TOEFL暑假集结号作文第三次作业 by Amber

Amber0926UID: 2555355

作业交晚了，不好意思！
topic:It is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they can not get top grades.

Most people have formed an unrealistic picture of students' learning. Some educators advocate that even though students can not get top grades, they are taught difficult classes will bring many benefits to them. They will have learned various theories and formula, so there is nothing to worry about in their future and maybe most of them are eminent scientists in the future. But, in fact, the other side of the picture is quit opposite.

First of all, if we just chase to choose difficult classes at university, students will lose confidence when they get an impressive low grades. Facing a variety of complex and confused classes, students will also lose interest in study, for they hardly understand so difficult theroy and fail to solve any problems. We can take a glance at a common example, my friends Ray, who always interest in liberal art in college and receive many prizes of literature contest. Recently, in order to develop the all-ground development, he is requested to learn some sciences. For him, there are too difficult to learn. He alway grumble to me that he lose interest in his study and also no confidence in his talented subjects, when he receive a low grade report. In short, it is not benefit for students choose difficult classes at university.

Secondly, there exist many other bad influences when students have diffucult classes,such as they feel somehow burden and stress. Everyday, we have attend a divese of basic subject classes in the university. If we also choose some difficult classes at the same time, we will suffer all kinds of anxieties and pressure, worring about our homework, bothering the result of experiment, concerning the scores of test. My brother is facing this situation and he says: i would rather die when handle these problems. And also, if teachers put too much emphasis on these hard classes, students may study on a blindy way---that is studying without subjective thinking and ignoring creativity. They would be try their best to recit and transcribe those arduous formula and theories in order to get high score. Do we really need millions of robots which just can recit snd transcribe?

Students are the future master of the world. Only when we have our interested subjects can we be more motivated our study vigorous. In that way, we can be confident to say we are fully preparesd to manage the world. I am fully convinced that when a choose difficult classe and got a low grade, it has nothing benefits maybe just bring frustration and disappointment.

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

Most people have formed an unrealistic picture of students' learning. Some educators advocate that even though students can not get top grades,they are taught difficult classes will bring many benefits to them学生能受益. They指代不清 will have learned variou s theories and formula, so there is nothing to worry about in their future and maybe most of them are eminent scientists in the future. But, in fact, the other side of the picture is quit opposite." 貌似没有给出自己明确的观点

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

中间两段我认为段尾处应再阐述一下分论点。

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

Students are the future master of the world. Only when we have our interested subjects can we be more motivated our study vigorous. 写得不错In that way, we can be confident to say we are fully preparesd to manage the world. I am fully convinced that when a choose difficult classe and got a low grade, it has nothing benefits maybe just bring frustration and disappointment.

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批改说明：
1. 红色: 不太合适的地方；
2. 蓝色: 值得学习的地方；
3. 淡紫: (my comment).

Most people have formed an unrealistic picture of students' learning. Some educators advocate that even though students can not get top grades, they are taught difficult classes will bring many benefits to them(这一句语法有问题，作者再检查一下，即使没问题也有点复杂). They will have learned various theories and formula, so there is nothing to worry about in their future and maybe most of them are eminent scientists in the future. But, in fact, the other side of the picture is quit(e) opposite.(引出观点: there might be negative from other side.但确实如楼上所说，观点不是很明确，有点遮遮掩掩的感觉)

First of all, if we just chase to choose difficult classes at university, students will lose confidence when they get an impressive low grades. Facing a variety of complex and confused classes, students will also lose interest in study, for they hardly understand so difficult theroy and fail to solve any problems. We can take a glance at a common example, my friends Ray, who (is) always interest in liberal art in college and receive many prizes of literature contest. Recently, in order to develop the all-ground development, he is requested to learn some sciences. For him, there are too difficult to learn. He alway grumble to me that he lose interest in his study and also no confidence in his talented subjects, when he receive a low grade report. In short, it is not benefit(beneficial) for students choose difficult classes at university.9(lose confidence and interests)

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Secondly, there exist many other bad influences when students have diffucult classes,such as they feel somehow burden and stress. Everyday, we have attend a divese(diverse) of basic subject classes in the university. If we also choose some difficult classes at the same time, we will suffer all kinds of anxieties and pressure, worring about our homework, bothering the result of experiment, concerning the scores of test. My brother is facing this situation and he says: i would rather die when handle these problems. And also, if teachers put too much emphasis on these hard classes, students may study on a blindy way---that is studying without subjective thinking and ignoring creativity. They would be try their best to recit(e) and transcribe those arduous formula and theories in order to get high score. Do we really need millions of robots which just can recit snd transcribe?(cause burden & stress)

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Students are the future master of the world. Only when we have our interested subjects can we be more motivated our study vigorous(这儿也有点不通顺，检查一下语法结构). In that way, we can be confident to say we are fully preparesd to manage the world. I am fully convinced that when a(\) choose difficult classe and got a low grade, it has nothing benefits maybe just bring frustration and disappointment.(结论：to choose interested subjects)

COMMENTS:
1. 文章写得很不错。印象最深的就是两个主题段落的论证，例子很有代表性，说服性也很强；
2. 思路清晰，结构完整；
3. 作者应该注意一下拼写，或者借助word事先纠错一下。

Amber0926UID: 2555355

谢谢楼上滴点评~~~

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

帮我评下作文好不？？https://bbs.gter.net/thread-985532-1-1.html 6# Amber0926