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[活动] 2009 进军美利坚作文组 wondersmiths2第七次作业 8.24 [复制链接]

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高分写作120  integrated writing practice 2
In the lecture, the speaker talks about the issue that whether or not Marc Polo had been China and lived in China for seventeen years. She strongly disagrees with the arguments stated in the reading passage due to the following reasons.

Firstly, the fact that Marco polo never used any Chinese or Mongolian place-names in his books does not mean that he never traveled to China. In fact, at that time, the Persian is the major language in European so it is normal for Marco polo to use the place-names from historic sources in Persian.

Secondly, it is not necessary to demonstrate that Marco Polo never had been China for the reason that he never mentioned the Chinese love of tea. Actually, tea was not yet the interests of all Chinese at that time and Marco Polo mostly lived in Northern China not Southern China where the origin of the love of tea was.

Finally, we cannot conclude that Marco Polo never lived in China since there is no evidence showing that Marco Polo served at the court of the Mongol ruler, or was appointed to the post of governor of Yang Zhou. Perhaps, people did not use real name referring to Marco Polo in the official documents in the old times, or the documents recording the events of Marco Polo have lost.
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In the lecture, the speaker talks about the issue that whether or not Marc Polo had been China and lived in China for seventeen years. She strongly disagrees with the arguments stated 好,学了!in the reading passage due to the following reasons.

Firstly, the fact that Marco polo never used any Chinese or Mongolian place-names in his books does not mean that he never traveled to China. In fact, at that time, the Persian is好像用过去式合适吧 the major language in European so it is normal for Marco polo to use the place-names from historic sources in Persian. - |5

dly, it is not necessary to demonstrate that Marco Polo never had been China for the reason that he never mentioned the Chinese love of tea没见过..再问问别人. Actually, tea was not yet the interests of all Chinese at that time and Marco Polo mostly lived in Northern China not Southern China where the origin of the love of tea was

Finally, we cannot conclude that Marco Polo never lived in China since there is no evidence showing that Marco Polo served at the court of the Mongol ruler, or was appointed to the post of governor of Yang Zhou. Perhaps, people did not use real name referring to Marco Polo in the official documents in the old times, or the documents recording the events of Marco Polo have lost.写的蛮好的, 句子语法没有大问题..最后一点我没写啊..不知道你的字数多少..好像不多的样子
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In the lecture, the speaker talks about the issue that whether or not Marc Polo had been China and lived in China for seventeen years. She strongly disagrees with the arguments stated in the reading passage due to the following reasons.开头写得不错

Firstly, the fact that Marco polo never used any Chinese or Mongolian place-names in his books does not mean that he never traveled to China. In fact, at that time, the Persian is the major language in European so it is normal for Marco polo to use the place-names from historic sources in Persian. 理由说的不是很详细,Persian首先给地方命名,说一很多地方的名字是他们起的,Persian是当时中国的主要贸易语言

Secondly, it is not necessary to demonstrate that Marco Polo never had been China for the reason that he never mentioned the Chinese love of teaChinesee love in tea吧. Actually, tea was not yet the interests of all Chinese at that time and Marco Polo mostly lived in Northern China not Southern China where the origin of the love of tea was.

Finally, we cannot conclude that Marco Polo never lived in China since there is no evidence showing that Marco Polo served at the court of the Mongol ruler, or was appointed to the post of governor of Yang Zhou. Perhaps, people did not use real name referring to Marco Polo in the official documents in the old times, or the documents recording the events of Marco Polo have lost.

总评:文章写得很好,内容可以在充实一点,第一个理由写得不全~~~~别的没问题了
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