第一次发习作，求改，ISSUE 147

kummel12UID: 2639356

除了给我同学看过一篇外，就没发出来过了。。。

I只写了5，6篇，除了用WORD改点拼写，还有今天发的求改的这篇，就没改过了。。。

也找不到组织。。。希望大家能痛批一下，因为只有1个月多点了，我还是没有进入那种状态，而且写作，逻辑水平是那么的低。。。记忆力也不行。。。。。。。。把字改大一点

TOPIC: ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
WORDS: 480
TIME: 01:46:31
DATE: 2009-6-12 1:56:53

The view of tradition and modernization are incontestable is not the fact we face every. There are many examples, we use pencils to write on paper and we also use keyboards to kick words by computer; we light a candle when it lose power or lamps don't work; we play some sports in the playgrounds and we also play them through video games. So, it's obviously that tradition and modernization can both exist in the world.

Then, another question may occur to us: since tradition and modernization are not incompatible, do tradition and modernization just live in perfect harmony and never interact on each other? The answer is not. In my opinion, they affect each other incessantly during the humankinds' history. For instance, the words and languages of Chinese have been improved again and again from oracle bone inscriptions to LI SHU (a former forms of Chinese which we can still know the meanings of them) to complex characters, at last, to the simplified characters that was amended in 1950s in the continent of China because the idea of four modernization movement. Those who commit themselves to the process of developing simplified characters considered that we needed easy writing words that could convey the information more quickly. This is the case that modernization affects tradition. On the other hand, the simplified characters are totally based on the complex characters which are used in Taiwan, Hong Kong and some other regions. This is the case that tradition influences the modernization.

Now that tradition and modernization always work on each other and coexist in the globe, how can we choose between them? Before answer the question, let's think over the fact that without modernization, we will lose development and hope, and without tradition, we will lose the sense of belongings and the sense of identity. So when we are going to choose between tradition and modernization or reject one of them, I recommend we should take into account the possible sequent deeply. An example is available to justify it. It's related to the Chinese languages, too. In the middle of 20th, Korea and Vietnam eliminate the Chinese language in their nations because the nationalism. And Korea even changes the capital name from "han citty" which had a Chinese word in it to Seoul. Now because the new created languages are not based on a centuries-old language like Chinese or Latin, the expression of the languages is limited and the people who only learn this deficient language cannot feel the deep charm of literature. And because the histories of Korea and Vietnam are wrote in Chinese, few Koreans and Vietnams can read the first hand historical materials which now are not utterly translated into the new languages.

In sum, it is the fact that tradition and modernization are compatible and we ought to wake up to the advantages and disadvantages between them and be very careful choosing them.

kummel12UID: 2639356

掉的好快，还有一个问题是我看不进别人写的作文，以及看不懂除非看得很慢。

chilloleeUID: 2624507

我现在用汉语写出全文，然后关键部位译成英语。语言的修炼还是不够啊~其实中国人的逻辑在世界的任何一个角落都是够用的。。。

kummel12UID: 2639356

3# chillolee

恩，写ISSUE的时候我一开始是用汉语写提纲的，后来发现真写起来，不看提纲脑子一片空白，看的话到最后成了汉译英了。。。于是我最近写作就稍微想一下，定200分钟，然后边写边查边想。。。
关于逻辑方面，我一开始以为是这样的，但现在觉得不是这样，可能我是特例吧。。。一是这两天看A的题目，一些题目确实需要动一番脑子的，包括彗星撞地球（虽然前几天看过一位前辈分析了好多点漏洞，可是现在一想，一个都想不起来了，记忆力啊），鉴定尸骨成份看他们是移民还是商业活动，以及吃一个东西治疗第一次癌症的那个对比等等。二是issue方面，把逻辑说出来虽然不困难，但要做到cogently,well developered或者至少做到clearly实实在在是困难的。

kummel12UID: 2639356

是不是逻辑太混乱了，不能改？？。。晕

brisk1111UID: 2571604

你还写了六篇，偶是一篇都没有下笔啊