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本帖最后由 dongzhi428 于 2009-8-22 23:07 编辑
8.22
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TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 422
TIME: 01:00:00
DATE: 2009-8-22 10:26:50
Concerning whether education should be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, people trend to be holding different views. On one hand, it is necessary of the education to provide comprehensive and essential course for each student. On the other hand, it is equally importance for students to obtain knowledge follow their interests and talents. On balance, my perspective is that if the condition is permitted, the education apartment should try their best to satisfy each student, which could stimulate the individuals to the maximum extend.
As we know that everybody have much difference between each other when they born, which means not all of the students have the same interests and talents. Hence, the education, which aimed at improving students' ability, obviously need consider individual needs. In many countries, education is used for giving students universal knowledge by rote, while much more badly when it used for weighing a students' intellect through examination. Just like China, which let all the students to learn the same course in middle school day by day. Although it could bring up a great deal of high intellect students, it also ruins many inadvisable students who maybe have a profound development in other knowledge fields. Such as art, society and music, which is not easily to find out the talents and abilities during the ordinary course.
Furthermore, providing comprehensive elective course could stimulate the students more motivation when they study. There always said that interests is half of the success. As a result of interests, the students could get a high efficiency and obtain an enjoyment during learning process. More importantly, the early interests orientation could make a guide for every students to choose their further education. If we do not know what we want, we could never get achievement in our career, even could not find our real career. Many students even study in research field with Master degree without any interests, we may image that there is not any excellent achievement waiting him in the future.
Certainly, we may not ignore what the situation does we under when it comes to education. In many facets we still have not enough resources and funds to built a independent education system for each students. Moreover, due to the needs of social moral and nation culture, the education also have responsibility to built a systemic and general course system to let the students know what then should to realize. Such as Math, Politic and Literature, which is essential of a nation culture and general education.
From what has been discussed above, we may come to the conclusion that Education, which like a mirror, reflect our future should be more emphasize on individual needs interests of each student as a result of stimulating the individuals and discovering the potential of each student.
TOPIC: ARGUMENT76 - The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.
"A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin."
WORDS: 401
TIME: 00:40:00
DATE: 2009-8-22 11:32:02
The author of the argument claims that the Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin. To justify the conclusion, the author points out that a study of a group of volunteer participated in the study of using the Luxess face cream. In addition, he indicates that during one month, the group of volunteer participated used the face cream after washed their with midl soap. Furthermore, he asserts that most of the volunteers reported a marked improvement in their skin looked and felt. However, based on merely a series of unwarranted assumption and evidence, the argument suffers form several critical flaws as follows.
Actually, in absence of data concerning what kind of the group of volunteers is. The argument treats a lack of proof that the credibility of selective sample, the quantity of sample and the efficiency of this study. Without this information, we cannot know the condition of those volunteers. For instance, what is their skin looked before experiment? And are they suffering the same problem of skin? We do not have any ideas. Hence, whether the Luxess cream has general effects is difficulty to be convinced.
Moreover, the author falsely assumes that there is no other reasons for the group of volunteer to enhance their skin quality. The study provides a vague data about the process of study. Maybe the group of volunteer is just suit for the mild soap or they also have used other cream during the experiment. Without though crucial information, we could not easily draw the conclusion that it is the Luxess cream's function on improving the skin looked and felt.
Finally, granted that the selective sample is credibility and the experiment process was scientific. We could not ignore that the truth of the report by group of volunteer participated in this study. It is entire possible that respondents would not be inclined to provide authentic and believable answer. Whereas even assumes that is truth, the result of the experiment is unsubstantial, which need provide more details about the condition of the skin looked and felt.
To sum up , the conclusion reached in this argument lacks credibility since the evidence is not realizable . To better evaluate the conclusion, we need more concert evidence that the sample of the group of volunteer and the details of the experiment process and result. Otherwise, the recommendation is not convincing and persuasive enough to be accepted.
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TOPIC: ARGUMENT4 - The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Realty and Fitch Realty-Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."
WORDS: 302
TIME: 00:55:00
DATE: 2009-8-21 11:09:51
The author of this argument claims that if local citizens want to sell their home quickly, while with a considerable price, they should use Adams. To justify this conclusion, the author points out that the Adams have more real estate agents than Fitch, which only have 25 real estate agents of whom work only part-time. In addition, he indicates that the homes Adams sold have more average price than Fitch's. Furthermore, he asserts that a case of point of his own experience shows Adams sell homes more quickly than Fitch. However, based on series of unwarranted assumption, the argument suffers from several critical flaws as follows.
To begin with, the mere fact that Adams has more full-time real estate agents than Fitch does not support the claim that Adams superior to Fitch. Maybe with large group of real estate agents the Adams suffers even lower efficiency. On the other hand, without sufficient data on Adams and Fitch's income and payout, the author should not conclude that the Adams has better benefit than Fitch. Even though the benefit of Adams is better, it does not naturally warrant the conclusion that better benefit has significantly contributed, and thus is causal to service and sell condition.
Moreover, the home sales that averaged $168.000 of Adams compare to Fithch's $144.000 is difficult to relate cause and effect merely by a direct correlation between good average price and considerable price. The author must also think about all other possible factors, such as the quality, the location and the facilities of different homes. The two companies may aim at different customers. The Adams's better average price may cause by their affluent customers.
Finally, the argument's proponent infer that quickly sold speed which functional well in the past will also take effect, which the market condition and sell records are effectiveness depend keep constant during the ten years. What the author neglects is the possibility that ten years ago the home market was not as active as now, or there are not so much citizens need to buy a home. Admittedly, the author has a bad experience in Fithch; however, it not means after ten years’ changing, the Fithch has the same condition as before. Lacking of relative information, the author’s assumption is difficult to convince.
To sum up, the conclusion reached in this argument lacks credibility since the evidence is not reliable. To better evaluate the argument, we need more concert evidence that the Aadms really have more efficient and better services than Fithch, while has a better ability and speed of selling home. Otherwise, the recommend is not persuading and convincing enough to be accepted.
TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
WORDS: 384
TIME: 01:00:00
DATE: 2009-8-21 16:44:33
The views that the study of history places should be focus on the groups of people rather than famous few has shown it self to be true throughout history. It is not to say that individuals research value. Indeed, in several field the success of one person is more representative than the group of people. But the contribution of the whole human has proven themselves’ research value superior as a result of their universality, their definitively and their sociality.
On one hand, there exit many fields that create an absolute space for its professors. Just like science realm, which is almost determined by a few scientists. Darwin is a case of point; he made the biology evolutionism by himself during a long term in some Pacific islands. His achievements have so much impact on biology that even nobody could exceed till now. Art realm is other relevant field, which the few people reflect the whole realm. Vinci, Monet and many other artists maybe product much more impacts during the history rather all of others' function. Concerning those who mentioned above may find out in terms of art value and make the art history clearly to some extend.
On the other hand, as a universal world, no subjects could be researched in history without the comprehensive details, which means we could not ignore the group of people who built up the essential ground and filled the deficient of
knowledge. For instance, even though some famous buildings are born due to a few excellent designer and engineer, it is actually achievement by the workers and evaluated by the public. However, most time we forget that the history is not achieved by one person.
Also, as a whole society, everybody is a part of the history, what means no religion and cultural could leave their people only exit by few famous people. Every nation was built by all its citizens, which have their own stories. To better realize the history of a society, we need to understand every parts of it. Consequently, discover the commonness and changing of its society. Last but not least, the group of people are the truly executor of every big issues. Such as the war, the construction and in terms of every little life items. Without the strength of the people, no leader could finish their aims.
From what has been discussed above, we may come to the conclusion that albeit the famous person could be the harbinger and leader of our society, the group of people is the most crucially constructor of the whole history. Hence, we could never neglect the group when come to history. |
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TOPIC: ARGUMENT112 - The following proposal was raised at a meeting of the Franklin City Council.
"Franklin Airport, which is on a bay, is notorious for flight delays. The airport management wants to build new runways to increase capacity but can only do so by filling in 900 acres of the bay. The Bay Coalition organization objects that filling in the bay will disrupt tidal patterns and harm wildlife. But the airport says that if it is permitted to build its new runways, it will fund the restoration of 1,000 acres of wetlands in areas of the bay that have previously been damaged by industrialization. This plan should be adopted, for it is necessary to reduce the flight delays, and the wetlands restoration part of the plan ensures that the bay's environment will actually be helped rather than hurt."
WORDS: 393
TIME: 00:50:00
DATE: 2009-8-19 11:40:07
Merely based on some unwarranted assumptions and evidence, the author concluded that the plan of building new runways will reduce the flight delays and the plan of funding on wetlands will help to environment than hurt. To justify this conclusion, the author points out that the plan of increasing capacity must follow by building new runways. In addition, he indicates that a plan of 1000 acres of wetlands to be protected will build to improve the environment. However the argument suffers from several logical flaws as follows.
To begin with, the argument depends on an unsubstantiated assumption that the plan of building new runways rather than for some other reasons. Yet no evidence is provided to exclude other possibilities that also contribute to this similar function. Such as improving the management ability of airport stuff and adjusting the schedule of fighting. Lacking of evidence that the flight delays were caused by capacity of runways, the author's assumption was unconvinced by me. Hence, to make the proposal strength he must give more details about why the flight always delays.
Moreover, commit a fallacy of false analogy, the author assume that funding on restoration of 1,000 acres of wetlands will fill the lost of filling in 900 acres of the bay. It is true that funding on wetlands will make benefits on local environment; however, there is no evidence the profits would rather than destroy the former. In Addition, in spite of mending in some facet, we could not ignore the harm of filling in 900 acres of the bay. As what the B.C. Organization said, it will not only have bad impact on tidal patterns but also has harm to wildlife. Therefore, the airport office should consider all the advantages and disadvantages.
Finally, the author false to conclude that is necessary of the plan of building new runways, which is showing an immature proposal. He should do more research on this proposal and giving specific data to proof his points. For instance, what degrees of destroy will the plan make and what’s the budget of this plan.
To sum up, the conclusion reached in the argument lacks credibility since the evidence is not reliable. To make the argument more convincing, the author should provide more information concerning the reasons of flight delays and why is the plan necessarily. Otherwise, the argument is unacceptable.
TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS: 430
TIME: 01:00:00
DATE: 2009-8-19 9:59:51
The author claims that the socialization of children today determines the destiny of society. I tend to basely agree that it truly has functions to some extent. However, based on some own actual observation of life. I also believe that some outstanding person obtain a great achievement without a standard social education. The author also points that in contemporary society, people do not know how to teach them to be socialized. In the following discussion, I would like to present evidence to support my standpoint.
On one hand, the socialization decides the individuals value points as a result of directing their behaviors.
The way which educators taught, the knowledge that the public accepted has a great deal of effects on children. For instance, if we told the children to be brave, they would be a leader when they grow up. If we let them to be benevolent, they would build a harmonious society in future. Furthermore, almost everybody need socialization in thier furture career, the theoretics should combine with the practics, which means if we do not know how to communication and deal with the relationship between the colleague.
On the other hand, socialization is not the only method, which could reflect the children's life. Ideal, confidence and many other facets are also importance to children. Take Martin Luther King for example, even though the discrimination to Africa American was within the law and social accept, he fight for the freedom and equality without social views. Roosevelt is also a case of point. Lacking of good education, the Roosevelt used his idea and persistence helping the Unite State conquered the Economy Recession and the Second World War. As what mentioned above, we could conclude that socialization is not the unique way, which could determines the destiny of society.
When it comes to education of the socialization, it is unilateral to identify that we have not yet learned how to raise children. Actually, the world around us has already let the children to be socialized. Such as the folks let the children know how to deal with the business in family issues, the school instruct the children how to get along with other students and the mass media providing so much information about our society that sometimes easily to be accept by the children.
From what has been discussed above, we may draw to the conclusion that the society, which reflect our lives, likes a mirror, should let the children know as early as possible; however, is not necessary to be considered as an unique method of improving our society. |
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