.
What is more, critic who know the arts much better than our common people, would providing a new way to translate art work and illustrate the deep meaning of the piece. One of the critic's roles, is that providing better way to understand the works, and give the audiences something brand new view to view those works. Thanks to the critic, we know others' opinions about the art, which may light up our instinct thinking and widen our sight. From the critic, we know much deeper than before. Consider, a person who has little about the Chinese tradition first time read the 《Red Chamber Dream》，the most likely that he would not know what is the whole story talking about and would be nothing （specular拼写？）. Actually, we knew that every move and every scene has its own meaning and could tell the personality of the character.

But, we neglect the fact that the critists（critics？）, are people, people make mistakes. It is very likely that the critists（critics？）, have various systems of evaluation due to their different values and beliefs. We also take 《Red Chamber Dream》as an example. It was once a time that listed as the forbidden books according to the critist （critics？）, at that time, but now, it is one of the most famous of Chinese tradition books, called one of the four treasures of the old Chinese, and now only accounts to the people who research on the book as a profession, there will be no less than hundred thousands, not to mention the amount of people who read them. The book is the same, but has totally different situations. We assume the critist（critics？）, should be major repossiblily（responsibility？）due to the case.


（That is why 。。。意思是紧着着上面的，需要分段？）That is why different critists（critics？）, has different opinions about the same books. In the long history run, it is the critist（critics？）who make real change to people’s interest in some level. The critic who guide the way to lead the leader to selected books, even though they would make mistakes sometimes, from another aspect to explain my point is that we should be critical with the critic, never believe everything being told, there is old saying that the if you believe everything in the book, then you would rather had no book. （很多谚语都是根据自己的需要来用，建议不要生硬翻译）



The artist who conducted pieces of wonderful works；the critic who elevate those artist' wonderful works, both of them are nessary 拼写and what is more, both of them give society something of lasting value, but in different aspects. The artist gave people more pleasure and enjoyment, but the critic provide us more about how to be critical thinking, how to doubt the forerunner, came out with several questions quetioning拼写 their works. It is deniable to admit that only artist have some lasting value.
总之，立场鲜明，我得向LZ学习。
LZ的作文是重量级的，看完脖眼睛都酸了O(∩_∩)O~。
LZ，提倡每个论点后跟加例子，素材准备要重视，否则，作文会空洞，论证无力。
单复数注意下。标点后空一格。
PS：我作文里的例子是最近搜集的。素材狠重要。