[6,7月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组 FFtserAph的 第17次作业]

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第十七次作业 下周三（6月17日）晚22：00交
Do you agree or not that the extended family (grandparents, cousins, uncles and antes) becomes less important nowadays than it was in the past? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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During our life, so many problems are worth considering carefully. As what has been come up, recently the issue has been brought into focus that whether extended family becomes less important nowadays than it was in the past. Some hold the view that this announcement is true, while the others believe that it is not. However, with all aspects carefully considered, I believe that extended family indeed becomes less important nowadays.

When talked with extended family, it is always connected with past decades. For instance, equipped with unadvanced technology and inconvenient transportation tools, in the rural area, with the help of relatives, people could have more labors to harvest plants and finish other agriculture tasks. Besides, while in the city with immature service industry, parents need grandparents to take care of their little baby when they are working in the day. However, these concerns are not exist anymore nowadays. Farmers could hire agriculture machines to complete all the tasks that need to be done artificially in the past. The little baby could be sent to the nursery school, and the school teachers can handle everything that parents had to concern before. With the development of science and technology, the extended family members are less helpful to each other, which demonstrate that the extended family is not necessary anymore.

Another equally important aspect is that relatives are separated apart further that ever before because of the high mobility. It is not surprising that yesterday a person was spending spare time in Beijing with his or her best friends and today he or she is attending an important business meeting in New York, which is unimaginable and impossible in the past. Due to popularize of modern transportation tools, human's mobility is greatly elevated. No wonder family members living and working in a wide range of provinces or states, even several different countries,which makes extended family less possible.

Besides, other reasons are quick pace of working and studying, smaller living space, etc. Quick pacing makes us less occupied in communication, sharing feeling with family members. While smaller living spacing restricts that the big family unions have to be hold outside home, we could not enjoy the happiness when cooked together. Admittedly, thesefacts reduced the affection between relatives and reduced importance of the extended family.

I do not deny that extended family has its own advantages, when family members gathering together to enjoy a delicious dinner and chatting with each other, it is quite warming. But, limited by the facts, we had to knowledge that extended family becomes less important than it was in the past.

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judyheUID: 2613440

During our life, so many problems are worth considering carefully. As what has been come up, recently the issue has been brought into focus that whether extended family becomes less important nowadays than it was in the past. Some hold the view that this announcement is true, while the others believe that it is not. However, with all aspects carefully considered, I believe that extended family indeed becomes less important nowadays.
When talked with
(about) extended family, it is always connected with past decades (?? “Extended family is more a form related to past rather then nowadays” is that what you want to express?). For instance, equipped with unadvanced technology and inconvenient transportation tools (immature service industry in the past), in the rural area, with the help of relatives, people (adding “in the rural area would be in more need for the help of relatives to”) could have more labors to harvest plants and finish other agriculture tasks, Besides, while (parents) in the city with immature service industry, parents need grandparents to take care of their little baby when they are working in the day. However, these concerns do not exist anymore nowadays. (With the development of technology and society,)
farmers could hire (use) agriculture machines to complete all (mostly of) the tasks that need to be done artificially in the past. (,) The little baby (babies) could be sent to the nursery school, and (while) the school teachers can handle everything that parents had to concern before. With the development of science and technology, (in this sense,) the extended family members are less helpful to each other, which demonstrate that the extended family is not necessary anymore (of less importance today).

Another equally important aspect is that relatives are separated apart further that ever before because of the high mobility (in people’s living and working style). It is not surprising that yesterday a person was spending spare time in Beijing with his or her best friends and today he or she is attending an important business meeting in New York, which is unimaginable and impossible in the past. Due to popularize (the popularization) of modern transportation tools, human's mobility is greatly elevated. No wonder family members living (lived) and working (worked) in a wide range of provinces or states, even several different countries, which makes extended family less possible to (gather together).

Besides, (There are) other reasons are (such as:) quick pace of working and studying, smaller living space, etc. Quick pacing makes us less occupied in communication, sharing feeling with family members. (,) while smaller living spacing restricts (may cause) that the big family unions have to be hold outside home, (and) we could not (even) enjoy the happiness when cooked (of cooking） together. Admittedly, these facts reduced(weaken) the affection between relatives and reduced importance of the extended family.
I do not deny that extended family has its own advantages (???advantages of extended family?), when family members gathering together to enjoy a delicious dinner and chatting with each other, it is quite warming. But, limited by the facts, we had to knowledge that extended family becomes less important than it was in the past.

橙色表示我个人觉得有问题的表达，括号里是替代或增添的内容。楼主不好意思，我的作文水平蛮糟糕的，这是第一次改作文，权当交流吧。有不对的地方请指正哦~~~~

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