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一边听歌一边写...写了一个世纪了

being creative)是否比計畫(planning carefullyfind the best solution to a problem

Arranging from studying to working, humans have to learn how to bring an active solution in any situations. Making a plan could make everything clear to be comprehended. When all details are in order, it will lead to a broader space for people to consider. From this perspective, I tend to acclaim that a proper planning would be effective in solution making.

In the first place, planning could make progress less complicated than the origin state. In comparison, a simple and neat schedule will bring people confidence to achieve an efficient solution. Currently, I am struggling for TOEFL iBT and have to make effort on it. As many of you know, there are four parts, which causes me to split time for each field. Hence, I need to make a careful studying plan to gain improvement. Each one will take my different time, besides I also have to work and do exercise. In case that would not be totally lost myself, to rememorize what should I do next, I always focus on my time table. It gives a rise to make a more effective result to make progress for studying. I would like to have a plan, which brings every step in order. Consequently, I am confident to follow the solution on my schedule.

Secondly, without a careful plan, people may miss some procedures that becomes impossible for any solutions making. Take my working experience in office. That was not a large corporation and I had to organize the official principles as well as administrated stuff. I missed a very essential progress due to fatigue before people had meeting. It brought a pretty negative consequence later, which made me feel frustrated. If I could have put every progress in a plan, it would remind of me the content to avoid that problem. My own personal experience gave me the lesson that an attentive schedule could gain a strong solution when faced the difficulty.

Hence, a careful plan will assist to prevent the appearance of the problem; it will also become a helper for people to make a solution. The reason is that plan always promo what should do in the following procedure.
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发表于 2009-8-21 09:47:38 |只看该作者
Arranging from studying to working, humans have to learn how to bring an active solution in any situations. Making a plan could make(make 重复了呀) everything clear to be comprehended(这句话组织得不是很好,a comprehended plan could make everything clear). When all details are in order, it will lead to a broader space for people to consider. From this perspective, I tend to acclaim that a proper planning would be effective in solution making(最好能把being creative 加进去,因为你整段都没有提到).
In the first place, planning could make progress less complicated than the origin state. In comparison, a simple and neat schedule will bring people confidence to achieve an efficient solution. Currently, I am struggling for TOEFL iBT and have to make effort on it. As many of you know, there are four parts, which causes me to split time for each field. Hence, I need to make a careful studying plan to gain improvement. Each one will take my different time, besides I also have to work and do exercise. In case that would not be totally lost myself, to rememorize what should I do next, I always focus on my time table. It gives a rise to make a more effective result to make(你很喜欢用make啊) progress for studying. I would like to have a plan, which brings every step in order. Consequently, I am confident to follow the solution on my schedule.

Secondly, without a careful plan, people may miss some procedures that becomes(become) impossible(这句啥意思?) for any solutions making. Take my working experience in office[color=DarkOrange](举例有些唐突). That was not a large corporation and I had to organize the official principles as well as administrated stuff. I missed a very essential progress due to fatigue before people had meeting. It brought a pretty negative consequence later, which made me feel frustrated. If I could have put every progress in a plan, it would remind of me the content to avoid that problem. My own personal experience gave me the lesson that an attentive schedule could gain a strong solution when faced the difficulty

Hence, a careful plan will assist to prevent the appearance of the problem; it will also become a helper for people to make a solution. The reason is that plan always promo what should do in the following procedure.
个人认为在写文是还是要开一段来写being creative,这是题目给你提供的,不写可能会吃亏。总体是不错的,但LZ又很多惯用词哦,一连用了几遍,以后写作稍稍换一下,加油~
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我喜欢make因为很万能的. 写的时候就不自觉的老用..这个应该改..

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Arranging from studying to working, humans have to learn how to bring an active solution in any situations(situation). Making a plan could make everything clear to be comprehended. When all details are in order, it will lead to a broader space for people to consider. From this perspective, I tend to acclaim that a proper planning would be effective in solution making.

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In the first place, planning could make progress( procedure) less complicated than the origin state. In comparison, a simple and neat schedule will bring people confidence to achieve an efficient solution. Currently, I am struggling for TOEFL iBT and have to make effort on it. As many of you know, there are four parts, which causes me to split time for each field. Hence, I need to make a careful studying plan to gain improvement. Each one will take (spend)my different time, besides I also have to work and do exercise. In case that would not be totally lost myself, to rememorize what should I do next,(有些别扭,这样可能好些, In order to not be totally lost in the busy study, and be able to rememorize every steps that I should take) I always focus on my time table. It gives a rise to make a more effective result to make progress for studying. I would like to have a plan, which brings every step in order. Consequently, I am confident to follow the solution on my schedule.
事例举得很好

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Secondly, without a careful plan, people may miss some procedures that becomes impossible for any solutions making.whichis indispensible for the final solutions Take my working experience in office(for example). That was not a large corporation and I had to organize the official principles as well as administrated stuff. (In some cases)I missed a very essential progress due to fatigue before people had meeting. It brought a pretty negative consequence later, which made me feel frustrated. If I could have put every progress in a plan, it would remind of me the content to avoid that problem. (From that )My own personal experience gave me the lesson that an attentive schedule could gain a strong solution when faced(facing) the difficulty.
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Hence, a careful plan will assist to prevent the appearance of the problem; it will also become a helper for people to make a solution. The reason is that plan always promo what should do in the following procedure. 感觉整篇文章没有涉及be creative! 在第三段后面最好正面点题!0 g/ o: ?3 a

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