CRACK 9T小组第3次作业－wwycherry

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writing:
Personally speaking, I prefer opening a new restaurant in our neighborhood. I believe it will make  people’s lives more convenient, support the local economy, and create a healthier community spirit.
First, food preparation is a tedious task., a new restaurant will make our lives more convenient.  it is not hard to imagine that provident housewives usually had to work for hours to prepare a single dinner. They had to buy home dirty vegetables which had to wash, meat which had to slice, and so on so forth. Each and every step of preparation was time-consuming task. On the contrary, the restaurant provide vegetables and meat clean and neat, some of them need only a few minutes to be made into delicious meals. Therefore, this change will greatly improve the way of people live. such a change will liberate many women and give them chance to do more meaningful things. For example, a higher pay job or a more respectful one.
Second, a new restaurant would also help the local economy. Building the restaurant would need to buy a great deal of food and produce from local markets. It would also create jobs for waiters,managers, and chefs. Perhaps most importantly, a new restaurant could also potentially attract business from the surrounding neighborhoods, bringing more investment into our community.
Last but not the least, the restaurant would provide us a public place to know each other. Our community has few suitable open place for people to meet and have conversations. People who were once strangers could meet in this restaurant and become better acquainted with one another, new friendships could be forged while old friendships could be strengthened.

speaking:
wwycherry@.163.com　密码：９９９６６６
因为级别不够　无法上传口语　口语在邮箱里　修改的同学辛苦了　谢谢

[ 本帖最后由 wwycherry 于 2007-7-20 22:29 编辑 ]

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怎么跟笑来的题材一样啊

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Personally speaking, I prefer opening a new restaurant in our neighborhood. I believe it will make  people’s lives more convenient, support the local economy, and create a healthier community spirit.
First, food preparation is a tedious task., a new restaurant will make our lives more convenient.  it is not hard to imagine that provident housewives usually had to work for hours to prepare a single dinner. They had to buy home dirty vegetables which had to wash, meat which had to slice, and so on so forth （一个即可）. Each and every （一个即可） step of preparation was time-consuming task. On the contrary, the restaurant provide(s) vegetables and meat clean and neat, some of them need only a few minutes to be made into delicious meals. Therefore, this change will greatly improve the way of people live. such a change will liberate many women and give them chance to do more meaningful things. For example, a higher pay (paid) job or a more respectful one.

这段的观点很新（for me），但是假如象2楼说的那样和笑来上的一样就不好了，会判雷同吧？

Second, a new restaurant would also help the local economy. Building the restaurant would need to buy a great deal of food and produce from local markets. It would also create jobs for waiters,  managers , and chefs. Perhaps most importantly, a new restaurant could also potentially attract business from the surrounding neighborhoods, bringing more investment into our community.

Last but not the least （个人不太喜欢这个短语，从gre开始就有太多人用了）, the restaurant would provide us a public place to know each other. Our community has few suitable open place for people to meet and have conversations. People who were once strangers could meet in this restaurant and become better acquainted with one another, new friendships could be forged while old friendships could be strengthened. 这个观点也不错

最后有个总结会好些。

holdingUID：2285054

听了一下口语
第一段有几个词的发音不太准，比如agree, game。还有就是时间好像是41秒，感觉你的语速正好，但是时间富余的话可以多说一些。
第二段没什么问题

还有，就是声音好像小了一些，我把音量全开了还是有些词听不出来

总体已经很好了，很流利，羡慕！！！