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小小amyUID: 2541111

I first met history as a course at primary school when I had no idea what was it. It was just a bunch of data with famous people long ago all over the world, who were a part of a fantastic story for me. From the ancient china to post-modern North America, every part of it was quiet a legend to me, which uttered a great number of heroes’ bravery and wisdom, people’s everlasting enthusiastic for freedom and peace. I thought people in history were all the same，due to human nature never change no matter what life styles they had lived with, those innocent ones who lived under poverty and cruel domination fought for better life, while those evil ones invaded others’ homeland and robbed everything visible.




After I pursued further knowledge in middle school late, history is much more than just stories contained people’s tears and laughter, nations’ past as well were linked to modern lives which indicate so many systematic differences on cultures, science, art and etc. By history I know why Africans speak English, why Taiwan was part of China and why Chinese hate Japanese. Patriotism is grown up in young people’s hearts as time pasts by and be nurtured slowly as a member of this nation. History teaches us to be pride of being so lucky living in this culture. History can build a sense of wanting to be responsible to one’s life and a well-being part of the society. Further more, history doesn’t only function in establishing the sense of national pride, but also teach lessons on the world’s future development.

People nowadays can seek examples in history to avoid same tragic mistakes causes by wars and diseases. People used to be in wild, lived with animals and killed same-kind just for food. Therefore human were as low as just beasts at that time. As evolution went on, human formed into societies, experienced feudal operations then the communist government, and underwent imperial reforms. Those are great development that different societies made to have a stable and sound life in different times, which have set up a huge knowledge foundation to benefit people. In the 19th century, ceaseless regional wars finally entangled into world wide wars which shocked entire human beings, of who may lose their kin and loves in the fight and suffer from unstable war lives, shout for peace and humanism. I can see how people resent wars, when North Korea wanted to make nuclear experiments caused big storm in world wide public voices went against it. This is the lesson history has taught the world, to love peace and to protect war. While N1H1 virus broke out as a massive power world wide, China got the experience back into 2003, the year of fighting with SARS which were much fiercer. The past shows the government should take part in the anti-virus war so that the great majority can be better protected. So did the government. Now the epidemic is under control, and most patients caught the disease are carefully watch and treated.

As I see through the history, the main contribution is not telling us the sameness between people in various generations, human nature is born in gene in the long river of biologic development, why bother to look into that. The more concern that people should put upon history is how we can use the inner connection and experiences in history to face the current circumstance which will benefit people better. Only pure theory of history can not be applied in realistic world, and this would be a big lose. Take recent world economic recession for example, it was not the first time last ten decades, which is sure that we can draw lessons from last time and keep the damage on the lowest level as we can.

恒UID: 2193975

全文改了一遍。
I had no idea about what history course was when I met it as the first time in my primary school. It was just a bunch of data with famous people all over the world who lived so long ago and became parts of fantastic stories for me. From ancient China to post-modern North America, each part of it was quite a legend to me, which uttered a great number of heroes’ bravery and wisdom, people’s everlasting enthusiastism for freedom and peace. I thought people in history were all the same，due to human nature never changed no matter what life styles they had lived in. Those innocent ones who lived under poverty and cruel domination fought for better life, while those evil ones invaded others’ homeland and robbed everything visible.
After I pursued further knowledge in middle school later, history became much more than just stories contained people’s tears and laugh, nations’ past as well were linked to modern lives which indicate so many systematic differences on culture, science, art and so on. From history course, I knew the reasons why Africans speak English, why Taiwan was  a part of China and why Chinese has some conflict with Japanese (This should not be your example. You can say "why Greek culture is so important for Europe"). Patriotism is growing up in youth’s hearts as time pasts by and be nurtured slowly as a member of this nation. History teaches us to be proud of being so lucky living in this culture. History can build a sense of desire to be responsible to one’s life and a well-being part of the society. Further more, history does not only functioned in establishing the sense of national pride, but also gives preview of development of the world.
People nowadays can seek examples in history to avoid the same causes as tragic mistakes, such as wars and diseases. People used to be in wild, lived with animals and killed same-kind just for food. By then human being was as bottom as beasts. As evolution went on, human formed into societies, experienced feudal operations then the communist government, and underwent imperial reforms. Those are great development that different societies made to have a stable and sound life in different times, which have set up a huge knowledge foundation to benefit people. In the 19th century, ceaseless regional wars finally entangled into world wide wars which shocked entire human beings, of whom may lose their kin and loves in the fight and suffer from unstable lives and shout for peace and humanism. I can see how people got wars recently, when North Korea wanted to make nuclear experiments, it caused big storm in world wide and public voices went against it. This is the lesson history has taught the world, to love peace and to protect (do you mean prove away from?) war. While N1H1 virus broke out as a massive power world wide, China got the experience back into 2003, the year of fighting with SARS which were much fiercer. Experience let the government know that they should take part in the anti-virus war immediately so that the great majority can be better protected. The government did so. Now the epidemic is under control, and most patients caught the disease are carefully watched and treated.

As I see through history, the main contribution of it is not telling us that the sameness between people in various generations or human nature is born in gene in the long river of biologic development, but to tell people that they should put upon history is how we can use the inner connection and experiences in history to face the current circumstance which will benefit people better. Pure theory of history can not be applied in realistic world, and this would be a big loss. Take recent world economic recession for example, it was not the first time last ten decades, which is sure that we can draw lessons from last time and keep the damage on the lowest level as we can.
未能突显逻辑。写前列完提纲，写的时候要很focus，写完还要再看一遍。用语偏累赘。同类词变化不够，用词不准确。

wobaobao519UID: 2605404

看了你的文章，呃， 英语专业的果然不同凡响啊， 我是根本找不到什么语法上的错误的，语言很流利，不过，我觉得如果你再加强一点学术写作的感觉，主要是掌握AW的一些技巧，应该没有问题的~~~
推荐你去看草木的fundamental writting couse， 相信看完之后你会有一个比较清晰的思路的~~！！！
PS：看了你的语言之后，我都没有勇气把我的给你改了，怎么办？我觉得你看了我的后一定会疯的~~~~~