argument167 =so what=小组第五次作业 by xoxlol

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167. A folk remedy* for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.

A folk remedy is usually a plant-based form of treatment common to traditional forms of medicine, ones that developed before the advent of
modern medical services and technology.

一种治疗失眠的偏方--薰衣草花香，现在被证明是有效的。在一次最近的调查中，30名患有慢性失眠的志愿者在三周之内每晚都在一个受监视的控制室内睡在带薰衣草花香的枕头上。在第一周，志愿者继续服用他们常用的安眠药。他们睡得很沉但醒来时很累。在第二周，他们不服用药物。结果与前一周相比他们睡得不那么沉并且感觉更累。在第三周，他们睡得比前两周时间长而且更深。这表明薰衣草在短时间内治愈了失眠。

*偏方通常是一种在传统医药中常见的植物治疗形式，这些传统医药是在现代医药服务和科技出现之前发展起来的。

提纲：
1. first two weeks
2. third week
3. help sleep> cure insomnia

XOXLOLUID: 2309408

The author made a hasty conclusion that the scent in lavender flowers cures insomnia based on a three weeks' study. A close examination reveals the argument's logical flaws and invalidity.

To begin with, the result of first two weeks' study has only proven effectiveness of sleeping medication. There were very obviously different results coming out between first two weeks, while volunteers took their usual sleeping medication in the first week and stopped doing so in the second week. Since the only difference is taking and not taking sleeping medication, then result of first two weeks has only further proven the effectiveness of sleeping medication and had almost nothing to do with proving effectiveness of lavender. Moreover, they slept on lavender pillows during both weeks and wakened feeling tired throughout the period, therefore, lavender pillow may undermine people's sleeping quality. Thus, the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia is no where to be seen in the first two weeks.

Another weak link of this argument lies in the study of third week. Firstly, no information shows whether the volunteers have taken sleeping medication or not in third week. So the longer and more soundly sleep could be a result of sleeping medication rather than lavender pillow. Assumingly, they did not take sleeping medication, but it is entirely possible that volunteers were sent right to a good sleep by the exhaustion from previous two weeks. In other words, the seemingly better sleep might be only a compensation for the huge loss of sleep in the first two weeks. Thirdly, no information about how volunteers felt when waking up in the third week. If they felt even more tired than they did in first two weeks, then it only further confirms the suspicion that lavender pillow actually causes adverse consequence. In this case, the assumption that lavender cures insomnia is unwarranted at best.

Last, even lavender pillow helped volunteers sleep better but it does not necessarily imply it could cure chronic insomnia. The study only showed how well volunteers slept instead of how long it took for them to fall asleep, which is insufficient to prove the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, since people with insomnia usually struggle quite long before they can fall asleep, if they can at all. Assumingly, lavender indeed helped insomnia patient fall sleep easier, it does not apple to the conclusion that it cures this disease. No follow－up of the study is provided in this argument, which cultivates possibility that patients may still have difficulty in falling asleep without external help like sleeping medication or lavender pillow. Additionally, considering insomnia is a serious chronic disease, is three weeks long enough to lead credit to the effectiveness of lavender? Volunteers may suffer a relapse from a temporary wellness. In short, it is still not convincing to say lavender cures insomnia.

To sum up, further research and more convincing proof is in need to confirm the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, otherwise the author's conclusion is invalid and even misleading.

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The author made a hasty conclusion that the scent in lavender flowers cures insomnia based on a three weeks' study. A close examination reveals the argument's logical flaws and invalidity.这个句子可真是万能句啊。

To begin with, the result of first two weeks' study has only proven effectiveness of sleeping medication. There were very obviously different results coming out between first two weeks, while volunteers took their usual sleeping medication in the first week and stopped doing so in the second week. Since the only difference is taking and not taking sleeping medication, then result of first two weeks has only further proven the effectiveness of sleeping medication and had almost nothing to do with proving effectiveness of lavender. Moreover, they slept on lavender pillows during both weeks and wakened feeling tired throughout the period, therefore, lavender pillow may undermine people's sleeping quality. Thus, the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia is no where to be seen in the first two weeks.

Another weak link of this argument lies in the study of third week. Firstly, no information shows whether the volunteers have taken sleeping medication or not in third week. So the longer and more soundly sleep could be a result of sleeping medication rather than lavender pillow. Assumingly, they did not take sleeping medication, but it is entirely possible that volunteers were sent right to a good sleep by –>due to the exhaustion from previous two weeks. In other words, the seemingly better sleep might be only a compensation for the huge loss of sleep in the first two weeks. Thirdly, no information about how volunteers felt when waking up in the third week. If they felt even more tired than they did in first two weeks, then it only further confirms the suspicion that lavender pillow actually causes adverse consequence. In this case, the assumption that lavender cures insomnia is unwarranted at best.

Last, even lavender pillow helped volunteers sleep better but it does not necessarily imply it could cure chronic insomnia. The study only showed how well volunteers slept instead of how long it took for them to fall asleep, which is insufficient to prove the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, since people with insomnia usually struggle quite long before they can fall asleep, if they can at all. Assumingly, lavender indeed helped insomnia patient fall sleep easier, it does not apple->apply to the conclusion that it cures this disease. No follow－up of the study is provided in this argument, which cultivates possibility that patients may still have difficulty in falling asleep without external help like sleeping medication or lavender pillow. Additionally, considering insomnia is a serious chronic disease, is three weeks long enough to lead to credible effectiveness of lavender? Volunteers may suffer a relapse (这个复发的词好) from a temporary wellness. In short, it is still not convincing to say lavender cures insomnia.

To sum up, further research and more convincing proof is in need to confirm the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, otherwise the author's conclusion is invalid and even misleading.万能句。

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The author made a hasty conclusion that the scent in lavender flowers cures insomnia based on a three weeks' study. A close examination reveals the argument's logical flaws and invalidity.

To begin with, the result of first two weeks' study has only proven effectiveness of sleeping medication. There were very obviously different results coming out between first two weeks, while volunteers took their usual sleeping medication in the first week and stopped doing so in the second week. Since the only difference is taking and not taking sleeping medication, then result of first two weeks has only further proven the effectiveness of sleeping medication and had almost nothing to do with proving effectiveness of lavender. Moreover, they slept on lavender pillows during both weeks and wakened feeling tired throughout the period, therefore, lavender pillow may undermine people's sleeping quality. Thus, the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia is no where to be seen in the first two weeks.

Another weak link of this argument lies in the study of third week. Firstly, no information shows whether the volunteers have taken sleeping medication or not in the third week. So the longer and more soundly sleep could be a result of sleeping medication rather than lavender pillow. Assumingly（对于该词用法我有点confused，查了诸多辞典，居然是“傲慢地，无理地”意思，⊙﹏⊙b汗，指点指点啊；你用在这里是“假定，即使”的意思吗，该用法有何根据）, they did not take sleeping medication, but it is entirely possible that volunteers were sent right to a good sleep by the exhaustion from previous two weeks. In other words, the seemingly better sleep might be only a compensation for the huge loss of sleep in the first two weeks. Thirdly, no information about how volunteers felt when waking up in the third week. If they felt even more tired than they did in first two weeks, then it only further confirms the suspicion that lavender pillow actually causes adverse consequence. In this case, the assumption that lavender cures insomnia is unwarranted at best.

Last, even lavender pillow helped volunteers sleep better but it does not necessarily imply it could cure chronic insomnia. The study only showed how well volunteers slept instead of how long it took for them to fall asleep, which is insufficient to prove the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, since people with insomnia usually struggle quite long before they can fall asleep, if they can at all. Assumingly, lavender indeed helped insomnia patient fall sleep easier, it does not apple（apply） to the conclusion that it cures this disease. No follow－up of the study is provided in this argument, which cultivates possibility that patients may still have difficulty in falling asleep without external help like sleeping medication or lavender pillow. Additionally, considering insomnia is a serious chronic disease, is three weeks long enough to lead credit to the effectiveness of lavender? Volunteers may suffer a relapse from a temporary wellness. In short, it is still not convincing to say lavender cures insomnia.

To sum up, further research and more convincing proof is in need to confirm the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, otherwise the author's conclusion is invalid and even misleading.

作者的逻辑滴水不漏，攻击深刻有力；一篇高难度的A被作者批驳得体无完肤，有快刀斩乱麻之势。

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The author made a hasty conclusion that the scent in lavender flowers cures insomnia based on a three weeks' study. A close examination reveals the argument's logical flaws and invalidity.
首段  总结论点 说明论点有问题
To begin with, the result of first two weeks' study has only proven effectiveness of sleeping medication. There were very obviously different results coming out between the first two weeks, while volunteers took their usual sleeping medication in the first week and stopped doing so in the second week. Since the only difference is taking and not taking sleeping medication, then result of first two weeks has only further proven the effectiveness of sleeping medication and had almost nothing to do with proving effectiveness of lavender. Moreover(换成what’s worse 是不是更好一点 ，仅供参考), they slept on lavender pillows during both weeks and wakened feeling tired throughout the period, therefore, lavender pillow may undermine people's sleeping quality. Thus, the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia is no where to be seen in the first two weeks.
指明的逻辑错误是  前两周的研究结果不能支持 结论。
Another weak link of this argument lies in the study of third week. Firstly, no information shows whether the volunteers have taken sleeping medication or not in third week. So the longer and more soundly sleep could be a result of sleeping medication rather than lavender pillow. Assumingly, they did not take sleeping medication, but it is entirely possible that volunteers were sent right to a good sleep by the exhaustion from previous two weeks. In other words, the seemingly better sleep might be only a compensation for the huge loss of sleep in the first two weeks. Thirdly, no information about how volunteers felt when waking up in the third week. If they felt even more tired than they did in first two weeks, then it only further confirms the suspicion that lavender pillow actually causes adverse consequence. In this case, the assumption that lavender cures insomnia is unwarranted at best.
首句是否是主题句。能否总领这一段。

Last, even lavender pillow helped volunteers sleep better but it does not necessarily imply it could cure chronic insomnia. The study only showed how well volunteers slept instead of how long it took for them to fall asleep, which is insufficient to prove the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, since people with insomnia usually struggle quite long before they can fall asleep, if they can at all. Assumingly, lavender indeed helped insomnia patient fall sleep easier, it does not apple to the conclusion that it cures this disease. No follow－up of the study is provided in this argument, which cultivates possibility that patients may still have difficulty in falling asleep without external help like sleeping medication or lavender pillow.（这句不懂，第三周的试验就是为了证明这一结果的呀） Additionally, considering insomnia is a serious chronic disease, is three weeks long enough to lead credit to the effectiveness of lavender? Volunteers may suffer a relapse from a temporary wellness. In short, it is still not convincing to say lavender cures insomnia。
睡眠状况 与 失眠的症状不相符 其次 实验的时间是否足够证明结论。


To sum up, further research and more convincing proof is in need to confirm the effectiveness of lavender in curing insomnia, otherwise the author's conclusion is invalid and even misleading.

PS 发现一个共同的特征  再找理由 或者说指明文章 错误的时候  有些牵强  比如上面的大段红字部分  我也有这样的毛病  不知能否行的通，有待探讨